零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific examples using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure correct grammar, such as 'in the evening' instead of 'at the evening time'.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening. For example, I enjoy bakery items like samosas, puffs, and chicken rolls because they are tasty and satisfying.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing due to double negatives and unclear phrasing. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons using linking words. Also, avoid filler sounds and improve sentence structure.

範例: I think snacks are not very healthy because they only satisfy hunger temporarily. Moreover, eating snacks continuously can increase the risk of heart diseases, so it is important to eat them in moderation.

建議: Your answer lacks directness and has grammatical errors. Respond directly to the question first, then add specific supporting details with proper linking words. Use correct plural forms and sentence structures.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Children like me enjoyed various affordable snacks available in markets worldwide because they were tasty and easy to buy.

建議: Your answer should be clearer and more organized. Start with a direct statement about your favourite snacks, then explain why you like them using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and improve grammar.

範例: I like to eat snacks such as chips, chicken rolls, burgers, and KFC because they taste delicious. However, I believe eating snacks continuously is not good for the body.

× I usually eat snacks at the evening time and this essential for me to eat any type of snacks, uh, from the bakery items and I like to eat snacks like samosa pups and chicken roll, etcetera.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening and it is essential for me to eat any type of snacks, uh, from bakery items and I like to eat snacks like samosas, puffs, and chicken roll, etcetera.

The phrase 'at the evening time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for parts of the day. Also, 'this essential' lacks a verb; it should be 'it is essential'. 'The bakery items' should be 'bakery items' without 'the' because it refers to items in general. Additionally, 'samosa pups' seems to be a mispronunciation or typo; it should be 'samosas' and 'puffs'.

× I don't think that snacks is not essential for our health, but for our hunger.

✓ I don't think that snacks are essential for our health, but for our hunger.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, the sentence contains a double negative 'don't think' and 'not essential' which is confusing; the correction removes the double negative for clarity.

× We want to eat these type of snacks, uh, at the evening time.

✓ We want to eat these types of snacks, uh, in the evening.

'These type' should be 'these types' because 'these' is plural. Also, 'at the evening time' should be 'in the evening' as the correct preposition for parts of the day.

× When eating continuously, it leads to some heartbeat diseases, Umm, so it has a limitation for eating this type of snacks.

✓ Eating continuously can lead to some heart diseases, so there should be a limitation on eating this type of snacks.

'Heartbeat diseases' is incorrect; the correct term is 'heart diseases'. Also, 'it has a limitation for eating' is awkward; better to say 'there should be a limitation on eating'.

× Yes, of course, children's and young peoples are relatively likes to eat these types of snack items and it is cheap rate for people to buy and eat it.

✓ Yes, of course, children and young people relatively like to eat these types of snack items and they are cheap for people to buy and eat.

'Children's' is possessive and incorrect here; it should be 'children'. 'Young peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people'. 'Are relatively likes' is incorrect; it should be 'relatively like'. 'It is cheap rate' is incorrect; better to say 'they are cheap'. Also, pronouns should agree in number.

× So they like to eat different type of snacks that is available in the markets all over the world.

✓ So they like to eat different types of snacks that are available in markets all over the world.

'Different type' should be 'different types' because it refers to multiple kinds. 'That is' should be 'that are' to agree with the plural 'types'. 'The markets' can be 'markets' as a general statement.

× I like to eat bakeries like chips, items, pops, chicken, roll, burger, KFC, et cetera, and it's really tasty for me to eat it.

✓ I like to eat bakery items like chips, puffs, chicken roll, burger, KFC, etc., and they are really tasty for me to eat.

'Bakeries' is a place, not items; the correct term is 'bakery items'. 'Pops' likely means 'puffs'. 'Chicken, roll' should be 'chicken roll'. 'It's really tasty' should be 'they are really tasty' to agree with plural items.

× And I think that eating snacks is good, but continuously eating is low essential over the body.

✓ And I think that eating snacks is good, but continuously eating is not very good for the body.

'Low essential over the body' is incorrect and unclear. A better expression is 'not very good for the body'. Also, 'continuously eating' is better than 'continuously eating' but the meaning is preserved.