天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and correcting sentence structure. For example, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: The weather is hot here because it's summer, so temperatures are higher. Today, my daughter and I stayed indoors to avoid the strong, burning sun outside.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains irrelevant information. Focus on directly answering the question with clear reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy staying indoors during winter. For example, I like making a cup of tea and relaxing at home with central heating, which makes me feel comfortable.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be improved by avoiding repetition and using more varied vocabulary. Also, try to combine your reasons into a coherent sentence using linking words.

範例: I prefer dry weather because I dislike using umbrellas and I don't want my shoes to get dirty.

建議: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks clarity. Use correct verb tenses and link your ideas clearly to improve coherence.

範例: When I was young, I never checked the weather forecast. However, now I do because my daily routine, including what I wear and my mood, depends on the weather.

建議: Your answer is vague and contains grammatical errors. Try to provide more specific details and use linking words to explain the effects clearly.

範例: Climate change has increased harmful radiation, causing more sun damage. As a result, more people are developing skin cancer, which is a serious negative effect.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid listing weather types unnecessarily.

範例: I live in a place with four distinct seasons, so I experience various weather types like snow, rain, and sunshine. Therefore, I don't feel the need to visit cities with different climates.

× Of course today I we were indoors all the time, me and my daughter, because there was so hot sun burning sun outside and.

✓ Of course today my daughter and I were indoors all the time because the sun was so hot and burning outside.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and tense usage. 'I we were' is incorrect; it should be 'my daughter and I were' to maintain subject order and correct pronoun case. Also, 'there was so hot sun burning sun outside' is ungrammatical; it should be 'the sun was so hot and burning outside.' This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Of course today I we were indoors all the time, me and my daughter, because there was so hot sun burning sun outside and.

✓ Of course today my daughter and I were indoors all the time because the sun was so hot and burning outside.

The pronouns 'I we' and 'me and my daughter' are incorrectly used. The correct subject pronoun order is 'my daughter and I' when used as the subject of the sentence. This correction ensures proper pronoun case and order.

× I am more like an extrovert human being.

✓ I am more of an extrovert human being.

The phrase 'more like' is incorrect here; the correct expression is 'more of' when indicating a preference or characteristic. This preposition change improves the naturalness and correctness of the sentence.

× I can make coffee for myself or a cup of tea, which I love so much, and be for myself without being interrupted.

✓ I can make coffee for myself or a cup of tea, which I love so much, and be by myself without being interrupted.

The phrase 'be for myself' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'be by myself' to indicate being alone. This correction fixes the prepositional phrase to convey the intended meaning.

× Of course I prefer dry weather because I don't like using umbrella, that's why I prefer it.

✓ Of course I prefer dry weather because I don't like using an umbrella; that's why I prefer it.

The noun 'umbrella' requires an article 'an' before it. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses. This correction addresses article usage and sentence structure.

× When I were young I never checked.

✓ When I was young I never checked.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for the first person singular past tense; it should be 'was.' This correction fixes the subject-verb agreement in past tense.

× I used to never check weather, but now I do because my routine in my life is connected to weather.

✓ I used to never check the weather, but now I do because my routine in life is connected to the weather.

The noun 'weather' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to general weather conditions. Also, 'in my life' is better expressed as 'in life' for naturalness. This correction improves article usage and phrasing.

× What I wear or even my mood is depend on weather.

✓ What I wear or even my mood depends on the weather.

The verb 'depend' should be in the third person singular present tense 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'What I wear or even my mood.' Also, 'weather' requires the definite article 'the.' This correction fixes subject-verb agreement and article usage.

× Because of the climate change there is radiation and sun damage and people get more skin cancer because of this and this is bad influence of climate changes.

✓ Because of climate change, there is radiation and sun damage, and people get more skin cancer because of this; this is a bad influence of climate change.

The phrase 'the climate change' is incorrect; 'climate change' is uncountable and does not need 'the.' Also, 'this is bad influence of climate changes' needs an article 'a' before 'bad influence' and 'climate changes' should be singular 'climate change.' Punctuation is added for clarity. This correction addresses article usage and pluralization.

× Wherever I live we have Four Seasons, a spring, summer, autumn and winter and I can see all the types of weathers, snow, sun, rainy, windy, foggy, everything, so I don't need to go somewhere else.

✓ Wherever I live, we have four seasons: spring, summer, autumn, and winter, and I can see all types of weather—snow, sun, rain, wind, fog, everything—so I don't need to go somewhere else.

'Four Seasons' should not be capitalized unless referring to a proper noun; seasons are common nouns. 'A spring' is incorrect; 'spring' is uncountable here. 'Weathers' is incorrect; 'weather' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. Also, adjectives like 'rainy, windy, foggy' should be nouns 'rain, wind, fog' to list weather types. This correction fixes pluralization, article usage, and word choice.