天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'Weather was snow clouds'는 자연스럽지 않으며, 현재 날씨를 설명할 때 시제를 일관되게 사용해야 합니다. 또한, 답변이 두 문장으로 나뉘어 있으나 연결이 부자연스럽습니다. 좀 더 명확하고 자연스러운 문장으로 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: The weather in my area is clear today with some snow clouds, which makes me feel refreshed.

建議: 문법과 어순에 오류가 많고, 문장이 중복되어 답변이 비효율적입니다. 'I prefer cold weather'와 같이 간결하게 시작하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명할 때는 연결어를 사용하여 자연스럽게 이어가야 합니다.

範例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy the winter atmosphere, especially the snow and the variety of seasonal foods available.

建議: 의미 전달이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'sticky on my body'는 부자연스러운 표현이며, 선택을 명확히 해야 합니다. 또한, 문장 구조를 개선하여 더 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Honestly, I like both dry and wet weather, but if I have to choose, I prefer wet weather because dry weather feels sticky on my skin.

建議: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽고, 시제 일관성이 부족합니다. 'I look at it every day before going outside'와 같이 현재 습관을 나타내는 표현을 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, checking the weather forecast is part of my daily routine before I go outside. I do it every day.

建議: 답변이 모호하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 'It affects the Earth'와 같이 명확한 주어와 동사를 사용하고, 구체적인 예시를 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Climate change affects the Earth in many ways. For example, people waste a lot of resources and may not realize how serious the problem has become recently.

建議: 문법과 표현이 부자연스럽고, 문장이 반복적입니다. 'Northern Europe has only winter season'는 사실과 다르므로 정확한 정보를 사용해야 하며, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, if I have the chance, I would like to travel to Northern Europe because I love winter and want to experience it all year round.

× In my area the weather was clear today.

✓ In my area the weather is clear today.

The sentence refers to the current day, so the present tense 'is' should be used instead of the past tense 'was'.

× Weather was snow clouds so it makes me fresh.

✓ The weather was cloudy with snow, so it made me feel fresh.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrasing. 'Snow clouds' is not a proper expression; 'cloudy with snow' is correct. Also, 'makes me fresh' is unnatural; 'made me feel fresh' is better in past tense to match the previous clause.

× I prefer to cold weather because I like the atmosphere about the winter.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I like the atmosphere in winter.

The phrase 'prefer to cold weather' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer cold weather' without 'to'. Also, 'about the winter' should be 'in winter' to indicate the season.

× Winter weather because of I like snowy and there's a lot of food in winter.

✓ I like winter weather because I enjoy the snow and there is a lot of food in winter.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured to express the reason clearly: 'I like winter weather because I enjoy the snow and there is a lot of food in winter.'

× Weather is sticky on my body so if I have a choose one I rather than wet weather.

✓ The weather feels sticky on my body, so if I have to choose one, I prefer wet weather.

'Weather is sticky on my body' is awkward; 'feels sticky' is better. 'If I have a choose one' is incorrect; it should be 'if I have to choose one'. 'I rather than wet weather' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer wet weather.'

× Yes, it's one of my routine before I go to outside.

✓ Yes, it's one of my routines before I go outside.

'One of my routine' should be 'one of my routines' (plural). 'Go to outside' is incorrect; it should be 'go outside' without 'to'.

× So I would like to say I looked at every time, every day.

✓ So I would like to say I look at it every time, every day.

'I looked at every time' is incorrect tense and missing object. It should be present tense 'I look at it every time' to indicate habitual action.

× It affects from the Earth, for instance, people waste a lot of things I think they do not recognize about climate change, but I hope to say it's very serious about these days.

✓ Climate change affects the Earth. For instance, people waste a lot of things. I think they do not recognize climate change, but I want to say it is very serious these days.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. It needs to be broken into clearer sentences and corrected for proper expression.

× Yes, if I have a chance I hope to travel N Europe which have season only winter season.

✓ Yes, if I have a chance, I hope to travel to Northern Europe, which has only the winter season.

'Travel N Europe' should be 'travel to Northern Europe'. 'Which have season only winter season' is incorrect; it should be 'which has only the winter season.'

× I want to stay winter season all day.

✓ I want to stay in the winter season all day.

The phrase 'stay winter season' is missing the preposition 'in' and the definite article 'the' before 'winter season'.