天气— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to use clearer and more natural expressions to describe the weather. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word usage. For example, instead of 'a horde is very hot', say 'it is extremely hot'. Also, organize your answer logically and keep it concise within 5 sentences.

範例: The weather where I live is very hot, especially during June, July, and August. It can be difficult to go outside because of the intense heat. Usually, temperatures rise above 40 degrees Celsius during these months.

建議: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct word choice. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas logically. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar. For example, say 'I prefer cold weather because it helps me feel more comfortable and less tired.'

範例: I prefer cold weather because it keeps my body cool and helps me feel more energetic. In hot weather, I get tired quickly and feel uncomfortable. Therefore, cold weather is better for me.

建議: Clarify your preference by directly answering the question. Use linking words to explain reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'it said' and improve sentence coherence. For example, say 'I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable and easier to go outside.'

範例: I prefer dry weather because it is more comfortable for me. Wet weather can make it difficult to go outside and can be inconvenient. Therefore, I like a moderate, dry climate.

建議: Improve clarity and grammar by using simple and correct sentences. Use linking words like 'so' and 'because' to explain reasons. For example, say 'I check the weather forecast every day, especially before traveling, so I can prepare appropriate clothes.'

範例: I usually check the weather forecast every day. Before traveling to a different place, I check the climate there so I can pack suitable clothes. For example, if it's cold, I bring a sweater, and if it's hot, I wear light clothes.

建議: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas. Provide specific examples or effects you have learned about. For example, say 'Climate change causes extreme weather like floods and droughts because of human activities.'

範例: I believe climate change has caused more extreme weather events recently. For example, there are more floods and droughts because of pollution and deforestation. I have read about these effects in newspapers and textbooks.

建議: Use clear and complete sentences to express your ideas. Avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to explain reasons. For example, say 'I would like to visit cities with different climates to learn about their culture and prepare well before traveling.'

範例: I would like to visit cities with different climates to experience new cultures and environments. Before traveling, I usually research the place to prepare properly and enjoy my visit more.

× Now the weather here is too much.

✓ Now the weather here is too extreme.

The phrase 'too much' is incorrectly used to describe weather. 'Too much' quantifies uncountable nouns or actions, but weather is better described with adjectives like 'extreme' or 'hot'. Use 'too extreme' to express excessive weather conditions.

× A horde is very hot outside.

✓ It is very hot outside.

The word 'horde' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'heat'. Also, 'A horde is very hot' is incorrect sentence structure. The correct sentence is 'It is very hot outside.' Use 'it' as the subject to refer to weather conditions.

× because of the ultimate hot weather here and there usually are June, July, August ones here is very hot.

✓ because of the extremely hot weather here, and usually June, July, and August are very hot months here.

The phrase 'ultimate hot weather' is incorrect; 'extremely hot weather' is appropriate. Also, 'there usually are June, July, August ones here is very hot' is ungrammatical. The correct structure is 'usually June, July, and August are very hot months here.' Use definite articles and plural forms properly.

× In my personal opinion, at the cold weather is more much better than hurt,

✓ In my personal opinion, cold weather is much better than hot weather,

The phrase 'at the cold weather' is incorrect; 'cold weather' without 'the' is correct here. 'More much better' is redundant; use 'much better'. 'Hurt' is a misspelling of 'hot'. Correct the sentence accordingly.

× because during cold weather we will become so exhausted can tired very fastly.

✓ because during hot weather we become exhausted and tired very quickly.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'cold weather' when the context suggests 'hot weather'. Also, 'can tired' is incorrect; use 'become tired'. 'Fastly' is not a word; use 'quickly'. Correct quantifiers and adverbs accordingly.

× In cold weather, our body will be also very cool and we will not be very tired very shortly.

✓ In cold weather, our body will also be very cool and we will not get tired quickly.

The phrase 'very tired very shortly' is incorrect; 'get tired quickly' is appropriate. Also, 'our body' should be 'our bodies' to agree in number with 'we'. Correct pronoun and adverb usage.

× That's why it's I prefer cold weather better than hot and to make our body very calm and drill.

✓ That's why I prefer cold weather to hot weather because it makes our body calm and relaxed.

The phrase 'it's I prefer' is incorrect; use 'I prefer'. 'Better than hot' should be 'to hot weather'. 'Drill' is incorrect; likely intended 'still' or 'relaxed'. Correct pronoun and word choice.

× Actually, I like a particular cool weather.

✓ Actually, I like particularly cool weather.

'A particular cool weather' is incorrect; 'weather' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Use 'particularly cool weather' to express preference.

× I don't like too much of hot or too much of cold weather, it said.

✓ I don't like too much hot or too much cold weather; that is what I mean.

The phrase 'too much of hot or too much of cold weather' is awkward. Use 'too much hot or too much cold weather'. 'It said' is unclear; replaced with 'that is what I mean' for clarity.

× I snow day you shall habit of mind to check the weather every day and if I am planning to go somewhere else, it's a necessary things to check the weather our climate of that place.

✓ Nowadays, I have the habit of checking the weather every day, and if I am planning to go somewhere else, it is necessary to check the climate of that place.

The phrase 'I snow day you shall habit of mind' is incorrect and unclear. Corrected to 'Nowadays, I have the habit'. 'It's a necessary things' is incorrect; use 'it is necessary'. Correct pronoun and article usage.

× It will make precautions.

✓ It helps me take precautions.

'It will make precautions' is incorrect; 'make precautions' is not idiomatic. Use 'helps me take precautions' to express the intended meaning.

× If you're going out very cold place, we have to a keep a blanket or a sweater or like that.

✓ If you're going to a very cold place, we have to keep a blanket or a sweater or something like that.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'going'. 'We have to a keep' is incorrect; remove 'a'. 'Or like that' is informal; use 'or something like that'.

× And if you are going in a hot weather, we have to prepare according that over address.

✓ And if you are going to a hot place, we have to prepare accordingly with appropriate clothing.

'Going in a hot weather' is incorrect; use 'going to a hot place'. 'Prepare according that over address' is unclear; corrected to 'prepare accordingly with appropriate clothing'.

× I think her there is a lot of climate change all around the walls because of some human practices.

✓ I think there is a lot of climate change all around the world because of some human practices.

'Her there' is incorrect; use 'there'. 'Walls' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'world'. Correct pronoun and noun usage.

× I have learned it from newspaper and some textbook and I don't know more about their actual actual case.

✓ I have learned about it from newspapers and some textbooks, but I don't know much about the actual cases.

'Newspaper' and 'textbook' should be plural. 'Their actual actual case' is unclear; corrected to 'actual cases'. Correct pronoun and quantifier usage.

× I don't have a real life experience of hanging out different places in worldwide but according to my experience in care law there is.

✓ I don't have real-life experience of visiting different places worldwide, but according to my experience in my area, there is.

'Hanging out different places in worldwide' is incorrect; use 'visiting different places worldwide'. 'Care law' is unclear; likely 'my area'. Correct pronoun and phrase usage.

× Is I do I like to visit and explore the different places and the climate there and culture they're untraditional layer there or like that about it.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to visit and explore different places, their climates, and cultures, especially traditional layers or aspects there.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Corrected to proper sentence structure with clear subject and verb agreement and clearer meaning.

× Before going to some places, I have to I have to do some studies about that place because not only we have it to to experience more, but also we have.

✓ Before going to some places, I have to study about that place because not only do we get to experience more, but we also have other reasons.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Corrected for clarity, removing repetition and completing the thought.