零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'like' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'. For example, you can say, 'I usually eat snacks in the evening because I feel a bit hungry and stressed after work, so having snacks helps me reduce my cravings and refresh myself.'

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening because I feel a bit hungry and stressed after work, so having snacks helps me reduce my cravings and refresh myself.

建議: Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'reduce my relaxation' and 'eat the refreshes me more'. Use clear and relevant vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, 'Yes, I prefer healthy snacks such as fruits and nuts in the evening because they help me feel better and enjoy my time more.'

範例: Yes, I prefer healthy snacks such as fruits and nuts in the evening because they help me feel better and enjoy my time more.

建議: Try to speak more clearly and avoid repetition and filler words. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. For example, 'Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I used to play a lot and felt very hungry, so snacks helped me regain energy.'

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I used to play a lot and felt very hungry, so snacks helped me regain energy.

建議: Reduce the use of filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. For example, 'I like to eat healthy snacks like nuts and fruits. On my days off, I prepare Indian snacks, and my family and I enjoy them together while chatting.'

範例: I like to eat healthy snacks like nuts and fruits. On my days off, I prepare Indian snacks, and my family and I enjoy them together while chatting.

× So because after my work I will be like little bit of stressful and I'm like a little hungry.

✓ So because after my work I am a little bit stressed and I feel a little hungry.

The use of 'will be' is incorrect here as the sentence refers to a habitual state after work, not a future event. The correct modal verb usage is the present simple 'am' to describe a current state. Also, 'stressful' is an adjective describing things, not feelings; 'stressed' is the correct adjective for feelings.

× and also eats freshens me up.

✓ and also it freshens me up.

The verb 'eats' is incorrectly used here. The correct structure is 'it freshens me up' where 'freshens' is the verb and 'me up' is the object and particle. 'Eats freshens me up' is grammatically incorrect.

× Yes, I always prefer healthier snacks for my evenings, for example fruits and nuts.

✓ Yes, I always prefer healthier snacks in the evenings, for example fruits and nuts.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used with 'my evenings'. The correct preposition to indicate time is 'in' when referring to parts of the day like 'in the evenings'.

× So because of that, uh, I can enjoy my evenings much better and I can reduce my relaxation and eat the refreshes me more.

✓ So because of that, I can enjoy my evenings much better and I can relax more and it refreshes me more.

The phrase 'reduce my relaxation' is incorrect; relaxation is positive and should be increased, not reduced. Also, 'eat the refreshes me more' is ungrammatical; it should be 'it refreshes me more' referring to the snacks.

× Yes, when I was young, I I guess I'm, I remember that two or three times.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I guess I remember two or three times.

The phrase 'I I guess I'm' is incorrect and redundant. The correct form is 'I guess I remember'. Also, 'that' is unnecessary here.

× because whenever at that time we are like mostly playing a lot at that time we have like a cravings and we will be like a more hungry.

✓ because whenever at that time we were mostly playing a lot, we had cravings and we were hungrier.

The verb tenses should be past to match 'at that time'. 'We are' should be 'we were', 'we have like a cravings' should be 'we had cravings' (no 'a' before plural 'cravings'), and 'we will be like a more hungry' should be 'we were hungrier'.

× So at that time I used to eat most.

✓ So at that time I used to eat the most.

The phrase 'eat most' is incomplete; it should be 'eat the most' to indicate frequency or quantity.

× So I always prefer to eat healthier snacks such as nuts, fruits, uh, uh, also, uh, some days whenever I have off, I prepare some snacks, uh, like, uh, especially the Indian snacks, I prepare that one and, uh, uh, as a family, we enjoy that a lot.

✓ So I always prefer to eat healthier snacks such as nuts and fruits. Also, on some days whenever I have a day off, I prepare some snacks, especially Indian snacks, and as a family, we enjoy them a lot.

The phrase 'some days whenever I have off' is incorrect; it should be 'on some days whenever I have a day off'. Also, 'especially the Indian snacks, I prepare that one' is awkward; better to say 'especially Indian snacks'. 'Enjoy that a lot' should be 'enjoy them a lot' referring to snacks (plural).

× And at that time we used to do talk a lot.

✓ And at that time we used to talk a lot.

The phrase 'used to do talk' is incorrect; the correct form is 'used to talk' to indicate habitual past action.