零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề để trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó dùng các từ nối để liên kết các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Ngoài ra, nên tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I usually eat snacks during the break at school with my friends in the canteen. This helps me boost my mood and gives me energy so I can stay focused and not feel hungry in class.

建議: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, nên cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn về quan điểm của bạn.

範例: I used to eat snacks often because they tasted good, but now I think eating too many snacks is unhealthy. Therefore, I try to improve my diet by choosing fresh and healthy foods instead.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Dùng từ nối để liên kết các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Cố gắng cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về loại đồ ăn vặt bạn thích.

範例: When I was young, I often ate snacks every week. I usually bought them with my friends at the school canteen or with my family at the supermarket because there were many tasty and different types of snacks.

建議: Bạn nên dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn và cấu trúc câu tự nhiên. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Hãy giải thích rõ hơn lý do bạn thích sô cô la và cách bạn sử dụng nó.

範例: I have a sweet tooth, so I like eating chocolate. I often eat it at home because it tastes delicious and gives me energy. Also, I like to give chocolate as a gift to others.

× At school in the break time I usually have some snacks with my friend in my school's canteen because I want to boost my mood and get my energy from some small food so it can make me for efficient and not to be hungry in classroom.

✓ At school during break time I usually have some snacks with my friends in my school's canteen because I want to boost my mood and get my energy from some small food so it can make me more efficient and not hungry in the classroom.

The phrase 'in the break time' should be 'during break time' to correctly express the time period. 'With my friend' should be plural 'friends' if more than one friend is implied or 'friend' if singular; context suggests plural. 'Make me for efficient' is incorrect; it should be 'make me more efficient'. 'Not to be hungry in classroom' should be 'not hungry in the classroom' to use correct prepositions and article.

× Since I was in kindergarten I always eat snacks because I think it is tasty, but now I care more about myself so I think it is not good for my health.

✓ Since I was in kindergarten I have always eaten snacks because I thought they were tasty, but now I care more about myself so I think it is not good for my health.

The phrase 'I always eat snacks' should be in present perfect 'I have always eaten snacks' to indicate an action continuing from past to present. 'I think it is tasty' should be past tense 'I thought they were tasty' to match the past time frame 'since I was in kindergarten'.

× Now I need to be improve my health by the other healthy and fresh food that's next.

✓ Now I need to improve my health by eating other healthy and fresh foods next.

The phrase 'need to be improve' is incorrect; it should be 'need to improve'. 'By the other healthy and fresh food that's next' is awkward; 'by eating other healthy and fresh foods next' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I eat snacks every week when I was young, especially in kindergarten and primary school, I always go to canteen to buy some snacks with my friends or sometimes go to the supermarket with my family because snacks taste good and various of type.

✓ I ate snacks every week when I was young, especially in kindergarten and primary school. I always went to the canteen to buy some snacks with my friends or sometimes went to the supermarket with my family because snacks tasted good and were of various types.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I eat' and 'I always go' with past time 'when I was young'. All verbs should be in past tense to match the time frame. 'Various of type' is incorrect; it should be 'various types'.

× I am a sweetener so I like eating chocolate.

✓ I have a sweet tooth so I like eating chocolate.

The phrase 'I am a sweetener' is incorrect English. The correct expression is 'I have a sweet tooth' to indicate liking sweet foods.

× I always eating chocolate at home because it tastes good to me and I need to begin my energy from eating snacks.

✓ I always eat chocolate at home because it tastes good to me and I need to get my energy from eating snacks.

'I always eating' is incorrect; it should be 'I always eat' to use the simple present tense. 'Begin my energy' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'get my energy'.

× Besides that, I always use chocolate to give other people like a gift.

✓ Besides that, I always give chocolate to other people as a gift.

The phrase 'use chocolate to give other people like a gift' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'give chocolate to other people as a gift'.