天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence describing the typical weather, then give one or two specific supporting details (seasonal pattern, impact on daily life). Reduce hesitations and filler words and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

範例: The weather where I live is generally hot for most of the year, with a short cool season in December and January. Because of the long hot season, it is often uncomfortable to travel to school and classrooms can feel very warm, so we try to stay hydrated and rest during breaks.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific, coherent reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Avoid grammatical errors (use correct verb forms and prepositions). Keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

範例: I prefer cold weather because it is more comfortable and allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like walking and jogging. Also, cold weekends are cozy—I can relax under a blanket or sit around a bonfire with friends.

建議: State your preference clearly, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'lush', 'parched', 'dusty') and linking phrases such as 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid repetition.

範例: I prefer wet weather because it makes the landscape lush and green. For example, after rain the trees and flowers look fresh, whereas dry weather often makes the ground dusty and plants wilt.

建議: Answer directly about frequency and purpose (how often and when). Use clear time expressions (e.g., 'every morning', 'before I go out') and give a concise reason for checking forecasts. Avoid uncertainty words like 'could be true'—instead say 'sometimes inaccurate'.

範例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every morning and again before I go out for outdoor activities. I do this because I want to know if it will rain tomorrow so I can plan my photos and avoid spoiled plans; however, sometimes forecasts are inaccurate.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence about one or two main effects, then explain with specific examples and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'floods', 'heatwaves', 'economic losses'). Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid unclear phrasing. Keep to 2–3 clear sentences.

範例: I think climate change has increased the frequency of extreme events such as floods and heatwaves. For example, recent floods in my city caused property damage and forced many shops to close, which led to economic losses for local businesses.

建議: Answer directly and give one or two specific destinations with reasons. Use correct sentence structure and linking words such as 'because' and 'also'. Be concise—2–3 sentences are sufficient.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit places with different climates, such as Canada and South Korea, because I want to experience snow and take photographs. Also, visiting new countries would let me learn about different cultures and make lasting memories.

× The weather here is, uh, colorful, sometimes summer and sometime winter, but, uh, more Lydia here is summer and it's difficult for us when we go to school and there and our class, uh, a lot of, umm, a lot of, uh, a lot of strength. So here it.

✓ The weather here is changeable; sometimes it feels like summer and sometimes like winter, but mostly it is summer here and it is difficult for us when we go to school because our classroom is very hot.

The original sentence misuses adjectives and adverbs and has awkward phrasing ('colorful', 'more Lydia') and repetition. Use 'changeable' or 'varied' to describe fluctuating weather, 'sometimes' requires plural agreement with 'like summer' and 'like winter', and 'mostly' expresses frequency. Clarify reason with 'because' and replace vague 'a lot of strength' with 'very hot'. Keep verbs consistent and concise.

× I prefer cold because it have advantages due to hot weather.

✓ I prefer cold because it has advantages over hot weather.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires the third person singular verb 'has', not 'have'. Also 'advantages due to hot weather' is incorrect collocation; use 'advantages over hot weather' to compare.

× In cold weekend, cuddle the blanket and set to the bonfire.

✓ On cold weekends, I cuddle under a blanket and sit by the bonfire.

incorrect preposition and missing subject: use 'On cold weekends' for time expression, include subject 'I', use correct verbs 'cuddle under' and 'sit by' to describe actions. Maintain plural 'weekends' for habitual activities.

× In hot weather we cannot go to outside in Bruno and cannot do activities such as walking, jogging.

✓ In hot weather we cannot go outside in the afternoon and cannot do activities such as walking or jogging.

Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'outside' and fix unclear 'Bruno' (likely 'the afternoon' or omit). Use 'or' for listing activities. Use consistent time reference if intended.

× I prefer wet weather because in wet everything is beautiful and beautiful scene.

✓ I prefer wet weather because everything looks beautiful and scenic.

Avoid repeating 'beautiful'; use 'looks beautiful' and 'scenic' for noun 'scene'. 'In wet' is incomplete—use 'in wet weather' or simply 'in the rain'.

× Due to in dry weather everything become rough and and moreover everything become gritty so.

✓ In dry weather everything becomes rough and gritty.

Remove redundant 'due to' and 'moreover', correct verb form 'becomes' for third person singular, and eliminate trailing 'so'. Keep sentence concise.

× I'm in the habit of checking weather forecast, uh, when we go to outdoor activities and I check whether that tomorrow is rain.

✓ I'm in the habit of checking the weather forecast when we go on outdoor activities, and I check whether it will rain tomorrow.

Add definite article 'the' before 'weather forecast', use 'go on outdoor activities' or 'go to outdoor activities' -> 'go on', and replace 'whether that tomorrow is rain' with correct future reference 'whether it will rain tomorrow'.

× So we cannot take pictures and we cannot, uh, occasionally we do not preserve memories.

✓ So we cannot take pictures and sometimes we do not preserve memories.

'Occasionally' is an adverb; use 'sometimes' for clarity and proper placement. The original had awkward insertion and comma misuse. Keep parallel structure 'cannot take... and sometimes we do not...'. 'Preserve memories' is acceptable but clarify context.

× So sometimes the weather could be true to be honest and sometime would be fake.

✓ Sometimes the weather can be accurate, to be honest, and sometimes the forecast can be wrong.

Replace 'true'/'fake' with 'accurate'/'wrong' or 'reliable'/'unreliable'. Use 'sometimes' consistently and correct modal 'can' rather than 'could/would' for general statements.

× I think the effects of climatic change in recent years have more even such as fluids and which have caused significant human and economic loss like in our city when here is fluid, so a lot of show commercial shops are.

✓ I think the effects of climate change in recent years have increased, such as floods, which have caused significant human and economic losses. For example, when there are floods in our city, many shops are affected.

Replace 'climatic change' with 'climate change', correct 'more even' to 'increased', change 'fluids' to 'floods', use plural 'losses', and fix relative clause structure. Clarify example: 'when there are floods... many shops are affected' completes the idea.

× Yes, definitely. I want to visit other countries such as Canada, USA. There have a lot of snow so I want to take pictures and preserve memories.

✓ Yes, definitely. I want to visit other countries such as Canada and the USA. There is a lot of snow there, so I want to take pictures and preserve memories.

Use 'and' between country names and include definite article 'the' before 'USA'. Use 'There is' for existence of uncountable noun 'a lot of snow' and add 'there' to indicate location. Maintain tense and intention.

× Moreover, I want to visit the South Korea, a lot of countries I want to visit.

✓ Moreover, I want to visit South Korea; there are many countries I want to visit.

Do not use 'the' before 'South Korea'. Use clearer sentence structure and replace informal repetition with 'there are many countries I want to visit'.