天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural by avoiding starting with 'And'. Also, try to include a topic sentence directly answering the question before adding details, and use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: The weather where I live is usually cloudy. However, during the summer months, especially in July and August, it tends to rain quite frequently.

建議: Your answer is relevant and clear but could be improved by removing filler words like 'Umm' and expanding your explanation with linking words to make it more natural and effective.

範例: I prefer cold weather because I tend to sweat heavily in hot weather, which makes me feel uncomfortable.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more concise and natural. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'and so that's because'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I prefer dry weather because wet conditions often cause joint aches due to my health.

建議: Avoid repeating the question and starting with 'And'. Begin with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, 'these habits' is vague; specify the habit clearly.

範例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every morning to decide if I need to bring an umbrella.

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'Umm' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a more detailed explanation.

範例: I believe climate change has caused more species to become endangered, which negatively affects biodiversity.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and engaging by explaining your reasons further and using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I'm very happy living in Shanghai, so I don't feel the need to visit cities with different climates because I enjoy the weather here.

× And usually it's cloudy, but in summer there will be many rainy days, especially in July and August.

✓ And usually it's cloudy, but in summer there are many rainy days, especially in July and August.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'there will be' to describe a habitual or general fact about summer weather. The present tense 'there are' is appropriate here to indicate a regular occurrence rather than a future event.

× Umm, I prefer cold weather because in hot weather I will sweat heavily and I don't like that.

✓ Umm, I prefer cold weather because in hot weather I sweat heavily and I don't like that.

Using 'will' to describe a habitual action is incorrect here. The simple present tense 'I sweat' should be used to express a regular or habitual fact.

× I prefer dry weather because when it gets wet I may have some ache in my joints and so that's because of my body condition.

✓ I prefer dry weather because when it gets wet I may have some aches in my joints and that's because of my body condition.

The phrase 'some ache' is incorrect; 'ache' is usually uncountable or pluralised as 'aches' when referring to multiple pains. Also, 'and so' is unnecessary and awkward here; removing it improves clarity.

× And how often? Yes, I have these habits. I check it every morning to decide whether I will bring an umbrella or not.

✓ And how often? Yes, I have this habit. I check the weather every morning to decide whether I will bring an umbrella or not.

'These habits' is incorrect because the speaker refers to a single habit; 'this habit' is correct. Also, 'I check it' is vague; specifying 'I check the weather' clarifies the meaning.

× Umm, I think it makes an increasing number of species become endangered and this is not good to biodiversity.

✓ Umm, I think it causes an increasing number of species to become endangered and this is not good for biodiversity.

The verb 'makes' is better replaced with 'causes' for clarity. Also, the phrase 'not good to biodiversity' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for' in this context.