天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Instead of 'more cloudy and windy', say 'cloudy and windy'. Also, avoid unnecessary words like 'since it is a winter season' and say 'because it's winter'.

範例: The weather in East London today is cloudy and windy because it's winter.

建議: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition like 'on hot weather'.

範例: I prefer hot weather because I rarely get sinus problems then. Also, I can enjoy outdoor activities like going to the beach with my friends.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like 'wet wet weather' and 'plantation'.

範例: I prefer wet weather because I like planting trees. During dry seasons, my plants suffer from lack of water, so wet weather helps them absorb more water.

建議: Your answer is too long and confusing. Be concise and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct phrases like 'not taking my car to car wash because it will get dead' which is unclear.

範例: I check the weather forecast every day to choose the right clothes. For example, if it will rain tomorrow, I prepare an umbrella and avoid washing my car.

建議: Your answer has many grammar and clarity issues. Use clear sentences and relevant vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases like 'use of hikers on the road which increased the company'. Focus on specific effects and causes of climate change.

範例: Climate change has worsened recently because industries produce more pollution. Also, population growth increases demand for resources, which harms the environment.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and has grammar mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, I want to visit cities with different climates, but not cold ones because my sinus problems get worse. I prefer warmer places.

× The weather in east London today is more cloudy and windy since it is a winter season.

✓ The weather in East London today is cloudier and windier since it is the winter season.

The phrase 'a winter season' is incorrect because 'winter season' is a specific season and requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'more cloudy and windy' should be 'cloudier and windier' to use the correct comparative forms of adjectives.

× As someone who's suffering from sinus I, I prefer hot weather because on hot weather it's very rare for me to get sinus **** at that.

✓ As someone who suffers from sinus, I prefer hot weather because in hot weather it's very rare for me to get sinus issues.

The phrase 'on hot weather' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to weather conditions. Also, 'who's suffering' should be 'who suffers' to express a general condition. The phrase 'sinus **** at that' is unclear and corrected to 'sinus issues' for clarity.

× On hot weather I can chill with my friends outside or go to beach and do a lot of activities.

✓ In hot weather, I can chill with my friends outside or go to the beach and do a lot of activities.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to weather; 'in' is correct. Also, 'go to beach' requires the definite article 'the' before 'beach'.

× If someone who likes planting trees in in in my heart, I prefer Wet Wet weather because during the dry season my plantation becomes damaged due to the lack of water.

✓ As someone who likes planting trees in my heart, I prefer wet weather because during the dry season my plantation becomes damaged due to the lack of water.

The original sentence has repeated words 'in in in' which is incorrect. The phrase 'If someone who likes' is ungrammatical; it should be 'As someone who likes'. Also, 'Wet Wet weather' is redundant and corrected to 'wet weather'.

× So during the wet weather is where my plantation able to absorb more water on underground.

✓ So during the wet weather, my plantation is able to absorb more water underground.

The phrase 'on underground' is incorrect; the correct preposition is omitted here, so 'underground' stands alone. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing 'is where' and adding 'is' after 'plantation'.

× I check weather each and every day in order for me to prepare the exact clothes that I need to wear in order to avoid choosing the wrong roads.

✓ I check the weather every day so that I can prepare the exact clothes I need to wear to avoid choosing the wrong roads.

The phrase 'check weather' is missing the definite article 'the'. 'Each and every day' is redundant; 'every day' is sufficient. Also, 'in order for me to' is wordy and can be simplified to 'so that I can'.

× For example, tomorrow I check the weather, it will be 70% rain in East London.

✓ For example, when I check the weather for tomorrow, it will show a 70% chance of rain in East London.

The original sentence lacks clarity and correct prepositions. '70% rain' is incorrect; it should be '70% chance of rain'. Also, 'tomorrow I check the weather' is awkward and corrected to 'when I check the weather for tomorrow'.

× Therefore, it will help me to prepare the rain for tomorrow and not taking my car to car wash because it will get dead.

✓ Therefore, it will help me prepare for the rain tomorrow and avoid taking my car to the car wash because it will get dirty.

The phrase 'prepare the rain' is incorrect; it should be 'prepare for the rain'. 'Not taking' should be 'avoid taking' for correct verb usage. 'Car wash' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Get dead' is incorrect; likely intended 'get dirty'.

× The climate change has changed dramatically in recent years due to the expansion of industries which contribute more pollution on the climate.

✓ Climate change has changed dramatically in recent years due to the expansion of industries which contribute more pollution to the climate.

'The climate change' is incorrect; 'climate change' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the'. Also, 'pollution on the climate' should be 'pollution to the climate'.

× Moreover, the increased number of human beings had issue on the climate change due to the increased demand and also use of hikers on the road which increased the company.

✓ Moreover, the increased number of human beings has had an impact on climate change due to the increased demand and use of vehicles on the road, which increased pollution.

'Had issue on the climate change' is incorrect; it should be 'has had an impact on climate change'. 'Use of hikers' is incorrect; likely meant 'use of vehicles'. 'Increased the company' is unclear and corrected to 'increased pollution'.

× Yes, I would like to visit a city that have different climate from where I live, but that city must be a city that is not cold because as someone who is suffering from sinus, I don't like to stay in a place where is cold.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit a city that has a different climate from where I live, but that city must not be cold because, as someone who suffers from sinus, I don't like to stay in a place that is cold.

'A city that have' is incorrect; 'city' is singular and requires 'has'. 'Different climate' needs the article 'a' before 'different climate'. 'Where is cold' should be 'that is cold'.

× I prefer the to visit a city that is more warmer and.

✓ I prefer to visit a city that is warmer.

'More warmer' is incorrect because 'warmer' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant. The sentence is incomplete and corrected to a complete sentence.