天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid redundancy and unclear words. Use correct season names and keep your answer concise and clear. For example, mention the seasons correctly and avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: The weather where I live is quite pleasant because we experience all four seasons: winter, spring, summer, and fall. Currently, it's moderate—not too hot or cold—which I really enjoy.

建議: Avoid repeating the same reason twice and try to use more precise vocabulary. Also, link your ideas smoothly for better coherence.

範例: I prefer cold weather because it feels refreshing and helps keep my skin clear, unlike hot weather which can be uncomfortable for me.

建議: Be careful with word choice and sentence clarity. Avoid unclear phrases like 'Annie plan' and 'soundings'. Also, try to express your feelings more clearly and concisely.

範例: I prefer dry weather because it allows me to go outside without any problems. Wet weather makes me uncomfortable and sometimes causes itching, which is inconvenient.

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing like 'if it's like a hot outside'.

範例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast before going out for work or outings so I can prepare, like bringing an umbrella if it's going to rain. However, I don't check it for short trips near my house.

建議: Focus on clear and concise sentences. Avoid filler words and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: Climate change has caused many negative effects recently, such as increased deforestation and natural disasters. As a result, the climate is changing rapidly and becoming hotter than in previous years.

建議: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates because it would allow me to experience new weather conditions and see which ones I prefer.

× Well, the weather is really quite good because it has all seasons, ottomans, spring, fall.

✓ Well, the weather is really quite good because it has all seasons: autumn, spring, and fall.

The word 'ottomans' is incorrect and should be 'autumn'. Also, when listing seasons, it is clearer to separate them with commas and include 'and' before the last item for proper plural listing.

× So I love that umm currently it's like a moderate, not too hot, not too cold.

✓ So I love that. Umm, currently, it's moderate, not too hot, not too cold.

The phrase 'like a moderate' is incorrect; 'like' is unnecessary here. Also, 'moderate' is an adjective describing the weather, so 'it's moderate' is correct. Adding commas improves clarity.

× So I prefer that weather and my favorite weather is this weather too.

✓ So I prefer that weather, and this is my favorite weather too.

The phrase 'my favorite weather is this weather' is awkward. Rephrasing to 'this is my favorite weather' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yeah, I prefer the cold weather because I feel the hot weather doesn't suit my skin and I prefer cold weather because it gives me the fresh refreshness as well as clear my skin.

✓ Yeah, I prefer cold weather because I feel hot weather doesn't suit my skin, and I prefer cold weather because it gives me freshness and clears my skin.

The phrase 'the fresh refreshness' is redundant; 'freshness' alone suffices. Also, 'clear my skin' should be 'clears my skin' to match subject-verb agreement and proper verb form.

× I prefer dry weather because whenever the weather is dry, I can easily and conveniently go outside as I don't have to cancel my Annie plan.

✓ I prefer dry weather because whenever the weather is dry, I can easily and conveniently go outside as I don't have to cancel my any plans.

'Annie plan' is incorrect; it should be 'any plans' to indicate unspecified plans. Also, 'plans' should be plural to match the quantifier 'any'.

× But in the wet weather I really feel irritating because all the soundings are wet and really it gives me the itching and kind of inconvenient feeling.

✓ But in wet weather, I really feel irritated because all the surroundings are wet, and it really gives me itching and an inconvenient feeling.

'Feel irritating' is incorrect; it should be 'feel irritated' to express the speaker's feeling. 'Soundings' is incorrect; the correct word is 'surroundings'. Also, 'the itching' should be 'itching' without 'the', and 'kind of inconvenient feeling' should be 'an inconvenient feeling' for proper article use.

× Yeah, I am in the habit of checking forecast.

✓ Yeah, I am in the habit of checking the forecast.

The noun 'forecast' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific forecast, so 'checking the forecast' is correct.

× It's usually whenever I want to go outside for outings or for my work, because I have to carry the umbrella with me if it's raining or if it's like a hot outside.

✓ It's usually whenever I want to go outside for outings or for my work because I have to carry an umbrella with me if it's raining or if it's hot outside.

'The umbrella' should be 'an umbrella' as it is not a specific umbrella. Also, 'like a hot outside' is incorrect; it should be 'hot outside' without 'like a'.

× But I don't prefer to check weather when I just go little far from my house.

✓ But I don't prefer to check the weather when I just go a little far from my house.

'Check weather' requires the definite article 'the' to be correct. Also, 'go little far' should be 'go a little far' to use the correct quantifier and article.

× And the reason you're there are a lot of bad effects of the climate change because the deforestation and other disasters are occurring on our daily basis, which is not appropriate for our, umm, environment.

✓ The reason is that there are a lot of bad effects of climate change because deforestation and other disasters are occurring on a daily basis, which is not good for our environment.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect phrasing. 'You're there are' is incorrect; it should be 'there are'. 'The climate change' should be 'climate change' without 'the'. 'On our daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. 'Not appropriate for our environment' is better expressed as 'not good for our environment'.

× So the climate changes very rapidly and becomes so hot as compared to the past years.

✓ So the climate is changing very rapidly and becoming much hotter compared to past years.

Using present continuous tense 'is changing' and 'becoming' better reflects ongoing changes. 'So hot as compared to the past years' is awkward; 'much hotter compared to past years' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yeah, definitely I will prefer to visit the other series which our various climate as compared to my own cities because I California I can, I can I think I can experience other weathers too and can have knowledge and will know like it will suits to me or not.

✓ Yeah, definitely I would prefer to visit other cities which have various climates compared to my own city because in California, I think I can experience other weathers too and gain knowledge to know if they will suit me or not.

'Series' should be 'cities' to match the context. 'Our various climate' is incorrect; it should be 'have various climates'. 'My own cities' should be 'my own city' for singular consistency. 'Will suits to me' is incorrect; it should be 'will suit me'. Also, the sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.