写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了写作的习惯和原因，但语言不够自然，有语法错误和重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: Yes, I write a diary every day because it helps me express my emotions and reflect on my feelings.

建議: 回答中有较多的停顿词和重复，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，使用连词使句子更连贯，并具体说明写作内容。

範例: I like to write motivational sentences in my small notebook because they give me energy and encourage me to improve myself.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用更准确的时态和表达方式，明确观点并提供具体理由。

範例: I don't think what I write will change much because as an adult, I have a stable perspective on life and know how to improve myself.

建議: 回答结构清晰，但有语法错误。建议注意动词时态和形式，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: It depends. If I have plenty of time, I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember better. However, if I'm short on time, I choose typing.

建議: 回答中有过多的填充词和重复，影响表达效果。建议简洁表达，使用更准确的词汇，如 'express' 替代 'outlet'。

範例: I keep a diary almost every day to write about my thoughts, emotions, and feelings. It's a good way to express myself.

建議: 回答中有词汇错误（如 'curing to sorts' 不明确），表达不清晰。建议使用准确词汇，简洁表达，并具体说明其他记录生活的方法。

範例: Besides writing a diary, I sometimes post photos or write notes in my memos to record my life.

× Yes, of course I am in habit of writing dairy every day.

✓ Yes, of course I am in the habit of writing a diary every day.

The phrase 'in habit of' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in the habit of'. Also, 'dairy' is a misspelling of 'diary', which is the correct noun for a personal journal.

× I think it's a good, it's a good way to express myself and to it's our emotion, emotional, our needs.

✓ I think it's a good way to express myself and our emotions and needs.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect phrases like 'to it's our emotion, emotional, our needs'. It should be simplified to 'our emotions and needs' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× So I will write all the sentence down on my, in my small notebook.

✓ So I will write all the sentences down in my small notebook.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to writing inside a notebook. Also, 'sentence' should be plural 'sentences' to match the context.

× Well, to be honest, I don't think the thing I write would change in the future because as an adult I have a stable viewpoint about the world so I know how to help me growth as a better girl.

✓ Well, to be honest, I don't think the things I write will change in the future because as an adult I have a stable viewpoint about the world so I know how to help myself grow as a better girl.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match the plural context. Also, 'would' is better replaced by 'will' for future certainty. 'Help me growth' is incorrect; it should be 'help myself grow'.

× I know how to help me growth as a better girl.

✓ I know how to help myself grow as a better girl.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used instead of 'me' when the subject and object refer to the same person.

× If I have a lot of time, I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember what I have write written.

✓ If I have a lot of time, I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember what I have written.

The phrase 'have write written' is incorrect; the correct past participle form is 'have written'.

× I think it's a good habit to write, uh, down about something, umm, about, uh, my, my thoughts and my emotions and, and my sadness.

✓ I think it's a good habit to write down something about my thoughts, my emotions, and my sadness.

The phrase 'write down about something' is awkward; 'write down something about' is correct. Also, repeated 'my' and 'and' should be cleaned for clarity.

× And I think it's a good way to outlet my emotion.

✓ And I think it's a good way to outlet my emotions.

'Outlet' is a noun; the correct verb is 'to let out' or 'to express'. However, since 'outlet' is used here, it should be 'to outlet' is incorrect. The sentence should be 'a good way to let out my emotions.' But since only corrections matching the problem list are allowed, changing 'emotion' to plural 'emotions' is acceptable here.

× I keep a dairy almost every day to record my life.

✓ I keep a diary almost every day to record my life.

'Dairy' is a misspelling; the correct word is 'diary'.

× Sometimes I prefer posting some photos or some, uh, curing to sorts in my, uh, memos.

✓ Sometimes I prefer posting some photos or some, uh, cuttings or sorts in my, uh, memos.

The word 'curing to sorts' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or misspelling. Possibly 'cuttings or sorts' is intended. Also, 'posting' is acceptable here. The preposition 'in' is correct for 'in my memos.'