写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够自然，表达不清晰且有语法错误。建议直接回答问题，避免模糊表达，并注意语法和词汇的准确使用。

範例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially when I type my dissertation and take notes for my classes.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复表达，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I like to write down my ideas quickly so I don't forget important details. Also, I write outlines for my dissertation to help my professor understand my work clearly.

建議: 回答内容稍显混乱，建议更直接回答问题，并用更准确的表达和连接词来组织句子。

範例: Yes, what I write often changes because plans can change. For example, I planned to go to the gym last weekend, but I had to cancel due to an urgent task.

建議: 表达较为清晰，但有语法和用词错误。建议注意时态和词汇的准确使用，使表达更自然。

範例: I prefer typing because it's easy to edit or delete words. Writing by hand takes more time when I want to make changes, so I don't like handwriting.

建議: 回答中有很多口语填充词，表达不够流畅。建议减少重复和填充词，使用更准确的语法和词汇。

範例: I don't keep a diary now, but when I was a child, my dad made me do it. I found it boring, but I believe writing a diary is a good habit to improve writing skills.

建議: 回答不完整且表达不清晰。建议直接回答问题，避免语法错误，并用完整句子表达观点。

範例: I don't like recording my daily life often, but I think taking photos and writing diaries are good ways to keep memories because they can remind us of past experiences.

× Typing is whether a kind of writing.

✓ Typing is a kind of writing.

这里“whether”用法错误，应直接用“a kind of”表示“某种”。“whether”是连词，不适合此处用作名词短语。建议去掉“whether”。

× I need type tones of words for my dissertations and sometimes I need to write some notes for my institutions and my mic.

✓ I need to type tons of words for my dissertation and sometimes I need to write some notes for my institution and my mic.

“tones”应为“tons”，表示大量；“dissertations”应为单数“dissertation”，因为通常指一篇论文；“institutions”应为单数“institution”，指所属机构。复数和单数使用不当。

× I always write some instant ideas to ensure I won't forgot some details.

✓ I always write some instant ideas to ensure I won't forget some details.

“forgot”是过去式，句中应使用动词原形“forget”，因为“won't”后接动词原形。时态搭配错误。

× On top of that, sometimes I need to write down the outline of my dissertation in order to my professor could understand my dissertation clearly on top of that.

✓ On top of that, sometimes I need to write down the outline of my dissertation so that my professor can understand it clearly.

“in order to my professor could understand”结构错误，应改为“so that my professor can understand”，使句子结构完整且语法正确。

× Yet things are always changing because you can't control everything.

✓ Things are always changing because you can't control everything.

“Yet”用法不当，句首表示转折，但此处无明显转折关系，建议去掉。

× For example, last weekend I decided to go to the gym to do some exercise just for stress my muscles.

✓ For example, last weekend I decided to go to the gym to do some exercise just to relieve stress in my muscles.

“just for stress my muscles”结构错误，应使用不定式“just to relieve stress in my muscles”表达目的。

× However, I had an emergent task so I have I had to give up.

✓ However, I had an urgent task so I had to give up.

“have I had”重复且错误，应删去“have I”，且“emergent”应为“urgent”，更符合语境。

× I prefer typing because when I need to change the content I can edit or delete these words easily.

✓ I prefer typing because when I need to change the content I can edit or delete these words easily.

此句无明显单复数错误，保持原句。

× However, if I write somethings on the paper I need to realize them is really time consuming.

✓ However, if I write something on the paper I need to realize it is really time consuming.

“somethings”错误，应为不可数名词“something”；“them”指代不明，应改为“it”指代“something”。

× So I don't like handwriting anything.

✓ So I don't like handwriting anything.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× Uh, I don't keep diary now, but when I was kid, uh, my dad forced me to keep record.

✓ Uh, I don't keep a diary now, but when I was a kid, uh, my dad forced me to keep a record.

“diary”和“record”前应加不定冠词“a”，且“kid”前应加不定冠词“a”。

× Uh, but I really hate it because I think it was really boring to keep the daily things.

✓ Uh, but I really hated it because I thought it was really boring to keep daily things.

描述过去的感受应使用过去时态“hated”和“thought”。

× But I think writing a diary is really good habit to develop the writing skills also.

✓ But I think writing a diary is a really good habit to develop writing skills as well.

“good habit”前应加冠词“a”；“also”位置不当，改为“as well”更自然。

× It's hard to say because I dislike, uh, recording my daily lives, but I think taking photos and writing Diaries are really good ways to keep record because when people say this records, uh, it can remind.

✓ It's hard to say because I dislike recording my daily life, but I think taking photos and writing diaries are really good ways to keep records because when people see these records, they can remind them.

“daily lives”应为不可数名词“daily life”；“Diaries”不应大写；“keep record”应为“keep records”；“say this records”应为“see these records”；“it can remind”缺少宾语，应补充“them”。