零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答有些重复且表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且使用更自然的表达方式。

範例: I usually eat snacks when I'm watching TV or using electronic devices, and sometimes just for fun.

建議: 回答中有语法错误且表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I think some snacks can be healthy if you choose those with no sugar, no colorants, and no artificial flavorings.

建議: 语法错误较多，表达不清楚。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，清晰表达过去的习惯。

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my dad sometimes bought them for me.

建議: 回答不完整且表达不自然。建议用完整句子回答问题，并且列举喜欢的零食时使用连词。

範例: I like to eat snacks such as chips, ice cream, and chocolates.

× Now I eat snacks usually when I'm watching TV, watching electronics, or sometimes I just like snacks just for fun.

✓ Now I usually eat snacks when I'm watching TV, using electronics, or sometimes I just like snacks for fun.

副词usually的位置错误，应该放在动词eat之前，表示频率。此外，watching electronics表达不准确，应该用using electronics。句中多余的just也应去掉。

× Imma plene and some snacks are healthy and you should usually pick snacks with 0 sugar and 0 colorants and say there are unnatural flavorings.

✓ I'm planning, and some snacks are healthy. You should usually pick snacks with zero sugar and zero colorants and avoid unnatural flavorings.

原句中Imma plene拼写错误，应为I'm planning。句子结构混乱，缺少连接词。should后面搭配动词原形，且表达更准确应使用avoid而非say。数字0应写成zero。

× Yes, I eat snacks when I be on because my dad sometimes bought my snacks occasionally.

✓ Yes, I ate snacks when I was young because my dad sometimes bought me snacks occasionally.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去时态。eat改为ate，be改为was。bought my snacks应改为bought me snacks，表示买给我。

× Like chips, ice cream slowly and chocolates.

✓ I like chips, ice cream, and chocolates.

slowly位置错误且用法不当，冰淇淋不应加slowly。句子缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整。