零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'before 2 hours' 대신 'two hours ago'를 사용하고, 문장 구조를 더 명확하게 해야 합니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 더 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I usually eat snacks when I'm hungry but don't feel like having a full meal. For example, if I had lunch two hours ago and dinner is still four hours away, I might have a small snack to keep me going.

建議: 답변이 길고 중복된 표현이 많으며, 시제 일관성이 부족합니다. 'always ate' 대신 'usually eat'를 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 하며, 연결어를 활용해 논리적인 흐름을 만들어야 합니다.

範例: No, I don't think eating snacks like chocolate or cakes is healthy because they are too sweet. I know I should eat fruits like bananas or apples instead, but I don't really like them.

建議: 시제 일관성이 부족하고 문장 구조가 어색합니다. 'often eat' 대신 'often ate'를 사용하고, 문장을 더 명확하게 구성해야 합니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 이유를 자연스럽게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I lived with my grandmother. She usually gave me snacks secretly, so my parents didn't know about it.

建議: 문법 오류가 많고 문장이 길며, 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 'coffee have' 대신 'coffee has'를 사용하고, 문장을 두 개로 나누어 명확하게 표현해야 합니다. 또한, 연결어를 사용해 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I like coffee and chocolate, but coffee contains caffeine, which I think is unhealthy for me. Also, chocolate is too sweet, so it's not healthy either, but I enjoy the taste and find it hard to quit.

× I ate lunch before 2 hours, but I have to wait for a dinner for four hour, then I ate snacks.

✓ I ate lunch two hours ago, but I had to wait for dinner for four hours, then I ate snacks.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'before 2 hours' instead of 'two hours ago' to indicate past time. Also, 'have to wait' should be in past tense 'had to wait' to match the past context. 'For four hour' should be plural 'four hours' to agree with the quantity.

× No, I don't think it is healthy because I always ate chocolate or some cakes for snacks so it is so too sweet for me and it is unhealthy so I have to eat banana or apple but I don't like it.

✓ No, I don't think it is healthy because I always eat chocolate or some cakes for snacks, so they are too sweet for me and unhealthy. I have to eat bananas or apples, but I don't like them.

The use of 'ate' is incorrect because 'always' suggests a habitual action in the present, so 'eat' is appropriate. 'So too sweet' is incorrect word order; it should be 'too sweet'. Also, 'banana or apple' should be plural 'bananas or apples' to match the context. Pronouns should agree in number: 'they' and 'them' refer to plural items.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because I live with my grandmother so she usually gave me some snacks and it was secret to my mother and father.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I lived with my grandmother, so she usually gave me some snacks and it was a secret from my mother and father.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' and 'live' with past tense 'was young' and 'gave'. All verbs should be in past tense to maintain consistency. Also, 'secret to' should be 'secret from' to indicate concealment.

× I like coffee and chocolate but the coffee have a caffeine so it is unhealthy to me and the chocolate is too sweet so it is also not healthy to me but it tastes really good so I can quit it.

✓ I like coffee and chocolate, but the coffee has caffeine, so it is unhealthy for me, and the chocolate is too sweet, so it is also not healthy for me. However, it tastes really good, so I cannot quit it.

'The coffee have a caffeine' is incorrect; 'coffee' is singular and should use 'has' and 'caffeine' is uncountable without 'a'. 'Unhealthy to me' should be 'unhealthy for me'. The sentence is long and run-on; adding commas and conjunctions improves clarity. 'I can quit it' contradicts the meaning; 'cannot quit it' fits better.