天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'Viet 9' nên là 'Vietnam', 'men seasons' nên là 'main seasons'). Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, tránh lỗi và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

範例: I live in a tropical area in Vietnam where there are two main seasons: the sunny season and the rainy season. During sunny days, people enjoy outdoor activities like hiking or going to the beach. However, the rainy season can be challenging for commuters due to heavy rain and flooding.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: '1 weather' nên là 'hot weather'). Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và từ vựng phù hợp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I prefer hot and sunny weather because I enjoy outdoor activities. For instance, I like hiking and climbing mountains to watch the sunrise and sunset, which is difficult during cold or rainy days. Therefore, hot weather allows me to enjoy these activities without interruptions.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'very weather' không rõ nghĩa, 'fear uncomfortable wearing them' không đúng). Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu ngắn gọn hơn.

範例: I definitely prefer dry and sunny weather because high humidity during rainy days makes it hard for my clothes to dry. For example, when clothes stay damp for a long time, they become uncomfortable to wear. Also, dry weather allows me to go outside and be more active.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu sự liên kết và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, câu không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên luyện tập cách nối câu bằng liên từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I don't usually check the weather forecast, but I do it sometimes before a trip. It is necessary to know if the weather will be sunny or rainy the next day so I can pack suitable clothes.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'leased' nên là 'led', 'course in damage' không đúng). Bạn nên luyện tập cách sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn.

範例: In recent years, climate change has caused severe droughts that have seriously affected farmers by damaging their crops, leading to food shortages. Additionally, extreme weather events like floods and storms have become more frequent, causing damage to homes and infrastructure.

建議: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu ngắn gọn hơn và từ vựng chính xác hơn (ví dụ: 'surrounded by snow' nên là 'covered with snow'). Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt tự nhiên và rõ ràng hơn.

範例: Yes, I dream of visiting Korea, which is covered with snow in winter. In my country, we only have two seasons: rainy and sunny, so we don't have snow to enjoy activities like building snowmen or skiing.

× I live in a tropical area in Viet 9 and the weather is divided into two men seasons, the sunny season and the rainy season.

✓ I live in a tropical area in Viet Nam and the weather is divided into two main seasons, the sunny season and the rainy season.

The word 'men' is a typo and should be 'main' to correctly describe the two primary seasons. Also, 'Viet 9' seems to be a typo for 'Viet Nam'. This correction ensures clarity and correct plural usage.

× On sunny days, people usually do outdoor activities like hiking or going to the beach that during rainy season is really hard for those who commute to work every day because of heavy rain and flood.

✓ On sunny days, people usually do outdoor activities like hiking or going to the beach, but during the rainy season, it is really hard for those who commute to work every day because of heavy rain and floods.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunction and punctuation, causing confusion. Adding 'but' and commas improves sentence flow and clarity. Also, 'flood' should be plural 'floods' to match the context.

× Therefore, 1 weather or hot weather do allow me to fully enjoy these activities without any interruptions.

✓ Therefore, warm weather or hot weather does allow me to fully enjoy these activities without any interruptions.

The phrase '1 weather' is incorrect; it should be 'warm weather'. Also, 'do allow' should be 'does allow' because the subject is singular ('weather'). This corrects subject-verb agreement and word choice.

× For example, when my clothes stay down for a long time, I fear uncomfortable wearing them.

✓ For example, when my clothes stay damp for a long time, I feel uncomfortable wearing them.

The phrase 'stay down' is incorrect; it should be 'stay damp' to indicate moisture. Also, 'I fear uncomfortable wearing them' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel uncomfortable wearing them' to properly express sensation.

× Also, very weather allows me to go out, an interactive it is.

✓ Also, dry weather allows me to go out and be active.

The phrase 'very weather' is incorrect; it should be 'dry weather'. 'An interactive it is' is ungrammatical and unclear; replacing it with 'and be active' conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× I don't usually check the weather forecast, but I do sometimes before I have a trip. Which is really necessary for me to see what's gonna be on the next day.

✓ I don't usually check the weather forecast, but I sometimes do before I have a trip, which is really necessary for me to see what the weather will be like the next day.

The sentence fragment 'Which is really necessary...' should be connected to the previous sentence. Also, 'gonna be' is informal; 'will be like' is more appropriate in this context.

× Weather is sunny or rainy to prepare to. Just like a pack some suitable clothes on my package.

✓ Knowing whether the weather is sunny or rainy helps me prepare. For example, I pack suitable clothes in my luggage.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Weather is sunny or rainy to prepare to' lacks subject and verb agreement. 'Pack some suitable clothes on my package' is incorrect; 'pack suitable clothes in my luggage' is correct.

× In recent years, climate change has caused severe droughts which have seriously affected farmers by damaging their crops that leased to a shortage of food supply make it difficult for people to access in a fruit.

✓ In recent years, climate change has caused severe droughts which have seriously affected farmers by damaging their crops, leading to a shortage of food supply and making it difficult for people to access fruit.

The phrase 'that leased to' is incorrect; it should be 'leading to'. Also, 'make it difficult' should be 'making it difficult' to maintain parallel structure. 'Access in a fruit' is incorrect; 'access fruit' is correct.

× Additionally, extreme weather events like floods and storms have become more frequent course in damage to homes and infrastructure.

✓ Additionally, extreme weather events like floods and storms have become more frequent, causing damage to homes and infrastructure.

The phrase 'frequent course in damage' is incorrect. It should be 'more frequent, causing damage' to correctly express the cause-effect relationship.

× Yes, I do have a dream to visit Korea, which is the country surrounded by snow during winter because in my country there are only two seasons which are rainy and sunny and we don't have snow to be engaged in some activities like building a snowman or skiing.

✓ Yes, I do have a dream to visit Korea, which is a country surrounded by snow during winter because in my country there are only two seasons, rainy and sunny, and we don't have snow to engage in activities like building a snowman or skiing.

'The country' should be 'a country' because Korea is one of many countries. 'To be engaged in' is incorrect; it should be 'to engage in' to correctly express participation in activities.