天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ содержит несколько ошибок в произношении и грамматике, а также избыточные и нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется улучшить структуру ответа, избегать повторов и использовать более точные слова. Например, "mean temperature" вместо "meanness". Также стоит сократить ответ до 3-4 предложений, чтобы он был более естественным.

範例: I live in Asanam, a city in northern Kazakhstan, which is known for its cold and windy weather. In winter, temperatures can drop to around -40 degrees Celsius. This makes the climate quite harsh during that season.

建議: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения, а также нечеткую структуру. Рекомендуется использовать связующие слова для логичности и разнообразить лексику. Например, использовать "I prefer cold weather because it feels soothing and comforting." Также стоит избегать повторов и уточнять причины предпочтения.

範例: I prefer cold weather because I find it soothing and comforting. Usually, I like to stay at home when it's cold outside rather than going out in hot weather.

建議: Ответ содержит много ошибок и неясных выражений, например, "help with hyper city and weather" и "make it really fluffy". Рекомендуется улучшить грамматику, использовать точные слова и объяснять причины предпочтения более понятно. Также стоит избегать ошибок в словах, например, "addiction" вместо "in addition".

範例: I prefer dry weather because I have hay fever, and wet weather makes it worse. Also, I have oily skin, and humid conditions tend to make it greasier.

建議: Ответ понятен, но содержит некоторые грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Рекомендуется улучшить структуру предложения и использовать более естественные фразы, например, "I usually check the weather on my phone in the evening to decide what to wear the next day."

範例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast on my phone in the evening to decide what to wear the next day. Sometimes, I also check it just before going outside.

建議: Ответ содержит много ошибок и нечетких выражений, например, "their main change of Claymates" и "more over I felt it on my myself". Рекомендуется улучшить грамматику, использовать правильные слова и строить предложения более логично. Также стоит добавить конкретные примеры изменений климата.

範例: I believe the main effect of climate change is global warming. For example, I live in a very cold town, but recently, the winters have become warmer than before.

建議: Ответ понятен, но содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения, например, "our areas" вместо "other areas". Рекомендуется улучшить грамматику, использовать более точные слова и связки, а также расширить ответ, добавив причины желания посетить такие места.

範例: Of course, I would like to visit cities with different climates. Since I live in a freezing cold city, I dream of visiting warm and wet places like Hawaii, which has been my dream since childhood.

× We have a meanness of 40° outside in winter sometimes.

✓ We have a mean temperature of 40° outside in winter sometimes.

The word 'meanness' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'mean' when referring to average temperature. Also, 'temperature' should be included for clarity.

× I tend to say at home at cold weather and I would rather to stay at home at cold weather then go out on the hot weather.

✓ I tend to stay at home in cold weather and I would rather stay at home in cold weather than go out in hot weather.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'cold weather'; 'in' is the correct preposition. Also, 'say' should be 'stay', and 'would rather to stay' should be 'would rather stay'. 'Then' should be 'than' for comparison.

× I have help with hyper city and weather.

✓ I have help with hypersensitivity to city and weather.

The original sentence is unclear and likely a mistranslation. Assuming the student means they have hypersensitivity, the phrase should be 'hypersensitivity to city and weather'.

× Weather can make it really fluffy.

✓ Weather can make it really flaky.

The adjective 'fluffy' is incorrect in this context; likely the student means 'flaky' to describe skin condition.

× In addiction, I have oily skin and wet weather can make it even more greasy.

✓ In addition, I have oily skin and wet weather can make it even greasier.

The phrase 'In addiction' is incorrect; it should be 'In addition'. Also, 'more greasy' is better expressed as 'greasier'.

× I usually check it in my phone at evening when I think what should I wear to the next day or I tend to check it when I I'm already going outside.

✓ I usually check it on my phone in the evening when I think about what I should wear the next day, or I tend to check it when I'm already going outside.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' for 'phone'. 'At evening' should be 'in the evening'. The sentence structure is improved by adding 'about' after 'think' and removing unnecessary words.

× I think their main change of. Claymates it's global warming and the more over I felt it on my myself.

✓ I think the main change in climate is global warming, and moreover, I have felt it myself.

'Their' should be 'the'. 'Claymates' is a misspelling of 'climate'. 'More over' should be 'moreover'. 'I felt it on my myself' is incorrect; 'I have felt it myself' is correct.

× I live in freezing cold town and I felt that we already have warmer.

✓ I live in a freezing cold town and I feel that it is already warmer.

Missing article 'a' before 'freezing cold town'. 'Felt' should be 'feel' to match present tense. 'We already have warmer' is incomplete; corrected to 'it is already warmer'.

× I live in freezing cold city and I would like to visit our areas that have wet or hot weather like Hawaii that have been my dream since childhood.

✓ I live in a freezing cold city and I would like to visit other areas that have wet or hot weather like Hawaii, which has been my dream since childhood.

Missing article 'a' before 'freezing cold city'. 'Our areas' should be 'other areas'. 'That have been my dream' should be 'which has been my dream' to refer to Hawaii.