零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有重复表达。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复。

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening because after a long day of doing homework, I feel impatient or upset, so I eat chips to calm myself down.

建議: 回答内容较为简单，语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并丰富细节说明原因。

範例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because sweets and chocolates contain a lot of sugar, which can make me gain weight. Also, chips and fried foods have a high oil content, which is bad for health.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达感受，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were very delicious. Eating them made me feel very happy, probably the happiest I have ever felt.

建議: 回答语法错误严重，表达不连贯且重复。建议使用简洁的句子，清楚表达喜欢的零食及原因，并避免重复。

範例: I like to eat chips and other fried foods because they are crunchy and make a loud sound when I eat them, which helps me feel less stressed.

× Maybe at evening because after a whole day tiring work on my homework I will feel an impatient or feel mad so I need to eat like chips or something to calm me, calm myself down.

✓ Maybe in the evening because after a whole day of tiring work on my homework I will feel impatient or mad so I need to eat chips or something to calm myself down.

这里“at evening”应改为“in the evening”，表示时间的正确介词用法；“a whole day tiring work”应改为“a whole day of tiring work”，需要介词“of”连接名词短语；“an impatient”错误使用了冠词和名词，应该用形容词“impatient”；“eat like chips”中“like”不需要，直接说“eat chips”；“calm me, calm myself down”重复且不自然，保留“calm myself down”即可。

× Maybe at evening because after a whole day tiring work on my homework I will feel an impatient or feel mad so I need to eat like chips or something to calm me, calm myself down.

✓ Maybe in the evening because after a whole day of tiring work on my homework I will feel impatient or mad so I need to eat chips or something to calm myself down.

“calm me”用法不当，应该用反身代词“calm myself”，表示自己使自己冷静。

× I think no because like sweet or chocolate is too sweet that will makes me fat and also like chips or other fried foods.

✓ I think no because sweets or chocolate are too sweet and will make me fat, and also chips or other fried foods.

“like sweet or chocolate”中“sweet”应为复数“sweets”，表示甜食；“that will makes me fat”中“makes”应为“make”，因为主语是复数；“like”不需要，直接列举即可。

× I think no because like sweet or chocolate is too sweet that will makes me fat and also like chips or other fried foods.

✓ I think no because sweets or chocolate are too sweet and will make me fat, and also chips or other fried foods.

动词“makes”与复数主语不一致，应改为“make”。

× I think it's it has a lot of oil so it's not healthy.

✓ I think it has a lot of oil so it's not healthy.

“it's it has”重复，应去掉多余的“it”。

× Yes, because I think it's really, really delicious and if I when I once eat the snacks, I will feel like a very happy was the happiest that I ever felt.

✓ Yes, because I think they're really, really delicious and when I eat the snacks, I feel very happy; it was the happiest feeling I ever had.

“if I when I once eat”结构混乱，应简化为“when I eat”；“will feel”应改为一般现在时“feel”，因为描述习惯；“was the happiest that I ever felt”表达不完整，应改为“it was the happiest feeling I ever had”。

× Yes, because I think it's really, really delicious and if I when I once eat the snacks, I will feel like a very happy was the happiest that I ever felt.

✓ Yes, because I think they're really, really delicious and when I eat the snacks, I feel very happy; it was the happiest feeling I ever had.

“it's”指代复数“snacks”应使用“they're”。

× I like to eat like chips or some fried fried food because it has a lot of When I eat it it, it will have some sounds very loud and I think it can makes me makes me less stressful.

✓ I like to eat chips or some fried food because it makes a loud sound when I eat it, and I think it can make me less stressed.

“like”不需要；“fried fried food”重复，应去掉一个“fried”；“it has a lot of When I eat it it”语序混乱，应改为“it makes a loud sound when I eat it”；“can makes me makes me”重复且动词形式错误，应为“can make me”；“less stressful”应改为“less stressed”，因为“stressful”形容事物，“stressed”形容人。

× I like to eat like chips or some fried fried food because it has a lot of When I eat it it, it will have some sounds very loud and I think it can makes me makes me less stressful.

✓ I like to eat chips or some fried food because it makes a loud sound when I eat it, and I think it can make me less stressed.

动词“has”和“makes”与主语不一致，应改为“makes”。