零食— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear in parts. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, you can say when you eat snacks and why, then add a reason with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: I usually eat snacks in the evening when I come home from work because I feel very hungry after a long day. However, I choose light snacks so that I still have space for my dinner.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but the sentence structure is confusing. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect contrasting ideas. Also, avoid repeating the same words unnecessarily.

範例: I think eating snacks, especially junk food, is generally unhealthy. However, having a small amount occasionally will not harm the body if you maintain a balanced diet.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details. Avoid unnecessary phrases and focus on clarity.

範例: When I was young, I often ate snacks between meals. Because of this, I was overweight and unhealthy as a child.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and some words are unclear or incorrect. Try to list your favourite snacks clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Also, check your pronunciation or spelling of food items to make your answer more natural.

範例: I enjoy many kinds of snacks such as chips, pizza, noodles, and different types of bread. I also like trying new snacks whenever I get the chance.

× It is it is the evening time when I really get free an it is after my lunch and it is after it is it is the time after mile engine before my dinner.

✓ It is the evening time when I really get free and it is after my lunch and before my dinner.

The sentence has repetition and unclear phrases like 'mile engine'. The present tense is used correctly but the sentence needs to be clear and concise. Removing repeated words and correcting unclear phrases improves clarity.

× So at that time I'm really very hungry and I really need to eat something that doesn't even full full that doesn't even full mass stomach stomach.

✓ So at that time I'm really very hungry and I really need to eat something that doesn't fill my stomach completely.

The phrase 'doesn't even full full' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'fill' and 'mass stomach stomach' is incorrect. Using 'fill my stomach completely' is the correct quantifier and verb usage.

× And I have some space left for dinner as well.

✓ And I have some space left for dinner as well.

This sentence is correct and does not have pronoun errors.

× I think it's not healthy to eat junk food, but I think that small amount of snacks or small amount of junk food will pay no harm to will be no harm to body if we're having a balanced diet along with it, people use having.

✓ I think it's not healthy to eat junk food, but I think that a small amount of snacks or junk food will do no harm to the body if we have a balanced diet along with it.

The modal verb 'will pay no harm' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'will do no harm'. Also, 'people use having' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× I was a food event.

✓ I was a food lover.

'Food event' is incorrect. Possibly the intended phrase is 'food lover'. Using the correct noun improves meaning and tense is correct.

× I was young.

✓ I was young.

This sentence is correct.

× I used to have usually people say that you need 3 meals in a day, that is breakfast, lunch and dinner and I don't know how many meals I had when I was a child.

✓ I used to have... Usually, people say that you need 3 meals a day: breakfast, lunch, and dinner, and I don't know how many meals I had when I was a child.

The sentence structure is confusing. Adding punctuation and separating ideas improves clarity. The tense usage is correct.

× I was a very fat child and I will I was very unhealthy 1I.

✓ I was a very fat child and I was very unhealthy.

The phrase 'I will I was very unhealthy 1I' is incorrect and likely a typo. Correcting to 'I was very unhealthy' maintains past tense and clarity.

× Used to eat a lot of snacks for that moment.

✓ I used to eat a lot of snacks at that time.

The sentence lacks a subject and has incorrect preposition. Adding 'I' and using 'at that time' corrects the sentence.

× I love every kind of snacks.

✓ I love every kind of snack.

'Every kind of' is followed by singular noun. Using 'snack' instead of 'snacks' is correct.

× I love eating chips, pitza noodles, breads, different kind of braids, Carling parades.

✓ I love eating chips, pizza, noodles, breads, different kinds of breads, and curling parades.

Correcting spelling errors: 'pitza' to 'pizza', 'braids' to 'breads' or 'breads' is plural, 'Carling parades' unclear but possibly 'curling parades'. Also, 'different kind' should be 'different kinds' for plural.

× I really love to explore new things an in Fudan.

✓ I really love to explore new things and in Fudan.

The phrase 'an in' is incorrect; it should be 'and in'. However, the meaning is unclear; possibly 'and in Fudan' is incomplete or incorrect context.

× It's really annoying for me.

✓ It's really annoying for me.

This sentence is correct.