天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid vague phrases like "very good" and "just to enjoy the life." Instead, use more descriptive and precise language to make your answer more engaging and natural. Also, try to limit your answer to around 4-5 sentences to keep it concise.

範例: I live in Melbourne, where the weather is quite mild. Summers are warm but rarely uncomfortably hot, and winters are cool without being freezing. This moderate climate makes it pleasant to spend time outdoors throughout the year.

建議: Try to reduce hesitation sounds like "uh" and avoid repeating words. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons and examples using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I prefer cold weather because it's generally more comfortable. For instance, hot weather often brings insects, which can be annoying and make me feel tired. In contrast, cold weather just requires dressing warmly, so I find it easier to enjoy outdoor activities.

建議: Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases like "the WE weather." Also, correct grammar mistakes and provide more specific details to support your preference. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I prefer dry weather because humid conditions make it hard for me to breathe comfortably. Moreover, dry weather usually helps me feel more energetic and active throughout the day.

建議: Your answer is relevant and clear, but try to avoid repeating phrases like "checking the weather forecast." Also, use correct grammar such as "if it's going to rain" and try to make your answer more natural by varying your expressions.

範例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast daily because it helps me plan ahead. For example, if it's going to rain tomorrow, I make sure to take an umbrella with me.

建議: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific examples. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence coherence using linking words.

範例: In recent years, climate change has caused more frequent extreme weather events, such as storms and heatwaves. As a result, many people prefer to stay indoors more than they used to, to avoid these harsh conditions.

建議: Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes for clarity and naturalness.

範例: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates because it offers new experiences. For example, experiencing a warmer or cooler climate helps me understand the local lifestyle better and enjoy a change of scenery.

× Cold weather is uh, more comfortable.

✓ Cold weather is, uh, more comfortable.

A comma is needed after 'is' to separate the filler word 'uh' for better clarity and natural speech flow.

× Uh, for example, in the hot weather, if you're worried about insects, you don't, you will always feel so tired and don't wanna go out at all.

✓ Uh, for example, in hot weather, if you're worried about insects, you will always feel so tired and don't want to go out at all.

The phrase 'you don't, you will' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be 'want to' in formal speech. Removing 'the' before 'hot weather' is appropriate because we talk about weather in general.

× Uh, I prefer dry weather because the WE weather is always so humid and just make me cannot cannot breathe.

✓ Uh, I prefer dry weather because wet weather is always so humid and just makes me unable to breathe.

'WE weather' is a typo and should be 'wet weather'. 'Make me cannot cannot breathe' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'makes me unable to breathe' to correctly express the effect on the subject.

× For example, if it gonna rain tomorrow, I can take an umbrella.

✓ For example, if it's going to rain tomorrow, I can take an umbrella.

'It gonna' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it's going to' to express future intention or prediction.

× I think in recent years the world climate change is very often people usually face extreme weather.

✓ I think in recent years, due to climate change, people often face extreme weather.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'The world climate change is very often people usually face extreme weather' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses proper tense and structure.

× And people don't like to go out as soon as before because of the climate change.

✓ And people don't like to go out as much as before because of climate change.

The phrase 'as soon as before' is incorrect; the correct comparative phrase is 'as much as before' to indicate frequency or degree.

× Yes, of course I enjoy it because it gives me a different experience from I live here and I can know the other city better and I can enjoy and relax just in the weather in the city.

✓ Yes, of course I enjoy it because it gives me a different experience from living here, and I can get to know the other city better and enjoy and relax in the city's weather.

The phrase 'from I live here' is incorrect; it should be 'from living here'. Also, 'I can know the other city better' is unnatural; 'get to know' is more appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.