零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer should be more clear and concise. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repeating phrases and unclear expressions. Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I feel hungry after a busy morning. Sometimes, I also have snacks at night if I feel hungry before dinner. This helps me stay energetic throughout the day.

建議: Try to organise your answer with clear points and use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas. Avoid vague words like 'somehow' and be specific about why snacks may be unhealthy. Keep sentences simple and direct.

範例: I think eating snacks in moderation is healthy. However, many snacks contain oil and are not homemade, which can be unhealthy. So, it is better to limit snack intake to stay healthy.

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct answer, then add specific details about when and why you ate snacks. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. My parents used to give me snacks when I returned from school. I enjoyed eating snacks because they made me feel happy and satisfied after classes.

建議: Your answer should be more fluent and clear. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases. Start with a direct answer, then describe your favourite snacks with specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: I like to eat biscuits and samosas, which is a popular Punjabi snack. When I was a child, I enjoyed samosas a lot. Now, I mostly prefer biscuits because they are easy to eat and tasty.

× I mostly prefer to eat snacks in the afternoon because at that time I was feeling hungry from a hectic schedule.

✓ I mostly prefer to eat snacks in the afternoon because at that time I feel hungry from a hectic schedule.

The sentence mixes present tense 'prefer' with past continuous 'was feeling'. Since the preference is general and present, the verb 'feel' should be in present tense to maintain consistency.

× So yes, most of the times I prefer to eat snacks in the afternoon or somehow when I feel hungry at the time of night for mostly prefer to eat when.

✓ So yes, most of the time I prefer to eat snacks in the afternoon or sometimes when I feel hungry at night.

The phrase 'most of the times' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'most of the time'. Also, the sentence is unclear and redundant; simplifying it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, according to me it's good to take a snacks between a limit because somehow snacks maybe not too healthy, it may contain oil and also it is not made in the home so somehow it's not too heavy.

✓ Yes, according to me it's good to take snacks within limits because snacks may not be very healthy; they may contain oil and are not homemade, so they are not too heavy.

The phrase 'a snacks' is incorrect; 'snacks' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Between a limit' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'within limits'. Also, sentence structure and punctuation are improved for clarity.

× But yes when individual take it in a limit so it would be better.

✓ But yes, when an individual takes it within limits, it is better.

'Individual' needs an article 'an'. 'Take' should be 'takes' to agree with singular subject. 'In a limit' is incorrect; 'within limits' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I usually eat snaps when I was young I remember that my parents gave me a snacks when I came from my college or my school.

✓ Yes, I usually ate snacks when I was young. I remember that my parents gave me snacks when I came home from my college or school.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. 'Snaps' is likely a typo for 'snacks'. 'A snacks' is incorrect; 'snacks' is plural and does not need 'a'. Added punctuation for clarity.

× So at that time I love to eat snacks and I always want snacks whenever I came from my school.

✓ So at that time I loved to eat snacks and I always wanted snacks whenever I came home from my school.

The verbs 'love' and 'want' should be in past tense 'loved' and 'wanted' to match the past time frame. Added 'home' after 'came' for natural expression.

× So yes have a flex is good for.

✓ So yes, having snacks is good for you.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Corrected to a complete sentence that conveys the intended meaning.

× Well, uh, did I read this next, which I love to eat, but the most my favorite one is biscuits and samosa, which is a Punjabi dish fitter and it is most E by me when I was a child and now I mostly black with two Italy biscuits. So this guy.

✓ Well, the snacks I love to eat the most are biscuits and samosas, which are Punjabi dishes. They were my favorites when I was a child, and now I mostly snack on two types of biscuits. So, this is it.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains many unclear phrases and typos. Corrected for clarity, grammar, and coherence to express the intended meaning properly.