写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够自然，存在语法错误和表达重复，且内容不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并明确表达写作内容。

範例: Yes, I write quite often. For example, I keep a diary where I record my daily experiences.

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并提供更具体的细节。

範例: I enjoy keeping a diary because it helps me remember the people I meet and the activities I do each day.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不准确，句子结构重复。建议使用更准确的时态和表达方式，避免重复。

範例: Yes, I believe what I write will change as I grow older because my perspective and feelings about life evolve over time.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，且句子重复。建议简洁表达偏好，并说明原因，避免模糊和重复。

範例: I prefer typing my diary on my phone because it is more convenient and I am less likely to forget to write.

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地说明频率，并用连贯句子描述写作内容。

範例: I keep a diary almost every day, usually writing about my experiences and feelings in the evening.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的词汇和句子结构，明确说明其他记录生活的方法。

範例: Besides keeping a diary, I sometimes take photos of things that interest me to remember them on my phone.

× I really write a lot of thing, a lot of things.

✓ I really write a lot of things.

这里的thing应该用复数形式things，因为表示很多东西。

× I have The Hobbit to write the diary.

✓ I have The Hobbit to write in the diary.

写日记时，应该用介词in表示在日记里写内容。

× who I, who I meet today and what I, what things I do today.

✓ who I met today and what things I did today.

这里应该用过去时态，且省略重复的who I，句子更通顺。

× who I, who I meet today and what I, what things I do today.

✓ who I met today and what things I did today.

描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去时。

× the things you write must be changed as you grow older because the way you observe the life is changed as you're as you're older and the feeling you get.

✓ the things you write must change as you grow older because the way you observe life changes as you get older and the feelings you get.

这里描述的是一般事实，应该用一般现在时，且life前不需要冠词the。

× the way you observe the life is changed as you're as you're older

✓ the way you observe life changes as you get older

life前不需要定冠词the，且动词用一般现在时changes。

× if if you choose to handle right, you may maybe you are you will forget the diary.

✓ if you choose to handwrite, you may forget the diary.

handle right应为handwrite，且句子中多余的词语应删除，使句子简洁。

× I almost keep dairies every day

✓ I almost keep diaries every day

diaries是diary的复数形式，拼写应正确。

× I often write down my experience and feelings all the day in my diary.

✓ I often write down my experiences and feelings of the whole day in my diary.

experience应使用复数形式experiences，all the day应改为of the whole day，更符合表达习惯。

× I rarely have other method to record my record my life.

✓ I rarely have other methods to record my life.

method应使用复数形式methods，因为表示多种方法。

× sometimes I take photo take photos in what I interested in so that I can memory them in my phone.

✓ sometimes I take photos of what I am interested in so that I can remember them on my phone.

take photos of是固定搭配，interested前应加be动词am，memory应改为remember，on my phone更合适。