零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid redundancy. For example, you can say when you usually eat snacks and with whom, in a clear and structured way.

範例: I usually eat snacks when I watch movies on Netflix or YouTube. Also, I like to have some snacks when I hang out with my friends.

建議: Your answer is not very clear and has many pauses and repetitions. Try to express your opinion directly and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid unnecessary fillers and focus on clear pronunciation.

範例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain additives and a lot of sugar. Therefore, eating too many snacks can harm my health.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear pronunciation and grammar mistakes. Try to speak more clearly and organize your answer with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I really liked potato chips and chocolates because they tasted good.

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but is not very clear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use linking words properly and avoid redundancy. Also, clarify your ideas with specific examples and correct vocabulary.

範例: It depends on the situation. When I hang out with my friends, I usually eat potato chips or popcorn. However, if I need energy, I choose to eat chocolate.

× Well, these days are usually eat and snacks when I watch is some movies using by using some Netflix or YouTube or and so I eat some snacks with my with hanging out with my friends.

✓ Well, these days I usually eat snacks when I watch some movies using Netflix or YouTube, and I also eat snacks when hanging out with my friends.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'Are usually eat' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually eat' to match the subject and tense. 'Using by using' is redundant; 'using' alone is sufficient. Also, 'with my with hanging out' is incorrect; it should be 'when hanging out'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Well, eating some snack is very harmful to my peace core health.

✓ Well, eating some snacks is very harmful to my peace core health.

The word 'snack' is countable and should be pluralized when referring to an unspecified amount, so 'some snack' should be 'some snacks'. This correction aligns with standard English quantifier usage.

× Well, they usually have a little additives and sugars, sugar content.

✓ Well, they usually have a few additives and sugars, sugar content.

'Additives' and 'sugars' are countable plural nouns, so 'a little' (used for uncountable nouns) is incorrect. The correct quantifier is 'a few' for countable plural nouns.

× So. So yeah, so I don't I think and eating excessive eating snacks are really.

✓ So, yeah, I don't think eating excessive snacks is good for me.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks clear structure. It contains repeated words and incomplete thoughts. The correction provides a clear, complete sentence with proper subject-verb agreement and logical flow.

× Well, as far as I can recall, yeah, server codes I ate a lot of as next, such as potato chiefs and chocolates.

✓ Well, as far as I can recall, yeah, several times I ate a lot of snacks, such as potato chips and chocolates.

'Server codes' is a mishearing or typo for 'several times'. 'As next' should be 'snacks'. 'Potato chiefs' should be 'potato chips'. These corrections fix pluralization and word choice errors.

× Are these things I I really, I was really into these kinds of.

✓ I was really into these kinds of snacks.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words. The correction forms a complete, clear sentence.

× Well when I'm hanging out with my friends are usually eat some potato chips or popcorn's.

✓ Well, when I'm hanging out with my friends, I usually eat some potato chips or popcorn.

'Popcorn's' is incorrect; 'popcorn' is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural form. Also, the subject 'I' was missing before 'usually eat'. The correction fixes subject-verb agreement and pluralization.

× However I want to give energy from the net froze. Next I always choose to eat chocolate.

✓ However, when I want to get energy from snacks, I always choose to eat chocolate.

'Net froze. Next' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'snacks'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct quantifier use. 'Give energy from the net froze' is incorrect and replaced with 'get energy from snacks'.