零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有些重复且表达不够清晰，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且更自然地表达时间频率。

範例: I usually eat snacks very rarely because I'm trying to lose weight. However, once a week, I allow myself to enjoy any food I like as a treat.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够流畅，建议使用更准确的句型，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Since I rarely eat snacks, I think it doesn't have a big impact on my health. Eating snacks once a week or every two weeks is not unhealthy in my opinion.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清的问题，建议简化句子，避免不必要的手势描述，并且注意单词拼写。

範例: When I was young, I used to eat snacks every day because I really enjoyed them. As a result, I gained weight quickly and had to start eating healthier food.

建議: 回答不连贯且有语法错误，建议用完整句子表达喜好，避免重复和拼写错误，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: I like to eat snacks from McDonald's because they are tasty and affordable. Usually, once a week, I treat myself to their fries or other snacks, even though I know they are not very healthy.

× Well, because I'm losing my weight and losing my weight now, so I seldom eat the snacks, but when I have once a week the meals to eat everything I want, I will take that step at that time.

✓ Well, because I'm losing weight now, I seldom eat snacks, but once a week when I have a meal to eat everything I want, I will do that at that time.

这里“I'm losing my weight and losing my weight now”重复且不自然，改为“I'm losing weight now”更简洁。"the snacks"中“the”不必要，改为“snacks”。"when I have once a week the meals to eat everything I want"语序混乱，改为“once a week when I have a meal to eat everything I want”。"I will take that step at that time"表达不清，改为“I will do that at that time”。整体时态保持现在进行时和一般现在时。

× Well due to my frequency of eating snack is very low, so I think it's not so healthy. But it cannot be said to unhealthy to have snacks once a week or about one once a 15 days.

✓ Well, due to my frequency of eating snacks being very low, I think it's not so unhealthy. But it cannot be said to be unhealthy to have snacks once a week or about once every 15 days.

“eating snack”中“snack”应为复数“snacks”，因为表示一般意义。"it's not so healthy"与上下文意思矛盾，应为“not so unhealthy”。"about one once a 15 days"表达错误，改为“about once every 15 days”。

× Well, definitely you can see from my gestures, I used to eat snacks every day and I loved it and I enjoyed eating snacks so my weight increased rapidly and then so I need to lose my weight to eat something healthy instead of eating snake.

✓ Well, definitely you can see from my gestures, I used to eat snacks every day and I loved it and enjoyed eating snacks, so my weight increased rapidly. Then I needed to lose weight and eat something healthy instead of eating snacks.

“then so I need to lose my weight”时态不一致，描述过去应使用过去时“needed”。“eating snake”应为“eating snacks”，拼写错误。句子过长，适当断句更清晰。

× It's definitely cheap, made from McDonald's. I think it's the most delicious food chips I have ever eat. Every once a week. Every time I have a chance to eat something I really want to eat, which is not so healthy, I will always turn to the MacDonald to have a cheap.

✓ It's definitely cheap, made by McDonald's. I think it's the most delicious chips I have ever eaten. Once a week, every time I have a chance to eat something I really want, which is not so healthy, I will always go to McDonald's to have chips.

“made from McDonald's”应为“made by McDonald's”，表示制造者。"the most delicious food chips"表达冗余，改为“the most delicious chips”。“I have ever eat”动词时态错误，应为“have ever eaten”。“Every once a week”表达错误，改为“Once a week”。“turn to the MacDonald to have a cheap”表达错误，改为“go to McDonald's to have chips”。