天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Жауапты қысқа әрі нақты етіп, артық сөздерді алып тастаңыз. Мысалы, 'I live in a town with warm and sunny weather most of the year, but summers are rainy, which I don't like.' деп айтуға болады.

範例: I live in a town where the weather is mostly warm and sunny. However, during summer, it often rains, and I don't enjoy the rainy days.

建議: Жауапты құрылымдап, байланысты сөздерді қолданыңыз. Мысалы, 'I don't like extreme temperatures, but I prefer hot weather because it's easier to dress lightly and enjoy activities like swimming.'

範例: I don't like very cold or very hot weather. However, I prefer hot weather because I can wear light clothes and enjoy swimming at the beach.

建議: Жауапты қысқаша және нақты етіп, грамматикалық қателерді түзетіңіз. Мысалы, 'I prefer dry weather because rain makes everything wet, and it affects my hair, making it curly, which I don't like.'

範例: I prefer dry weather because rain makes everything wet. Also, my hair becomes curly after rain, and I don't like that.

建議: Жауапты қысқаша әрі нақты етіп, байланысты сөздерді қолданыңыз. Мысалы, 'I usually don't check the weather forecast because I can see the weather outside and dress accordingly.'

範例: I usually don't check the weather forecast because I can see the weather outside and choose my clothes accordingly.

建議: Жауапты құрылымдап, нақты мысалдармен толықтырыңыз. Мысалы, 'Climate change, especially global warming, disrupts ecosystems and affects both wildlife and humans, leading to serious problems like extreme weather.'

範例: Climate change, especially global warming, disrupts ecosystems and affects both wildlife and humans. It can cause serious problems such as extreme weather events.

建議: Жауапты нақты әрі грамматикалық тұрғыдан дұрыс етіп айтыңыз. Мысалы, 'I would like to visit cities with different climates to learn how people adapt and live there.'

範例: I would like to visit cities with different climates because it's interesting to see how people adapt and live in those environments.

× I think that in the town where I live there is a very warm weather and there is sunny a lot of time, but in the summers there are a lot of rains and it **** me off.

✓ I think that in the town where I live there is very warm weather and it is sunny a lot of the time, but in the summers there is a lot of rain and it **** me off.

The phrase 'there is a very warm weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not take 'a'. Also, 'there is sunny a lot of time' is incorrect; it should be 'it is sunny a lot of the time'. Similarly, 'there are a lot of rains' is incorrect because 'rain' is uncountable; it should be 'there is a lot of rain'. These are examples of 'There be' issues where the verb and noun agreement with countable/uncountable nouns must be correct.

× Actually I don't like super cold or super hot weather, but if I would choose between them I would go with hot weather because it's much cooler when you're not wearing some heavy clothes and you can just some bathing for example on the beach.

✓ Actually I don't like super cold or super hot weather, but if I had to choose between them I would go with hot weather because it's much cooler when you're not wearing heavy clothes and you can just go bathing, for example, on the beach.

The phrase 'if I would choose' is incorrect; the correct form is 'if I had to choose' or 'if I were to choose' because in conditional sentences, 'would' is not used in the 'if' clause. Also, 'you can just some bathing' is missing a verb; it should be 'you can just go bathing'. This is a modal verb usage issue and verb form issue.

× Actually I don't like super cold or super hot weather, but if I would choose between them I would go with hot weather because it's much cooler when you're not wearing some heavy clothes and you can just some bathing for example on the beach.

✓ Actually I don't like super cold or super hot weather, but if I had to choose between them I would go with hot weather because it's much cooler when you're not wearing heavy clothes and you can just go bathing, for example, on the beach.

The use of 'some heavy clothes' is incorrect here because 'heavy clothes' is a general plural noun and does not require 'some' in this context. Removing 'some' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers.

× I prefer dry weather because after the rain there's always wet everywhere and I hate it because I straightening my hair and when the weather comes my straight hair becomes very curly and I don't like it.

✓ I prefer dry weather because after the rain everything is always wet and I hate it because I straighten my hair and when the weather comes my straight hair becomes very curly and I don't like it.

The phrase 'there's always wet everywhere' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'everything is always wet'. Also, 'I straightening my hair' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I straighten my hair'. These are issues with prepositions and verb forms.

× I think climate changes, especially global warming, has a very disruptive effect on environment, especially if we talk about the wildlife and in general like human beings, and it may lead to very bad consequences.

✓ I think climate change, especially global warming, has a very disruptive effect on the environment, especially if we talk about wildlife and, in general, human beings, and it may lead to very bad consequences.

The phrase 'climate changes' should be 'climate change' as it is an uncountable noun referring to the phenomenon. Also, 'effect on environment' needs the definite article 'the' before 'environment'. 'The wildlife' is better as 'wildlife' without 'the' because it is a general term. 'In general like human beings' is incorrect; it should be 'in general, human beings'. These are present tense and article usage issues.

× I think I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because it's interesting to look how people live in that environment and used to this environment actually.

✓ I think I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because it's interesting to see how people live in that environment and are used to this environment, actually.

The phrase 'look how people live' is incorrect; it should be 'see how people live'. Also, 'used to this environment' needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present tense passive 'are used to'. These are incorrect preposition and verb form issues.