天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문장이 단절되어 있습니다. 문장을 연결하는 연결어를 사용하고, 중복된 표현을 줄이며, 문장 구조를 명확히 하세요.

範例: The weather in Abu Dhabi is extremely hot, especially from May to October. This makes it challenging for me because I have two little boys who want to go outside every day, but the heat often keeps us indoors.

建議: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끊겨 이해하기 어렵습니다. 명확한 주제문을 제시하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며, 문장을 완성하세요.

範例: I used to prefer hot weather when I lived in Korea because the summers were pleasant. However, now I am tired of the hot weather in Abu Dhabi, especially since I have two young children who want to play outside.

建議: 문장이 단절되고 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 구체적인 이유를 명확히 표현하세요.

範例: I absolutely prefer dry weather because it allows me and my two young boys to stay outside comfortably. Dry weather makes outdoor activities more enjoyable for us.

建議: 문장이 불완전하고 반복적입니다. 문장을 완성하고, 습관과 이유를 명확히 설명하며, 연결어를 사용하세요.

範例: Yes, I regularly check the weather forecast in Abu Dhabi because the temperature can get very high. Since I have two young boys who want to play outside, it's important to know the weather in advance.

建議: 답변이 단절되고 불완전합니다. 명확한 주제문을 제시하고, 구체적인 예시와 경험을 포함해 문장을 완성하세요.

範例: I think one of the main effects of climate change is that summers are becoming hotter than before. I have lived in Abu Dhabi for 18 years, so I can clearly feel this change.

建議: 문장이 불완전하고 반복적입니다. 방문하고 싶은 이유를 명확히 하고, 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

範例: Yes, I would like to visit a city called Dalseong in South Korea because it has distinct seasons. I have been living in Abu Dhabi for eight years, so I want to experience different climates and enjoy the seasonal changes.

× I have two little boys who wants to go outside every day.

✓ I have two little boys who want to go outside every day.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'boys', which is plural, so the verb should be 'want' instead of 'wants' to agree in number.

× From May to October.

✓ The hot season is from May to October.

'From May to October.' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be combined with the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.

× But stay.

✓ But they stay inside.

'But stay.' is incomplete and unclear. It needs a subject and verb to form a complete sentence.

× I used to prefer I used to prefer hot weather when I was living in Korea because summer in Korea is really good.

✓ I used to prefer hot weather when I was living in Korea because summer in Korea is really good.

The phrase 'I used to prefer' is repeated unnecessarily, causing redundancy and disrupting sentence flow.

× However, I am really tired of. Weather in Abu Dhabi.

✓ However, I am really tired of the weather in Abu Dhabi.

The sentence is fragmented and missing the article 'the' before 'weather'. Also, the period after 'of' is incorrect.

× Because. Big since I have two little kids who won.

✓ Because it's big since I have two little kids who want to go outside every day.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'won' is likely a typo for 'want'. Also, 'kids' is plural, so the verb should be 'want'. The phrase 'Because. Big' is incorrect and needs rephrasing.

× I can stay outside with comfortable an. State ride since I have two young boys who wants to go outside every day.

✓ I can stay outside comfortably since I have two young boys who want to go outside every day.

The phrase 'with comfortable an. State ride' is incorrect and unclear. 'Comfortably' is the correct adverb to describe 'stay outside'. Also, 'who wants' should be 'who want' to agree with plural 'boys'.

× who wants to go outside every day.

✓ who want to go outside every day.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'boys', which is plural, so the verb should be 'want' instead of 'wants'.

× Yes, I have a habit to checking temperature in Abu Dhabi because.

✓ Yes, I have a habit of checking the temperature in Abu Dhabi because.

The correct preposition after 'habit' is 'of', not 'to'. Also, 'checking temperature' should be 'checking the temperature'.

× I think checking up temperature in Abu Dhabi is crucial.

✓ I think checking the temperature in Abu Dhabi is crucial.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'temperature' to specify it. Also, 'checking up temperature' is incorrect; 'checking the temperature' is correct.

× Since I have two young boys. Who wants to go outside every?

✓ Since I have two young boys who want to go outside every day.

The sentence is fragmented and 'wants' should be 'want' to agree with plural 'boys'. Also, 'every' is incomplete and should be 'every day'.

× I think summers. Summers becoming summer. Summer is becoming more. Hotter than before is the main effect of global trend.

✓ I think summers are becoming hotter than before, which is the main effect of the global trend.

The original sentences are fragmented and repetitive. 'Hotter' is a comparative adjective and should be used with 'more' omitted. The sentence needs to be combined for clarity.

× I want to visit other city name Dalston in South Korea because it has distinct different seasons.

✓ I want to visit another city named Dalston in South Korea because it has distinct different seasons.

'Other city' should be 'another city' when referring to one city. 'Name' should be 'named' to describe the city. Also, 'distinct different' is redundant; one adjective is sufficient.

× Because I been living, I've been living in Abu Dhabi for eight years.

✓ Because I've been living in Abu Dhabi for eight years.

The phrase 'Because I been living,' is incorrect and redundant. The correct form is 'Because I've been living'.