零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like "umm" and "uh." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a clearer structure. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain with specific examples using linking words.

範例: I usually eat snacks during the daytime, specifically after lunch and before dinner. For instance, I often have noodles or fruits to keep it healthy, but sometimes I also enjoy chips as a treat.

建議: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand" to contrast ideas. Also, be more specific about what makes snacks healthy or unhealthy.

範例: I think the healthiness of snacks depends on their type. For example, junk food snacks are unhealthy; however, choosing fruits or natural juices as snacks is a healthier option.

建議: Your answer is a bit repetitive and informal. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words like "because" and "so" to improve coherence. Avoid informal phrases like "right?"

範例: Yes, I ate snacks when I was young, but not as often as I do now. This is because my parents limited my snack intake, and now that I live independently, I have more freedom to snack whenever I want.

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like "sometimes" and "also" to list your preferences clearly. Be specific and concise to make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: I enjoy a variety of snacks. Sometimes I crave chocolate or sour candies, other times I prefer chips or noodles. I also like different kinds of fruits and occasionally ice cream.

× Umm, it really just depends on what are we eating as snack.

✓ Umm, it really just depends on what we are eating as a snack.

The sentence has incorrect word order for a statement. In English, the subject usually comes before the verb in statements. 'What are we eating' is a question form, but here it should be a statement: 'what we are eating'. Also, 'as snack' should be 'as a snack' to use the correct article.

× Like if we are eating junk food as snack, that's not healthy.

✓ Like if we are eating junk food as a snack, that's not healthy.

The phrase 'as snack' is missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'snack'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article or determiner.

× But if you're replacing snacks with healthier options like fruits, juice and all, I think that's better.

✓ But if you're replacing snacks with healthier options like fruit, juice and all, I think that's better.

The word 'fruits' is plural but in this context, 'fruit' as an uncountable noun is more appropriate when referring to fruit in general as a healthier option.

× Yes, I did, but actually I eat more snacks now because as a child we were not allowed to have a lot of snacks, right?

✓ Yes, I did, but actually I eat more snacks now because when I was a child we were not allowed to have a lot of snacks, right?

The phrase 'as a child' is better replaced with 'when I was a child' to clearly indicate past time. Also, 'eat' is present tense which is correct here because the speaker is contrasting past and present.

× So no, not that much compared to now because I think since I'm away from home because there's no one to stop me, I've started snacking a lot.

✓ So no, not that much compared to now because I think since I'm away from home and there's no one to stop me, I've started snacking a lot.

The sentence has a run-on structure with two 'because' clauses. Replacing the second 'because' with 'and' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× It is really bunch of mixed stuff, like sometimes I crave for chocolate or sour candies and sometimes chips, sometimes noodles or sometimes just fruits.

✓ It is really a bunch of mixed stuff, like sometimes I crave chocolate or sour candies and sometimes chips, sometimes noodles or sometimes just fruit.

The phrase 'really bunch' is missing the article 'a' before 'bunch'. Also, 'crave for' is incorrect; the verb 'crave' does not need 'for'. 'Fruits' should be 'fruit' as an uncountable noun here.

× It is really bunch of mixed stuff, like sometimes I crave for chocolate or sour candies and sometimes chips, sometimes noodles or sometimes just fruits.

✓ It is really a bunch of mixed stuff, like sometimes I crave chocolate or sour candies and sometimes chips, sometimes noodles or sometimes just fruit.

The verb 'crave' does not require the preposition 'for'. The correct form is 'crave chocolate', not 'crave for chocolate'.

× Different kind of fruits and ice cream to a lot of ice cream so much.

✓ Different kinds of fruit and ice cream, and a lot of ice cream too.

'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' because it refers to multiple types. 'Fruits' should be 'fruit' as an uncountable noun. The phrase 'to a lot of ice cream so much' is awkward and corrected to 'and a lot of ice cream too' for clarity and correctness.