零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to structure your answer more clearly by starting with a direct response to the question, followed by supporting details. Use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, mention the specific time you eat snacks and what you do while eating them, using linking words to connect ideas.

範例: I usually eat snacks on weekends while watching movies at home. I really enjoy relaxing this way because it helps me unwind after a busy week.

建議: Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about the health effects and avoid vague phrases. For example, explain why snacks might be unhealthy and how they affect you personally.

範例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they can raise blood sugar levels. For me, eating too many snacks sometimes causes health problems like feeling tired or gaining weight.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, using proper sentence structure and linking words. Explain your childhood habit and your parents' attitude towards snacks with specific details.

範例: Yes, I often asked for snacks when I was a child. However, my parents believed snacks were unhealthy, so they limited how many I could have.

建議: Give a clear and complete answer with correct grammar and vocabulary. Specify your favourite snack and explain why you like it, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: My favourite snack is chocolate because it helps me relax and concentrate better. I enjoy eating it especially when I need a quick energy boost.

× Per week on the weekend day I always like it some snacks and watching movie on my television in my home I'm.

✓ On weekends, I always like to eat some snacks and watch movies on my television at home.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions, making it difficult to understand. The correction rearranges the sentence to follow standard English syntax and adds necessary prepositions for clarity.

× I'm. Very enjoy these days my personal life.

✓ I am really enjoying my personal life these days.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'very enjoy' and has awkward word order. 'Enjoy' is a verb and should be used with an auxiliary verb 'am' and the '-ing' form to express ongoing action. 'Very' is replaced with 'really' to modify the verb properly.

× Not really actually I think that this snack is bad for our body health because it cause higher blood sugar and it make me have some.

✓ Not really. Actually, I think that these snacks are bad for our health because they cause higher blood sugar and make me have some problems.

The original sentence has pronoun agreement errors ('this snack' vs 'it cause'), verb agreement errors, and incomplete sentence ending. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match 'cause' and 'make'. Also, 'body health' is better expressed as 'health'. The sentence is completed for clarity.

× Opposite problem.

✓ Opposite problems.

The phrase 'Opposite problem' is incomplete and unclear. It should be plural 'problems' to indicate multiple issues, and ideally connected to the previous sentence for clarity.

× Yeah, that's right. When I was a kid, I always cry for asking some snacks.

✓ Yeah, that's right. When I was a kid, I always cried asking for some snacks.

The verb 'cry' should be in the past tense 'cried' to match the past time frame indicated by 'When I was a kid'. Also, 'for asking some snacks' is better expressed as 'asking for some snacks'.

× But my parents thought that this next it's not good for my body health.

✓ But my parents thought that these snacks were not good for my health.

'This next it's' is incorrect; it should be 'these snacks' to refer to plural items. Also, 'were' is used to match past tense 'thought'. 'Body health' is better expressed as 'health'.

× So the control. The snacks. Call today for my child.

✓ So they controlled my snack intake when I was a child.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction combines the ideas into a coherent sentence indicating parental control over snacks during childhood.

× Some. Chocolate. The trunk lid is my favorite. Snacks at ever had? I've ever eaten.

✓ Some chocolate, especially the Trunk Lid, is my favorite snack I have ever had.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. The correction combines the ideas into a coherent sentence expressing preference for a specific chocolate snack.

× I like each ugly because chocolate can make me relax and make me focusing on my.

✓ I like it because chocolate helps me relax and focus.

'Each ugly' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'it'. 'Make me relax' is better expressed as 'helps me relax'. 'Make me focusing' is incorrect; 'focus' is the correct verb form here. The sentence is completed for clarity.