写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap daha doğal ve dilbilgisi açısından düzgün olmalı. Konu cümlesinde doğrudan cevap verin, ardından yazma sıklığı ve türleri hakkında 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Gereksiz duraklamaları ve tekrarları kaldırın. Örneğin 'I'm a poetry kind of' ve 'It's makes me. Breath.' gibi hataları düzelterek akıcı bir cümle kurun.

範例: Yes, I write every day because I enjoy poetry and fiction. I usually spend a few hours each day writing, which helps me express my thoughts and relax.

建議: Cevap açık olmalı ve tekrarlar azaltılmalı. İlk cümlede doğrudan ne yazdığınızı söyleyin, sonra nedenini mantıklı bağlaçlarla (because, so, when) açıklayın. Gereksiz doldurma kelimelerini (uh, to, I to) çıkarın ve fiil uyumuna dikkat edin.

範例: I prefer writing poems because they help me relax and process emotions. When I feel down, I take a pencil and write to organize my thoughts and lift my mood.

建議: Cevabı daha net ve mantıklı bir yapı ile kurun. İlk olarak kısa bir görüş belirtin (Yes/No + reason) sonra geleceğe dair bir tahmin veya örnek verin. Belirsiz ifadeler ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. 'nothing never change' ve 'Volt came a different way').

範例: Yes, I believe my writing will change as I grow older because my experiences and interests evolve. For example, I might focus more on novels in the future as my style and ideas develop.

建議: Açık bir tercih belirtin ve nedenleri mantıklı bağlaçlarla verin. Dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimine dikkat edin ('it's feel real' → 'it feels more real'; 'with him writing' yanlış). "Killing emotions" gibi abartılı ifadeler yerine daha doğal alternatifler kullanın.

範例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and helps me connect with my emotions. Typing is faster, but handwriting lets me think more slowly and reflectively.

建議: Zaman ifadelerini doğru kullanın (e.g. 'When I was a child'). İlk cümlede geçmiş alışkanlığınızı açıkça belirtin, sonra şimdiye dair kısa karşılaştırma yapın. Cümleleri daha sade ve akıcı kurun.

範例: When I was a child I kept a diary every day to practice a new language. Now I don't keep one regularly because I am busy with work and studies.

建議: Cümleyi daha düzenli ve gramer açısından doğru kurun. Konu cümlesinde yöntemi belirtin, ardından nedenini bağlaçla açıklayın. Tekrarlayan kelimeleri çıkarın ve fiil zamanlarına dikkat edin.

範例: I often use my phone to take photos and short videos to record my life because looking back at them makes me happy and brings back memories.

× Yes, I do every single day because I'm a poetry kind of and I love write poems and novels.

✓ Yes, I do every single day because I'm the poetic type and I love to write poems and novels.

The phrase 'a poetry kind of' is ungrammatical; use 'the poetic type' (adjective form). Also 'love write' needs the infinitive 'to write'. Use articles and adjective forms correctly.

× I always write half of my day.

✓ I always spend half of my day writing.

The original 'write half of my day' is awkward and suggests wrong structure. Use 'spend half of my day writing' to express duration; 'writing' is a present participle used as a noun phrase.

× It's makes me. Breath.

✓ It makes me breathe.

'It's makes me. Breath.' mixes contraction and incorrect punctuation; 'makes' should follow subject 'It' without contraction 'It's', and 'breathe' is the verb. Remove extra punctuation and use correct verb form.

× I'd like to write poems because it's makes me relax, help me relax, uh, when I feel down I to, to I take my pencil and I write always, uh, makes me happy, make me gather my thoughts.

✓ I'd like to write poems because they help me relax. When I feel down, I take my pencil and always write; it makes me happy and helps me gather my thoughts.

Multiple issues: 'it's makes' incorrect use of contraction plus verb—should be 'they help' agreeing with 'poems'. 'help me relax' needs parallel structure. Remove filler words and correct word order: 'I to, to I' is incorrect. Use commas and conjunctions properly.

× I think so because, uh, there is nothing, uh, never change.

✓ I think so because nothing ever changes.

Double negative 'nothing...never change' is incorrect. Use 'nothing ever changes' with subject–verb agreement and adverb placement.

× Uh, so I, I lean on writing novels and I think one day I. Volt came a different way.

✓ So I lean toward writing novels, and I think one day my work will take a different direction.

'Lean on writing' is wrong preposition; use 'lean toward' or 'lean towards'. 'I. Volt came a different way' is garbled; likely intended meaning is future change in direction—use 'my work will take a different direction'.

× I prefer handwriting because it's feel real.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it feels more real.

'It's feel' mixes contraction and verb; correct is 'it feels'. Add 'more' for comparative nuance 'more real'.

× I can explore my feelings in a in a better way when I write with him writing.

✓ I can explore my feelings better when I handwrite.

'with him writing' is incorrect pronoun and structure. Simplify to 'when I handwrite' or 'when I write by hand' for clarity.

× Also typing is killing emotions. It's my opinion.

✓ Also, typing kills emotions; that's my opinion.

Use simple present 'typing kills' rather than progressive 'is killing' for general statements. 'It's my opinion' is okay but 'that's my opinion' is more natural.

× When I was child I did it every day because I was trying learn a new language and keeping Diaries and making it easier.

✓ When I was a child I did it every day because I was trying to learn a new language; keeping a diary made it easier.

Missing article 'a child'; need 'trying to learn' with 'to'. 'keeping Diaries' should be singular 'keeping a diary' in this context and tense consistency: 'made' for past result.

× But now I don't keep Diaries because I don't have much time for it.

✓ But now I don't keep a diary because I don't have much time for it.

'Diaries' plural conflicts with singular 'it' and context; use 'a diary' or 'diaries' consistently. 'much time' is fine.

× I often use my phone I I took photos, taking photos and short videos because it's makes me happier when I open those videos.

✓ I often use my phone to take photos and short videos because they make me happier when I watch them.

Tense inconsistency 'I I took photos, taking' is wrong; use infinitive 'to take'. 'it's makes' wrong; use 'they make' to agree with plural 'photos and videos'. 'open those videos' -> 'watch them' is more natural.