写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。例えば、「write the note a lot」ではなく「write notes a lot」と言うべきです。また、文が途中で途切れているため、意味が伝わりにくいです。より簡潔で正確な表現を心がけましょう。

範例: Yes, I write a lot because I am a student. For example, I usually take notes from the board, and sometimes I type my assignments on my laptop.

建議: 内容が不明瞭で、文法的にも改善が必要です。「comfortable about English」ではなく「comfortable with English」と言うべきです。また、「assessment for universal」の意味が不明瞭なので、具体的に説明しましょう。

範例: I like to write English notes because I want to improve my English skills. Also, I need to study for my exams at university.

建議: 文が途中で終わっており、内容が不完全です。理由を明確に述べ、文を完結させる必要があります。また、「I would think」より「I think」の方が自然です。

範例: Yes, I think the things I write will change depending on my mood and the subject. For example, when I study Japanese, I always write kanji characters.

建議: 「more easy」ではなく「easier」と言うべきです。また、「assessment on laptop」より「assignments on my laptop」の方が自然です。文法と語彙の改善が必要です。

範例: I prefer typing on my laptop because it is easier and less tiring than handwriting. For example, I usually do my assignments on the laptop, which is very convenient.

建議: 「Diaries」は小文字で始めるべきです。また、「I started diary one years ago, but it finished two weeks ago」は文法的に誤りが多いです。過去形の使い方と時制を正しくしましょう。

範例: I don't often keep a diary because I usually forget to write in it. I started keeping a diary one year ago, but I stopped two weeks ago.

建議: 「take picture」ではなく「take pictures」と複数形にし、「more clear memory」より「clearer memory」が自然です。また、「voices is in recorded」は文法的に誤りです。

範例: I always take pictures with my smartphone because they create clearer memories than writing notes. Also, I can record videos, so the sounds are captured as well.

× I usually write the note a lot.

✓ I usually write notes a lot.

'Note' should be plural 'notes' because it refers to multiple instances of writing notes, not a single note.

× I usually take a note of board

✓ I usually take notes from the board

'Note' should be plural 'notes' because multiple notes are taken. Also, 'of board' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'from the board'.

× I usually take a note of board

✓ I usually take notes from the board

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'from' to indicate the source of the notes.

× and my assessment is sometimes on laptop but it usually.

✓ and sometimes I do my assessments on the laptop, but usually not.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs restructuring to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I like to write English note

✓ I like to write English notes

'Note' should be plural 'notes' because it refers to multiple notes written in English.

× I want to be comfortable about English

✓ I want to be comfortable with English

The correct preposition to use with 'comfortable' is 'with', not 'about'.

× I need to study for assessment for universal.

✓ I need to study for assessments for university.

'Assessment' should be plural 'assessments' if referring to multiple tests. Also, 'universal' is incorrect; likely intended 'university'.

× Yes, I would think it would change because it depends on my mood and the subject.

✓ Yes, I think it will change because it depends on my mood and the subject.

'Would think' is awkward here; simple present 'think' and future 'will change' fit better for expressing belief about future change.

× if I study in Japanese I will always write kanji.

✓ if I study Japanese, I will always write kanji.

'Study in Japanese' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'study Japanese' without 'in'.

× But.

The sentence fragment 'But.' is incomplete and should be removed or completed.

× I would prefer typing on laptop because it is more easy

✓ I prefer typing on the laptop because it is easier

'Would prefer' is unnecessary here; simple present 'prefer' is better. Also, 'more easy' is incorrect; the comparative form is 'easier'.

× I would prefer typing on laptop

✓ I would prefer typing on the laptop

'Laptop' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific device.

× I don't feel exhausted about handwriting.

✓ I don't feel exhausted from handwriting.

'Exhausted' is usually followed by 'from' to indicate the cause of exhaustion, not 'about'.

× I always have assessment on laptop

✓ I always have assessments on the laptop

'Assessment' should be plural 'assessments' if referring to multiple tests. Also, 'on laptop' should be 'on the laptop'.

× I always have assessment on laptop

✓ I always have assessments on the laptop

'Laptop' requires the definite article 'the'.

× so it is very convenient and benefit.

✓ so it is very convenient and beneficial.

'Benefit' is a noun; the adjective form 'beneficial' is needed here.

× I don't often keep Diaries because I always forget about it.

✓ I don't often keep diaries because I always forget about them.

'Diaries' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it'.

× I always forget about it.

✓ I always forget about them.

'It' refers to singular, but 'diaries' is plural, so 'them' is correct.

× For my experience, I write.

✓ From my experience, I write.

'For my experience' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'From my experience'.

× I started diary one years ago, but it finished two weeks ago.

✓ I started a diary one year ago, but I stopped writing it two weeks ago.

'Diary' needs the article 'a'. 'One years' should be 'one year'. 'It finished' is incorrect; better to say 'I stopped writing it'.

× I always take picture on smartphone

✓ I always take pictures with my smartphone

'Take picture on smartphone' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'with' and 'picture' should be plural 'pictures'.

× I always take picture on smartphone

✓ I always take pictures with my smartphone

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because multiple pictures are taken.

× because it is more clear memory than writing on a note.

✓ because it is a clearer memory than writing notes.

'More clear' should be 'clearer' (comparative adjective). Also, 'writing on a note' is awkward; 'writing notes' is better.

× Also it can take video so the voices is in recorded.

✓ Also, it can take videos so the voices are recorded.

'Take video' should be 'take videos'. 'Voices is in recorded' is incorrect; correct is 'voices are recorded'.