零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be specific about the time and reason for eating snacks.

範例: I usually eat snacks after I finish work and get home because I feel tired and need to recharge my energy.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

範例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most snacks contain a lot of fat and carbonation, which can be harmful to my body.

建議: Your answer is understandable but needs better grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to explain the cultural aspect more clearly and avoid awkward phrasing.

範例: Yes, when I was young, I often shared snacks with my friends because it is a common culture in Korea to share food.

建議: Your answer should be more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your preferences and habits.

範例: I usually like to eat potato chips because they are sweet and salty. They were very popular in Korea when I was young, and I still buy them sometimes nowadays.

× When I finish the work, I usually buy some snacks when I back home because after work I usually spend my own energy.

✓ When I finish work, I usually buy some snacks when I get back home because after work I usually spend my own energy.

The verb 'back' is incorrectly used without an auxiliary verb. The correct phrase is 'get back home' to indicate returning home. This is a present tense issue because the sentence describes habitual actions.

× That's why I just want to. Get some energy from snake.

✓ That's why I just want to get some energy from snacks.

The sentence is fragmented and 'snake' is a typo for 'snack'. The sentence should be combined properly to convey the intended meaning. This is a sentence structure error.

× Each barely on harsh for me because I I just want to make a good shape.

✓ Eating snacks is barely harsh for me because I just want to keep a good shape.

The phrase 'Each barely on harsh' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'Eating snacks is barely harsh' to express the intended meaning. Also, 'make a good shape' is better expressed as 'keep a good shape'. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and awkward phrasing.

× But usually snack has a lot of pad and carbonation that's why it's not good.

✓ But usually snacks have a lot of fat and carbonation, that's why they're not good.

'Pad' is a typo for 'fat', and 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match 'have'. Also, 'that's why it's not good' should be 'they're not good' to agree with plural 'snacks'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives and subject-verb agreement.

× Yeah, so when I was young, I usually post some snack every day for a share to my friend.

✓ Yeah, so when I was young, I usually bought some snacks every day to share with my friends.

The verb 'post' is incorrect in this context; 'bought' is the correct past tense verb for purchasing. Also, 'snack' should be plural 'snacks', and 'for a share to my friend' should be 'to share with my friends'. This is a past tense issue and incorrect preposition use.

× It's kind of culture in Korea.

✓ It's kind of a culture in Korea.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'culture'. This is an article error and incorrect use of prepositions.

× I usually eat potato chips, it's very sweet and salty that way.

✓ I usually eat potato chips; they're very sweet and salty that way.

The sentence is a run-on and should be separated properly. Also, 'it's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'potato chips'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives and sentence structure error.

× It's very popular in Korea when I was young then.

✓ They were very popular in Korea when I was young.

The sentence mixes present tense 'is' with past time 'when I was young'. It should be past tense 'were' to match the time frame. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to refer to plural 'potato chips'. This is a past tense issue and subject-verb agreement.

× Nowadays I sometimes bought this one as well.

✓ Nowadays I sometimes buy this one as well.

'Bought' is past tense, but 'nowadays' indicates present habitual action, so 'buy' should be used. This is a past tense issue.