零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening after coming home from school because I feel hungry then. Sometimes, I also eat snacks while studying to keep my energy up. I prefer light snacks like fruits or nuts because they are healthy.

建議: Your answer has good points but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words properly and avoid repetition. Try to explain your opinion clearly with specific reasons and examples.

範例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of oil and saturated fats, which can harm our health. Therefore, it is better to avoid overeating snacks. However, eating small amounts of snacks at certain times can help control cravings.

建議: Your answer provides relevant content but is somewhat disorganized and incomplete. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I did not know much about their ingredients. For example, I liked eating packaged snacks like Kukuri and Lays Extra, which contain preservatives and saturated fats. As I grew older, I became more aware of their effects on health.

建議: Your answer mentions your preferences but lacks fluency and clear structure. Try to start with a direct answer, then add specific examples and reasons using linking words to make your response coherent.

範例: I like to eat fried snacks such as Samosa and packaged chips like Lays Cookery Extra. Although I know these snacks are not healthy, I enjoy eating them when I have cravings. However, I try to limit my intake to avoid health problems.

× I think I usually eat snacks then for it during evening I think while after coming from school with children like to eat some snacks.

✓ I think I usually eat snacks in the evening, after coming from school, like other children who like to eat some snacks.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and lacks proper connectors, making it difficult to understand. Rearranging the sentence and adding appropriate prepositions and conjunctions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Nowadays I eat next by studying as part of my eating disorder and I would like to eat next whenever I am happy.

✓ Nowadays, I eat snacks while studying as part of my eating habit, and I like to eat snacks whenever I am happy.

The phrase 'eat next by studying' is incorrect. The preposition 'while' is appropriate to indicate simultaneous actions. Also, 'eating disorder' is a medical condition and likely not intended here; 'eating habit' fits better. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use and clarity.

× No, I think it's it's not healthy becaused snacks maybe containing more oils and other saturated fats which will be really bad for human health.

✓ No, I think it's not healthy because snacks may contain more oils and other saturated fats, which are really bad for human health.

The modal verb 'may' is used to express possibility and should be followed by the base form of the verb 'contain' instead of 'containing'. Also, 'becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. The sentence is corrected for proper modal verb usage and spelling.

× So I think you should avoid eating overeating of snacks.

✓ So I think you should avoid overeating snacks.

The phrase 'eating overeating of snacks' is incorrect. 'Overeating' is a verb or noun and does not require 'eating' before it or 'of' after it. The corrected sentence uses 'overeating snacks' correctly.

× Snacks can be eaten in particular interval in order to learn in order to. Dash with crabbing cravings.

✓ Snacks can be eaten at particular intervals to help deal with cravings.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'In particular interval' should be 'at particular intervals'. The phrase 'in order to learn in order to. Dash with crabbing cravings' is incorrect and unclear; it is corrected to 'to help deal with cravings' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I often ate snacks when I was in because during our childhood we don't know what snacks are made of so I was not bothered about it so I started I like to eat snacks like Kukuri, lays extra.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because during our childhood we didn't know what snacks were made of, so I was not bothered about it. I started liking snacks like Kukuri and Lays Extra.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and missing words. 'Was in' is incomplete; 'was young' fits better. 'Don't know' should be past tense 'didn't know' to match the past context. 'I started I like to eat' is incorrect; it should be 'I started liking'. Proper nouns like 'Lays' should be capitalized. The sentence is corrected for past tense consistency and clarity.

× All these are packaged items which contain preservatives, saturated fats after few years when I become older.

✓ All these are packaged items which contain preservatives and saturated fats. After a few years, when I became older...

The original sentence runs two ideas together without proper punctuation or conjunctions. 'After few years' should be 'After a few years'. 'Become' should be past tense 'became' to match the past context. The sentence is corrected for preposition use, punctuation, and tense.

× I like to eat fried snacks, for example Somoza and packaged chips like Lays cookery extra.

✓ I like to eat fried snacks, for example, Samosa, and packaged chips like Lays Kukure Extra.

'Somoza' is likely a misspelling of 'Samosa'. 'Cookery extra' seems incorrect; possibly 'Kukure Extra' is intended. Commas are added for clarity. Proper nouns are capitalized. The sentence is corrected for spelling and punctuation.

× I like to eat them there. One of my favorite snack and all these are bad for my health, I know that, but I like to eat whenever I have some cravings.

✓ I like to eat them; they are one of my favorite snacks. I know all these are bad for my health, but I like to eat them whenever I have cravings.

The original sentences are fragmented and have subject-verb agreement issues. 'One of my favorite snack' should be 'one of my favorite snacks'. 'I like to eat them there' is unclear; replaced with 'I like to eat them'. The sentence is corrected for sentence structure and agreement.