零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和连词，使表达更流畅。

範例: I usually eat snacks after playing video games or studying. Also, I like to have some snacks when I am relaxing.

建議: 表达不清晰，语法错误多，逻辑不连贯。建议使用简单句表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Snacks are delicious, but they are not very healthy. It is hard to control eating them, so I am trying to stop eating snacks.

建議: 回答内容不够具体，表达混乱，语法错误较多。建议明确表达过去和现在的对比，并避免不相关的信息。

範例: I did not eat snacks often when I was young because my family was poor. But now, I like to eat snacks more often.

建議: 回答中有词汇错误（snakes应为snacks），表达不够准确。建议使用正确词汇，简洁描述喜欢的零食，并说明原因。

範例: I like to eat spicy snacks such as spicy chips because I come from Sichuan province, which is famous for its spicy food.

× I usually eat snacks on after play, video games and after study and when I was relax I like to eat some snacks.

✓ I usually eat snacks after playing video games and after studying, and when I am relaxed, I like to eat some snacks.

动词后接-ing形式表示动作的进行或作为介词的宾语。这里play和study应改为playing和studying，relax应改为形容词relaxed。

× I usually eat snacks on after play, video games and after study and when I was relax I like to eat some snacks.

✓ I usually eat snacks after playing video games and after studying, and when I am relaxed, I like to eat some snacks.

介词on用法错误，应该直接用after加动名词形式。

× Actually not bad, you know, snack is very so delicious, but it's make people want to eat.

✓ Actually, not bad, you know, snacks are very delicious, but they make people want to eat.

主语snack应为复数snacks，谓语动词make应与复数主语一致用make。

× Actually not bad, you know, snack is very so delicious, but it's make people want to eat.

✓ Actually, not bad, you know, snacks are very delicious, but they make people want to eat.

snack应为复数形式snacks，且代词it应改为they与复数主语一致。

× Actually not bad, you know, snack is very so delicious, but it's make people want to eat.

✓ Actually, not bad, you know, snacks are very delicious, but they make people want to eat.

very和so不能连用，应选择其中一个。

× It's hardly to control, but I I know it's an unhealthy I'm trying to stop to eat snakes.

✓ It's hard to control, but I know it's unhealthy. I'm trying to stop eating snacks.

hardly是副词，表示几乎不，hard是形容词，表示困难。这里应用hard。动词stop后接动名词形式。snakes应为snacks。

× It's hardly to control, but I I know it's an unhealthy I'm trying to stop to eat snakes.

✓ It's hard to control, but I know it's unhealthy. I'm trying to stop eating snacks.

重复使用I I是错误，应去掉重复。

× No, when I was young it's hard to me to eat snacks because my family is very poor.

✓ No, when I was young it was hard for me to eat snacks because my family was very poor.

描述过去情况，谓语动词应使用过去时。

× No, when I was young it's hard to me to eat snacks because my family is very poor.

✓ No, when I was young it was hard for me to eat snacks because my family was very poor.

hard to me用法错误，应为hard for me。

× So that case when I grow up, I like to eat snacks so much and I think it from the Yankees, I like to eat.

✓ So in that case, when I grew up, I liked to eat snacks so much and I think it is from the Yankees, I like to eat.

描述过去情况，grow up和like应使用过去时grew up和liked。

× So that case when I grow up, I like to eat snacks so much and I think it from the Yankees, I like to eat.

✓ So in that case, when I grew up, I liked to eat snacks so much and I think it is from the Yankees, I like to eat.

短语so that case用法错误，应为so in that case。

× I like eat some spicy snakes such as, you know, in a fam, a famous Chinese snake and such as spicy chips and so on.

✓ I like to eat some spicy snacks such as, you know, a famous Chinese snack and such as spicy chips and so on.

snakes应为snacks，表示零食。

× I like eat some spicy snakes such as, you know, in a fam, a famous Chinese snake and such as spicy chips and so on.

✓ I like to eat some spicy snacks such as, you know, a famous Chinese snack and spicy chips and so on.

in a fam用法错误，应去掉。

× Because I'm from Sichuan province, It's a, it's a province that people can eat so spicy.

✓ Because I'm from Sichuan province, it's a province where people can eat very spicy food.

eat后应接名词或动名词短语，不能直接接形容词spicy。

× Because I'm from Sichuan province, It's a, it's a province that people can eat so spicy.

✓ Because I'm from Sichuan province, it's a province where people can eat very spicy food.

so spicy用法不当，修饰动词应使用副词very spicy food。