天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免无关内容，如“I love you Shenzhen”，并且句子结构需更自然流畅。可以简洁描述天气特点，避免重复。

範例: The weather in Shenzhen is mostly hot, lasting for about eight to nine months each year.

建議: 回答应更自然，避免语法错误，如“dress cold jacket”应为“wear a cold jacket”。建议用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯。

範例: I prefer cold weather because I don't like sweating in hot weather, and I enjoy wearing warm jackets on cold days.

建議: 回答中应避免语法错误，如“in my between my clothes and my skin”不通顺。建议使用更准确的表达，并用连词连接句子。

範例: I prefer dry weather because I don't like the humid atmosphere; it makes my clothes stick to my skin, which is uncomfortable.

建議: 回答不完整且语法错误较多。应完整表达习惯和频率，避免句子断裂。

範例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day using a mobile app on my Apple phone.

建議: 回答中语法和词汇错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子，准确表达观点，并避免拼写错误。

範例: In recent years, global temperatures have been rising, causing negative effects like rising sea levels, which may lead to the disappearance of some land areas.

建議: 回答中语法错误和用词不当，如“go Russian”应为“go to Russia”，“fill the deep cold weather”应为“experience the deep cold weather”。建议用连词连接句子，使表达更自然。

範例: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates. For example, I want to go to Russia to experience the deep cold weather, which fascinates me.

× I love you Shenzhen and I think the weather in Shenzhen is often hot, and hot weather will last for approximately 8 to 9 months.

✓ I love Shenzhen and I think the weather in Shenzhen is often hot, and hot weather will last for approximately 8 to 9 months.

句中“I love you Shenzhen”中的“you”是不必要的，应该直接说“I love Shenzhen”。这是单复数问题，去掉多余的代词使句子更自然。

× I prefer cold weather because I don't like sweat as in hot weather and I like to dress cold jacket.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I don't like sweating in hot weather and I like to wear a cold jacket.

“I don't like sweat as in hot weather”中“sweat”应改为动名词“sweating”，表示不喜欢出汗；“I like to dress cold jacket”中“dress”用法错误，应改为“wear a cold jacket”，表示穿冷外套。

× I prefer dry weather, I don't like the humid atmosphere and I will think it's sticky in my between my clothes and my skin.

✓ I prefer dry weather. I don't like the humid atmosphere because I think it's sticky between my clothes and my skin.

“in my between my clothes and my skin”中“in my”多余且错误，应去掉；句子连接不当，建议分句并用because连接，表达更清晰。

× Yes, I will check in the weather forecast everyday, use my mobile application provided by Apple and.

✓ Yes, I check the weather forecast every day using my mobile application provided by Apple.

“check in the weather forecast”中“in”多余，应去掉；“everyday”应为副词短语“every day”；句子末尾“and”无后续内容，应删除。

× Icing the global temperature recent year was rising and that cause a lot of negative efforts such as the rising of sea levels may be cursed some disappearance of mainland.

✓ In recent years, the global temperature has been rising and that has caused a lot of negative effects such as the rising of sea levels which may cause some disappearance of mainland.

“Icing”应为“In”；“recent year”应为“recent years”；“was rising”改为现在完成进行时“has been rising”更合适；“cause”应为过去分词“caused”；“efforts”应为“effects”；“may be cursed”应为“may cause”。

× Yes, I would like to try and for example, I want to go Russian to fill the deep cold weather and that's very fascinating with me.

✓ Yes, I would like to try. For example, I want to go to Russia to feel the deep cold weather and that's very fascinating to me.

“go Russian”应为“go to Russia”；“fill”应为“feel”；“fascinating with me”应为“fascinating to me”；句子连接不当，建议分句。