零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，且内容重复。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达，避免冗余。可以先直接回答问题，再用具体例子支持。

範例: I usually eat snacks after studying for a long time because I feel tired and need some energy. For example, yesterday I studied English for several hours and then ate a snack to relax and recharge.

建議: 回答内容前后矛盾，表达不清晰。建议明确表达观点，注意语法和词汇的准确使用，避免矛盾。

範例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me. Last year, I gained 20 kilograms because I ate too many snacks, so I believe they are bad for my health.

建議: 回答不连贯，语法错误多，表达不清楚。建议用简单句子直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持，避免无关内容。

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially fries. I enjoyed them because they made me happy during my free time.

建議: 表达不自然，语法和用词错误较多，句子不连贯。建议简化表达，使用正确的时态和词汇，清晰描述喜欢的零食及原因。

範例: I like snacks like juice and chocolate because they are sweet and comfort me when I feel sad. For example, I often eat chocolate when I am tired or upset because it makes me feel better.

× I usually eat snacks after a long period of study because it's very exhausted and I need to input some energy.

✓ I usually eat snacks after a long period of study because I am very exhausted and I need to take in some energy.

这里“it's very exhausted”错误地使用了“it”作为主语，实际上应该是“我”感到疲惫，且“exhausted”是形容词，需用“am”连接。建议用“I am very exhausted”表达我感到很累。

× For example, last day I have a long period of studying the English so I chose to examine after it and it made me calm down and survive.

✓ For example, last day I had a long period of studying English so I chose to take a break after it and it made me calm down and recover.

“last day”应为过去时间，动词应使用过去时“had”。“studying the English”中“the”不应出现，且“English”作为语言名词不加冠词。动词“examine”用错，应该用“take a break”表示休息。最后“survive”用词不当，应为“recover”表示恢复。

× I have putting on weight 20 kilograms because of the snacks last year.

✓ I put on 20 kilograms because of the snacks last year.

“have putting on”结构错误，正确表达过去发生的动作应使用一般过去时“put on”。“have been putting on”是现在完成进行时，但此处强调过去的具体时间点，应用过去时。

× Yes, I usually eat less when I was a young child because I can't wait.

✓ Yes, I usually ate less when I was a young child because I couldn't wait.

描述过去的习惯动作应使用过去时“ate”，且“can't wait”应改为过去时“couldn't wait”，保持时态一致。

× Can't help eating fries when I'm I'm free because business can make me happier and I can get more advice from it so I can't help eating those snacks.

✓ I can't help eating fries when I'm free because business makes me happier and I can get more advice from it, so I can't help eating those snacks.

句子开头缺少主语，应加“I”。“business can make”应改为“business makes”，主语为第三人称单数，动词需用第三人称单数形式。

× I like snacks such as the juice and the chocolates because they are so sweet that can comfort me when I was down.

✓ I like snacks such as juice and chocolates because they are so sweet that they can comfort me when I am down.

“the juice”和“the chocolates”不需要定冠词，且“when I was down”应改为“when I am down”，保持时态一致。

× For example, I usually eat some chocolate is drawing something exhausted and terrible that can help me happier and comfortable.

✓ For example, I usually eat some chocolate when I am feeling exhausted and terrible because it can help me feel happier and more comfortable.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词，且“is drawing something exhausted and terrible”表达不清。应改为“when I am feeling exhausted and terrible”表示状态，“help me happier and comfortable”应改为“help me feel happier and more comfortable”，形容词需用副词形式修饰动词。