零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear due to repetition and grammar issues. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding repeated words and structuring your sentences better. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening because after a long day, I like to relax and recharge. For example, I often have fruits or nuts as healthy options.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and is a bit unclear. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Also, avoid redundancy and be specific about your opinion.

範例: Yes, I think eating snacks in moderation is healthy because they provide energy and help us feel refreshed. Moreover, choosing healthier options like fruits or nuts is beneficial.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors with the use of 'used to'. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use correct grammar. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details connected with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks after school when I was young because my parents rewarded me for good behaviour. I also saved money to buy my favourite snacks.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and has repetition. Make sure to complete your sentences and avoid repeating words. Provide a clear topic sentence and add supporting details with linking words to make your answer coherent and informative.

範例: I have a sweet tooth, so I like eating chocolates or candies mostly after meals. I prefer dark chocolate because it tastes rich and is healthier than other sweets.

× I usually eat snacks in the evening and because after a long day I want to feel I like to relax and recharge and eating something like helps me to to do that.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening because after a long day I want to relax and recharge, and eating something like that helps me to do that.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and because' together, which is redundant. Also, the phrase 'I want to feel I like to relax' is awkward and unclear. The corrected sentence removes the redundant conjunction and clarifies the meaning by simplifying the structure. Additionally, 'to to' is a typographical error corrected to 'to'.

× And for example I often have some fruits or nuts as healthy option.

✓ For example, I often have some fruits or nuts as a healthy option.

The phrase 'as healthy option' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'healthy option'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article. Adding 'a' corrects the grammar.

× I believe yes, in moderation it is very it can provide us with energy and makes us feel refreshed and we can switch to healthier options like fruits or nuts.

✓ I believe that, in moderation, it can provide us with energy, make us feel refreshed, and help us switch to healthier options like fruits or nuts.

The original sentence has redundant and awkward phrasing: 'it is very it can provide'. The correction removes redundancy and uses modal verb 'can' properly. Also, parallel verb forms are used ('provide', 'make', 'help') for clarity and correctness.

× Oh yes, I loved eating snacks after school and my parents also used to.

✓ Oh yes, I loved eating snacks after school, and my parents used to give me snacks too.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'used to' without an object or verb, making it incomplete. The correction completes the sentence by specifying what the parents used to do, improving clarity and sentence structure.

× My parents also used to provide me used to give me snacks for my good behaviour and I often used to save my money to buy my favorite snacks.

✓ My parents also used to give me snacks for my good behaviour, and I often used to save my money to buy my favourite snacks.

The phrase 'used to provide me used to give me' is repetitive and incorrect. The correction removes the redundancy and uses 'used to give me' correctly. Also, a comma is added before 'and' to separate the two independent clauses.

× So I have a sweet tooth. I like eating chocolates or candies mostly after a meal and and I prefer.

✓ So, I have a sweet tooth. I like eating chocolates or candies mostly after a meal, and I prefer them.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and I prefer' without specifying what is preferred, making it incomplete. The correction completes the sentence by adding 'them' to clarify the object of preference. Also, the repeated 'and' is corrected to a single 'and'.