零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh những câu không liên quan và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed because it helps me relax. For example, I often have some fruit or nuts while watching TV in the evening.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và chính tả (ví dụ: 'snakes' thay vì 'snacks'). Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để giải thích lý do và đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

範例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy because many snacks contain high levels of fat and sugar. For instance, eating too many sweets can increase the risk of diabetes and heart disease.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Hãy sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lỗi chính tả. Ngoài ra, bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because all children liked them. Although my parents did not allow me to eat too many, I still enjoyed treats like chips and candy.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trúc rõ ràng hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và chính tả (ví dụ: 'dry' nên là 'young'). Hãy sắp xếp câu trả lời mạch lạc, sử dụng từ nối và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể.

範例: I like to eat a variety of snacks such as French fries, yogurt, and fresh fruit. When I was younger, I often ate unhealthy snacks that I bought from the store.

× It depends and most likely based on my mood.

✓ It depends and is most likely based on my mood.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' before 'most likely based on my mood' to form a correct present participle phrase. Adding 'is' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I usually eat snacks when I feel bad and it will make you have to relieve my stress.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I feel bad because it helps me relieve my stress.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'It will make you have to relieve my stress' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the cause and effect relationship.

× Why is Next and watch TV?

✓ Then I watch TV.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct continuation of the previous idea.

× To be honest I think it is unhealthy for me to eat snakes because in a snake it has high levels of fatty acid and sweet will make many causes disease like diabetes or heart disease.

✓ To be honest, I think it is unhealthy for me to eat snacks because snacks have high levels of fatty acids and sugar, which can cause diseases like diabetes or heart disease.

The word 'snakes' is a wrong homophone for 'snacks'. Also, 'in a snake it has' is incorrect; it should be 'snacks have'. 'Sweet will make many causes disease' is ungrammatical; it should be 'sugar, which can cause diseases'. Pronouns and nouns are misused here.

× Absolutely yes, all of children also like snakes and when I was young I also like eat snacks a lot although my parents not allow me.

✓ Absolutely yes, all children also like snacks and when I was young I also liked to eat snacks a lot although my parents did not allow me.

'All of children' should be 'all children'. 'Snakes' should be 'snacks'. 'Like eat' should be 'liked to eat'. 'My parents not allow me' should be 'my parents did not allow me'. These are plural and tense agreement issues.

× There's a lot of snacks I love to eat like potato, French fries, yogurt or maybe the fruit now but when I was dry I ate unhealthy snacks like snacks when I buy from store.

✓ There are a lot of snacks I love to eat like potatoes, French fries, yogurt or maybe fruit now, but when I was young I ate unhealthy snacks like the ones I bought from the store.

'There's' should be 'There are' because 'snacks' is plural. 'Potato' should be plural 'potatoes'. 'The fruit' should be 'fruit' without 'the'. 'When I was dry' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was young'. 'Like snacks when I buy from store' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'like the ones I bought from the store'.