写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有语法错误和用词不当，例如“white”应为“write”，表达不够清晰。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且简洁明了地回答问题。

範例: I don't write a lot because I usually use electronic devices to take notes instead of writing by hand.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构不完整，表达不够流畅。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和主谓一致，并且用连接词使表达更连贯。

範例: I like to write plans because they help me feel organized and make it clearer what I need to do.

建議: 回答不够明确，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议直接回答问题，并用具体例子支持观点，避免使用不清楚的词汇。

範例: Yes, sometimes the things I write change, like my to-do lists. However, if I write a story, it usually stays the same.

建議: 回答表达基本清楚，但有重复词汇和语法错误。建议简洁表达原因，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and faster, especially since I often use my phone.

建議: 回答不连贯且语法错误严重，难以理解。建议用简单明了的句子表达写日记的频率和内容。

範例: I usually write a diary once a week, mostly about my weekend activities and experiences.

建議: 回答表达不够自然，有语法错误。建议使用完整句子，并解释为什么喜欢用视频记录生活。

範例: I like to record videos with my phone because they are more lively and dynamic than writing.

× Actually I like write some plan because it can makes me feel organized and more clearly to do something and let me feel more understand what I should do.

✓ Actually I like writing some plans because it can make me feel organized and clearer to do something and help me understand better what I should do.

动词like后面应接动名词writing，而不是动词原形write。makes应改为make，因为主语it是单数，动词应为第三人称单数形式。more clearly应改为clearer，形容词比较级形式。句子中表达更清晰的结构应调整为help me understand better。

× Actually I like write some plan because it can makes me feel organized and more clearly to do something and let me feel more understand what I should do.

✓ Actually I like writing some plans because it can make me feel organized and clearer to do something and help me understand better what I should do.

主语it是第三人称单数，谓语动词makes应改为make。

× Actually I like write some plan because it can makes me feel organized and more clearly to do something and let me feel more understand what I should do.

✓ Actually I like writing some plans because it can make me feel organized and clearer to do something and help me understand better what I should do.

plan应使用复数形式plans，因为表示多个计划。

× Ambiguous. For example, if I write down a list about what I should do, maybe it can be changed.

✓ It's ambiguous. For example, if I write down a list about what I should do, maybe it can change.

can be changed被动语态不合适，应该用主动语态can change。

× Ambiguous. For example, if I write down a list about what I should do, maybe it can be changed. On another hand, if I write down a Dai daily novel or it may be not changing.

✓ It's ambiguous. For example, if I write down a list about what I should do, maybe it can change. On the other hand, if I write down a daily diary or novel, it may not change.

daily novel应改为daily diary或daily novel，且daily novel不常用，可能是想表达日记。may be not changing语法错误，应改为may not change。

× I prefer typing because we have electronic phone so we use.

✓ I prefer typing because we have electronic phones, so we use them.

缺少复数形式phones，且句子缺少宾语them，指代phones。

× I prefer typing because we have electronic phone so we use.

✓ I prefer typing because we have electronic phones, so we use them.

phone应为复数phones，因为指代一般的电子设备。

× Typing is more convenient and suitable for for me.

✓ Typing is more convenient and suitable for me.

重复使用介词for，应去掉一个。

× One week after working, I will write the diary about this weekend.

✓ One week after working, I write the diary about the weekend.

时间状语与将来时不匹配，且表达习惯应使用一般现在时或过去时。

× What would I do? For example, what were I do these things? My experience, my mention is what?

✓ What will I do? For example, what did I do? My experience, what is my impression?

句子中人称代词和时态使用错误，were I do应改为did I do，mention用词不当，应为impression或thought。

× Taking videos. I prefer using the electronic phone to take my live videos.

✓ Taking videos. I prefer using my phone to take live videos.

the electronic phone用法不自然，改为my phone更合适。live videos应为录制的视频，live通常指直播。

× I think it's more active and dynamic when you record watch it.

✓ I think it's more interesting and dynamic when you record and watch it.

active用法不当，改为interesting更合适；record watch it缺少连词and。