写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng ngữ pháp chính xác hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'used to writing'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn, tránh lặp lại và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

範例: I don't write much these days because I prefer reading books, which help me relax and learn new things. However, when I was a teenager, I used to enjoy writing fiction, especially love stories.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác, tránh lỗi như 'used to writing'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic giữa các ý. Từ vựng nên đa dạng và phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

範例: When I was a teenager, I used to write many love stories because I was a dreamy girl fascinated by relationships between boys and girls. I enjoyed creating imaginative worlds and expressing my feelings through writing.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi thì. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Now that I am an adult, I write mostly about art and culture from different countries, especially how they inspire fashion. So, yes, the topics I write about have changed as I have grown up.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trúc ngữ pháp đúng, tránh lỗi như 'four upon zero' (có thể bạn muốn nói '4.0 era' hoặc 'digital era'). Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

範例: I prefer typing because in today's digital era, it's more convenient to use a laptop. It helps me write faster, find information online easily, and share my work with coworkers.

建議: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ. Nên giải thích rõ hơn về thói quen của bạn.

範例: I don't often keep a diary because I find it hard to write about my daily life. However, I have two friends who regularly write diaries to preserve their memories.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu và từ vựng chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên dùng từ nối để liên kết các ý và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn.

範例: I usually take photos or record videos to capture my memories. I prefer visual and audio recordings of my adventures because they help me relax and stay positive.

× I used to writing often many years ago.

✓ I used to write often many years ago.

The phrase 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'writing' should be corrected to 'write'.

× As I mentioned before, I used to writing a lot about love story when I was a teenager.

✓ As I mentioned before, I used to write a lot about love stories when I was a teenager.

'Used to' requires the base verb form 'write' instead of 'writing'. Also, 'love story' should be pluralized to 'love stories' to match the context of writing multiple stories.

× I used to writing a lot about love story when I was a teenager.

✓ I used to write a lot about love stories when I was a teenager.

'Love story' should be pluralized to 'love stories' because it refers to multiple stories, not just one.

× So I create a lot and just writing what I see in the imaginative world that.

✓ So I created a lot and just wrote what I saw in the imaginative world.

The sentence refers to past actions, so past tense verbs 'created', 'wrote', and 'saw' should be used instead of present forms or '-ing' forms.

× So I create a lot and just writing what I see in the imaginative world that.

✓ So I created a lot and just wrote what I saw in the imaginative world.

The actions happened in the past, so past tense verbs are required instead of present tense or gerund forms.

× Anastasia because now I'm grow up and become an adult, I often write about the research of art or cultural of many countries that inspiration mean in fashion and sometimes I write about what I'm researching in fashion.

✓ Anastasia, because now I've grown up and become an adult, I often write about research on art or culture of many countries that inspire fashion, and sometimes I write about what I'm researching in fashion.

'I'm grow up' is incorrect; the present perfect 'I've grown up' is appropriate. 'Research of art or cultural' should be 'research on art or culture'. 'That inspiration mean in fashion' is unclear and corrected to 'that inspire fashion'.

× I prefer typing because in the era of four upon zero it's more convenient to using laptop and typing what you want to write.

✓ I prefer typing because in the era of 4.0, it's more convenient to use a laptop and type what you want to write.

'To using' is incorrect; after 'to' the base verb 'use' should be used. Also, 'a laptop' is needed for correct article usage.

× Beside that you can shoot and know more about many information in the Internet.

✓ Besides that, you can search and know more about much information on the Internet.

'Beside' should be 'Besides' to mean 'in addition'. 'Shoot' is incorrect here; likely 'search' is intended. 'Many information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable; 'much information' is correct. 'In the Internet' should be 'on the Internet'.

× That helped me a lot to writing more easily.

✓ That helped me a lot to write more easily.

'To' should be followed by the base verb 'write', not the '-ing' form 'writing'.

× Also I can share with my coworker what I'm writing in the laptop.

✓ Also, I can share with my coworker what I'm writing on the laptop.

'In the laptop' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the laptop'.

× I would say I'm really write Diaries because I was so lazy to write what I do in a day.

✓ I would say I really write diaries because I was so lazy to write what I did in a day.

'I'm really write' is incorrect; it should be 'I really write'. Also, 'Diaries' should be lowercase unless part of a title. 'What I do' should be past tense 'what I did' to match 'was lazy'.

× I would say I'm really write Diaries because I was so lazy to write what I do in a day.

✓ I would say I really write diaries because I was so lazy to write what I did in a day.

'Diaries' should be lowercase and plural as it refers to multiple diary entries.

× It's hard for me to keep diary and telling about my life every days but I'm filled up my two people who have habit of writing diary to keep many memories.

✓ It's hard for me to keep a diary and tell about my life every day, but I have two people close to me who have the habit of writing diaries to keep many memories.

'Keep diary' needs an article 'a diary'. 'Telling' should be 'tell' to match 'to keep'. 'Every days' should be 'every day'. 'I'm filled up my two people' is incorrect; corrected to 'I have two people close to me'. 'Writing diary' should be 'writing diaries'.

× I shall take a photo or recount a video to keep many memories.

✓ I shall take a photo or record a video to keep many memories.

'Recount a video' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'record a video'.

× I prefer visualize and hear a sound of many adventure travel I used to go.

✓ I prefer to visualize and hear the sounds of many adventures I used to go on.

'Visualize' needs 'to' after 'prefer'. 'A sound' should be 'the sounds' to refer to multiple sounds. 'Many adventure travel' is incorrect; corrected to 'many adventures'. 'I used to go' should be 'I used to go on'.

× It helped me a lot to reduce my energy and keep my attitude more happier.

✓ It helped me a lot to reduce my stress and keep my attitude happier.

'Reduce my energy' is incorrect; likely 'reduce my stress' is intended. 'More happier' is incorrect; 'happier' alone is sufficient.