天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "The sun's rays burn the skin, and sun exposure can be harmful." Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

範例: It's very sunny and hot here in Bahrain. The sun's rays burn the skin, and sun exposure can be harmful to people.

建議: Make sure to complete your sentences and avoid incomplete thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas, for example, "I prefer cold weather because I enjoy staying in a cool room and watching the rain fall. Additionally, I like seeing snow."

範例: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy staying in a cool room and watching the rain fall. Additionally, I like seeing snow.

建議: Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "I sometimes struggle to breathe in both dry and wet weather, so it depends on the specific conditions."

範例: I sometimes struggle to breathe in both dry and wet weather, so it depends on the specific conditions at the time.

建議: Avoid repeating the same idea and try to be concise. For example, "I used to check the weather forecast regularly, but recently I stopped because I don't have enough time and it makes me anxious about the weather."

範例: I used to check the weather forecast regularly, but recently I stopped because I don't have enough time and it makes me anxious about the weather.

建議: Try to make your answer more specific and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Global warming is a critical issue that environmental scientists study. Additionally, pollution contributes to climate change, so governments should focus on these problems."

範例: Global warming is a critical issue that environmental scientists study. Additionally, pollution contributes to climate change, so governments should focus on these problems.

建議: Try to combine your ideas into a more natural and fluent answer. For example, "Yes, definitely. Since it's very hot and sunny here, I would like to visit places with milder temperatures and less humidity."

範例: Yes, definitely. Since it's very hot and sunny here, I would like to visit places with milder temperatures and less humidity.

× The sun rays is burning the skin and sun exposure is very dangerous causing many harm to people here.

✓ The sun rays are burning the skin and sun exposure is very dangerous causing much harm to people here.

The subject 'sun rays' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'many harm' is incorrect because 'harm' is uncountable; it should be 'much harm'.

× I don't like.

✓ I don't like it.

The sentence 'I don't like.' is incomplete because it lacks an object. Adding 'it' completes the sentence and clarifies what is not liked.

× Sometimes in a dry environment I cannot breathe well and sometimes also inside a wet environment I find myself struggling to breathe well.

✓ Sometimes in a dry environment, I cannot breathe well, and sometimes in a wet environment, I also find myself struggling to breathe well.

The sentence needs commas to separate clauses for clarity and smoother reading. Also, 'sometimes also inside a wet environment' is awkward; rephrasing to 'sometimes in a wet environment, I also' improves the sentence structure.

× So it really depends on the on the time exact time of that environment where I was.

✓ So it really depends on the exact time of that environment where I was.

The phrase 'on the on the time exact time' is redundant and incorrectly ordered. Removing the duplicate and correcting the word order improves clarity.

× I used to check the weather forecast before but recently I stopped checking it because I don't really have enough time to go and check the weather forecasts and it also keeps me alert about what's happening tomorrow and more cautious and afraid of the weather.

✓ I used to check the weather forecast before, but recently I have stopped checking it because I don't really have enough time to check the weather forecasts, and it also keeps me alert about what's happening tomorrow, making me more cautious and afraid of the weather.

The sentence is long and needs commas to separate ideas. 'Recently I stopped' is better as 'recently I have stopped' to indicate recent action. Also, 'to go and check' is redundant; 'to check' suffices. The phrase 'and more cautious and afraid' needs to be connected properly, so 'making me more cautious and afraid' is clearer.

× Global warming is a critical topic to be studied by the environmental scientists and also the change of the climate with so many factors like pollution should be also focused by the country.

✓ Global warming is a critical topic to be studied by environmental scientists, and also the change in climate with many factors like pollution should be focused on by the country.

The phrase 'change of the climate' is better expressed as 'change in climate'. Also, 'should be also focused by the country' is awkward; 'should be focused on by the country' is correct prepositional usage.

× Yes, definitely. Because it's too hot and sunny here. It's better to have a good environment with lesser humidity and better temperature conditions.

✓ Yes, definitely, because it's too hot and sunny here. It's better to have a good environment with less humidity and better temperature conditions.

'Lesser' is used for comparing two things and is less common; 'less' is the correct quantifier for uncountable nouns like 'humidity'. Also, the first two sentences can be combined for better flow.