零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to correct grammatical errors and clarify your answer. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, specify the time more clearly and explain why you like to eat snacks then.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening because I like to have tea at that time. Additionally, I enjoy eating snacks with my friend Mighty, which makes the experience more pleasant.

建議: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and clarify your points with specific examples. Use linking words to organize your answer logically.

範例: I think my snacks are healthier than typical oily snacks because I usually eat homemade cookies made with almonds and dried fruits. These ingredients provide good nutrition and are better for my health.

建議: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about the types of snacks and your experiences.

範例: Yes, I ate a wide variety of snacks when I was young because I loved trying different kinds. For example, whenever I traveled, I would pick a snack from each country to enjoy unique tastes.

建議: Work on pronunciation and grammar, and use precise vocabulary. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

範例: There are many snacks available in the market, but I prefer homemade ones. My mother makes snacks using nutritious ingredients like almonds and dried fruits, which I find healthier and tastier. I enjoy these snacks because they provide energy and do not contain artificial additives.

× I usually eat snacks and the evening because at that time I have to make tea for myself and I love to eat snacks with Mighty.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening because at that time I have to make tea for myself and I love to eat snacks with Mighty.

The preposition 'and' is incorrectly used instead of 'in' to indicate the time of day. The correct preposition to specify a time period like 'the evening' is 'in'. Using 'in the evening' is the standard English expression.

× I consider my snacks are healthier than the other snacks which contains like oily food but my snake is made of like nuts or all the things.

✓ I consider my snacks healthier than other snacks which contain oily food, but my snack is made of nuts and other healthy ingredients.

The pronoun 'my snake' is a typo and should be 'my snack'. Also, 'contains' should agree with the plural noun 'snacks', so it should be 'contain'. The phrase 'like oily food' is awkward; 'which contain oily food' is clearer. The phrase 'or all the things' is unclear and replaced with 'and other healthy ingredients' for clarity.

× My I have homemade cookies with almond nerds and all the dry food that he needed for the first.

✓ I have homemade cookies with almond nuts and all the dry foods that I need first.

The phrase 'My I' is incorrect; it should be 'I'. 'Almond nerds' is a typo for 'almond nuts'. 'He needed' is incorrect pronoun usage; it should be 'I need' to refer to oneself. 'Dry food' should be plural 'dry foods' to match the context.

× Yes, I eat. Huge. Variety of snacks when I was young because at that time I love to eat different kind of snack.

✓ Yes, I ate a huge variety of snacks when I was young because at that time I loved to eat different kinds of snacks.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. 'Love' should be 'loved' for past tense consistency. 'Different kind of snack' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of snacks' to agree in number.

× Whenever I went for traveling I pick one snack from the each country to have different taste.

✓ Whenever I went traveling, I picked one snack from each country to have a different taste.

The phrase 'went for traveling' is incorrect; 'went traveling' is correct. The verb 'pick' should be past tense 'picked' to match 'went'. 'The each country' is incorrect; it should be 'each country'. 'Different taste' should be preceded by 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× Deer are many snacks available in the market, but I prefer homemade one.

✓ There are many snacks available in the market, but I prefer homemade ones.

'Deer' is a typo for 'There'. 'Homemade one' should be plural 'homemade ones' to agree with 'many snacks'. The sentence needs 'There are' to correctly introduce the existence of snacks.

× My mother make snacks using nutritions are indeed ingredients like almond and dried fruit, which I find healthier and more delicious.

✓ My mother makes snacks using nutritious ingredients like almonds and dried fruit, which I find healthier and more delicious.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'My mother'. 'Nutritions are indeed ingredients' is incorrect; it should be 'nutritious ingredients'. 'Almond' should be plural 'almonds' to match the context.

× I enjoyed this snags because they give me energy and are free from artificial addictive.

✓ I enjoy these snacks because they give me energy and are free from artificial additives.

'Enjoyed' should be present tense 'enjoy' to match the current preference. 'Snags' is a typo for 'snacks'. 'Addictive' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'additives' when referring to substances added to food.