天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문법 오류를 줄이고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I live in Korea, which has four seasons: spring, summer, autumn, and winter. However, recently, summers and winters have become longer, while spring and autumn are shorter.'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

範例: I live in Korea, which experiences four distinct seasons: spring, summer, autumn, and winter. Recently, however, summers and winters have become longer, making spring and autumn quite short.

建議: 문장을 완성형으로 만들고, 중복되는 표현을 피하며, 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'I prefer cold weather because I was born in winter. Also, I find hot weather uncomfortable because I sweat a lot.'

範例: I prefer cold weather because I was born in winter. Also, hot weather makes me sweat a lot, which I find uncomfortable.

建議: 중복된 단어를 제거하고, 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I prefer dry weather because I sweat a lot in wet weather, and I really don't like sweating.'

範例: I prefer dry weather because I tend to sweat a lot when it's wet, and I really dislike sweating.

建議: 현재 시제와 습관을 표현할 때는 'usually'나 'often' 같은 부사를 사용하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예를 들어, 'I don't usually check the weather forecast, but I often do during summer because it rains a lot then.'

範例: I don't usually check the weather forecast, but I often do during summer because it rains a lot then.

建議: 내용을 명확히 하고, 문법과 어휘를 개선하세요. 예를 들어, 'I think climate change has caused more rain in summer, which leads to problems like farm damage and landslides.'

範例: I think climate change has caused more rain during summer, which results in issues like damage to farms and landslides.

建議: 정관사 사용과 문장 구조를 개선하고, 이유를 명확히 하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I would like to visit Finland because it is a cold country, and I prefer cold weather to hot weather.'

範例: Yes, I would like to visit Finland because it is a cold country, and I prefer cold weather to hot weather.

× I'm live in Korea and our country have a four season spring, summer, autumn and winter.

✓ I live in Korea and our country has four seasons: spring, summer, autumn, and winter.

'I'm live' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I live' (present simple). 'Our country have' should be 'our country has' to agree with the singular subject 'country'. 'A four season' should be 'four seasons' because seasons are countable and plural here.

× Spring and autumn is very short.

✓ Spring and autumn are very short.

When two subjects are joined by 'and', the verb should be plural. Therefore, 'is' should be 'are'.

× I prefer cold weather because I born at winter.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I was born in winter.

The verb 'born' needs an auxiliary verb 'was' to form the past passive voice. Also, the preposition 'at' is incorrect here; 'in' is used with seasons.

× Born in winter and umm.

✓ I was born in winter.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be a complete sentence.

× Hot weather, I sweat so it's very uncomfortable.

✓ In hot weather, I sweat, so it's very uncomfortable.

The sentence needs a preposition 'in' before 'hot weather' to be grammatically correct.

× I prefer dry weather because also when when wet weather I sweat, I really don't like sweat.

✓ I prefer dry weather because when it is wet, I sweat; I really don't like sweating.

The sentence has repeated words and incorrect prepositions. 'When when wet weather' should be 'when it is wet'. Also, 'I really don't like sweat' should be 'I really don't like sweating' to use the gerund form.

× I'm not checking the weather forecast, but when summer starts it rains a lot so I check the weather forecast when it is summer.

✓ I don't check the weather forecast regularly, but when summer starts, it rains a lot, so I check the weather forecast during summer.

'I'm not checking' is incorrect for habitual action; use simple present 'I don't check'. Also, 'when it is summer' is better expressed as 'during summer'.

× I think it is weather because in summer we have a lot of rain.

✓ I think it is the weather because in summer we have a lot of rain.

The sentence is unclear; adding 'the' before 'weather' clarifies the meaning. However, the sentence could be improved further for clarity.

× It is too much so the farm and mountain falling down.

✓ It is too much, so the farms and mountains are falling down.

The sentence lacks subject-verb agreement and plural forms. 'Farm' and 'mountain' should be plural. 'Falling down' needs auxiliary verb 'are'.

× Yes, I want to go to visit Finland.

✓ Yes, I want to visit Finland.

The phrase 'go to visit' is redundant; 'want to visit' is sufficient.

× The Finland is cold weather country.

✓ Finland is a cold-weather country.

Country names do not take 'the' unless plural or specific. Also, 'cold weather country' should be hyphenated as 'cold-weather country' and include the article 'a'.

× I like cold weather, so maybe there is not hot.

✓ I like cold weather, so maybe it is not hot there.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'There is not hot' is incorrect; it should be 'it is not hot there'.