写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers (uh, umm) and avoid unclear phrases such as “type in a long test.” Use linking words for coherence (for example, also, because).

範例: Yes, I write a lot, mainly because my job requires a lot of written reports. In my free time I also enjoy writing short stories and essays, so I usually write both at work and at home.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then provide specific reasons linked with examples. Correct small grammar errors and use linking words (for example, because, also) to make the response natural and coherent.

範例: I enjoy writing essays, poetry and short stories because it relaxes me and helps me express my creativity. For example, I often share my poems with family and friends, and their feedback motivates me to keep improving.

建議: Provide a clear, grammatically correct explanation with one specific reason and an example. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases. Use linking words such as because or when to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I think my writing will change as I gain new experiences because they influence my ideas and themes. For instance, after traveling, I started writing more descriptive pieces about different cultures.

建議: Answer directly and clearly, avoid long hesitations and unclear or incorrect sentences. State your preference, give two specific reasons and one brief example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "handwriting" not "write him") and avoid confusing phrases.

範例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more tactile and helps me think more creatively. For example, when I write by hand I often make notes and sketches that inspire new story ideas.

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence about current habit, then briefly explain past practice with a specific detail. Avoid repetition and filler words.

範例: I don't keep a diary at the moment. I used to keep something like a notebook where I recorded ideas and thoughts rather than a daily personal diary.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and then give one or two specific methods with reasons. Reduce hesitations and correct small grammar issues. Use linking words like for example, so, and because to make it coherent.

範例: I usually record my dreams with a voice recorder on my phone so I don't forget them. Later, I plan to write some of these recordings into short stories or diary entries.

× Yes I do, because at work I need to write for many things.

✓ Yes, I do, because at work I need to write about many things.

The phrase 'write for many things' uses incorrect preposition/article combination. 'Write about many things' is the natural collocation to express topics one writes on. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I also type in a long uh, test and I also enjoy writing at home, like a hobby for example.

✓ I also type long texts, and I enjoy writing at home as a hobby, for example.

The original uses 'a long uh, test' which is incorrect noun and article choice. The intended meaning is likely 'long texts' (plural) and present simple fits habitual actions. Reordering improves clarity.

× I usually write short stories and essays as well.

✓ I usually write short stories and essays as well.

This sentence is already grammatically correct; no change needed. Included to indicate no error of agreement.

× I like writing because it's a relaxing hobby for me and I really enjoy sharing them with my friends, my family and my husband.

✓ I like writing because it's a relaxing hobby for me and I really enjoy sharing it with my friends, my family, and my husband.

The pronoun 'them' refers to plural, but 'writing' is an uncountable noun here, so use 'it'. Also add commas for list clarity.

× For me is a creative part of my life.

✓ For me, it is a creative part of my life.

The sentence lacks a subject. English requires an explicit subject 'it' in this construction. Adding a comma after the introductory phrase improves flow.

× Do you think the things you write would change?

✓ Do you think the things you write will change?

The question asks about future change; 'will' is the usual modal for future predictions in this context. 'Would' is conditional and less appropriate without a conditional clause.

× Yes, uh, they probably change because I think if I leave new experiences, I can't, you know, umm, put that in my writing, my rights.

✓ Yes, they will probably change because I think if I have new experiences, I can put them into my writing.

Multiple issues: tense and modal choice ('will probably change' for future), incorrect verb 'leave' should be 'have', incorrect negation 'can't' contradicted intent, and 'my rights' is incorrect noun—use 'my writing'. Also use 'them' to refer to experiences or ideas when putting into writing.

× Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?

✓ Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you write?

Both forms are acceptable, but 'when you write' is more natural and concise than 'when you are writing.' This aligns tense consistency for habitual preference questions.

× I definitely prefer handwriting when I write him because for me it's a sensorial experience and I really like, uh, my handwriting.

✓ I definitely prefer handwriting when I write because for me it's a sensory experience and I really like my handwriting.

'Write him' is incorrect pronoun; remove 'him'. 'Sensorial' is uncommon in this context; 'sensory' is the correct adjective. Remove unnecessary filler commas.

× Umm, I love the way that I can't, you know, umm, ride against something that I didn't like it.

✓ I love the way I can write about things that I like or dislike.

Original is confused and contains incorrect verbs and pronouns ('ride', 'didn't like it'). Clarify intended meaning: using handwriting to express preferences; use 'write' and simplify structure.

× And he writes a good, uh, system for the dad.

✓ And it creates a good system for me.

Pronoun 'he' and phrase 'for the dad' are unclear and likely incorrect. Replace with neutral 'it' referring to handwriting or the habit, and clarify meaning. Adjust to coherent sentence.

× To be honest, I don't have a diary right now. I used to have one and it didn't have, it didn't was uh, uh, diary at all.

✓ To be honest, I don't have a diary right now. I used to have one, but it wasn't really a diary at all.

Incorrect past negative construction 'didn't was' should be 'wasn't'. Simplify to natural past tense: 'wasn't really a diary'.

× It was more like, umm, I, I was writing about my ideas in general.

✓ It was more like me writing down my ideas in general.

Original is understandable but wordy. Use a concise gerund phrase 'me writing down my ideas' to express the function of the notebook.

× To record my life, I'm not really sure about that.

✓ I'm not really sure about other ways to record my life.

Sentence order and preposition use are awkward. Rephrase to directly state uncertainty about other methods.

× For, for example, to record my dreams, I usually use the, uh, recorder that I have here in the phone.

✓ For example, to record my dreams, I usually use the recorder on my phone.

Simplify phrasing and use 'on my phone' rather than 'here in the phone'; 'recorder' is countable but 'the recorder on my phone' is natural.

× I like uh, to record a few dreams when I wake up in the morning, so I I avoid forget them

✓ I like to record a few dreams when I wake up in the morning, so I avoid forgetting them.

Use the gerund 'forgetting' after 'avoid'. Remove duplicated 'I'. Present simple 'avoid forgetting' fits habitual action.

× And probably in the future I would like to write about these dreams.

✓ And probably in the future I would like to write about these dreams.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'would like to' correctly expresses a future desire. Included to indicate no change needed.