写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains many fillers like 'uh' which reduce fluency. Try to avoid unnecessary pauses and fillers to sound more natural. Also, make your sentences more concise and clear.

範例: Yes, I write frequently because I am a student and my career in civil engineering requires a lot of writing.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Use correct sentence structures and be more specific. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas effectively.

範例: I enjoy writing novels because it refreshes me, keeps my mind engaged, and helps me improve my English skills.

建議: Avoid excessive fillers and repetition. Structure your answer clearly by stating your opinion first, then explaining with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I believe my writing will change because I plan to become a writer in the future. Currently, I write about my daily work, but later I want to write more creative content.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many fillers. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember information better and improves my handwriting, unlike typing on a machine.

建議: Avoid fillers and improve sentence structure. Be more concise and use linking words to explain your preference clearly.

範例: I usually do not keep a diary because I prefer to take notes on my phone, which is more convenient for me.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use clear vocabulary. Avoid repetition and explain your points with specific details.

範例: I use my mobile phone to record my daily activities through photos and videos, which helps me reflect on my actions and improve myself.

× I love to write some of the novel as it keeps me refreshed and helps me keep my mind engaged in something that I'm much more interested in and also help me improve my English language.

✓ I love to write some novels as it keeps me refreshed and helps me keep my mind engaged in something that I'm much more interested in and also helps me improve my English language.

The word 'novel' should be plural 'novels' because 'some' indicates more than one. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Nepali: 'some' पछि बहुवचन प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ, त्यसैले 'novel' लाई 'novels' बनाउनुपर्छ। 'help' लाई 'helps' बनाउनुपर्छ किनभने 'it' एकवचन हो।

× Yes, I definitely think the things that I write, uh, nowadays will uh, change because, uh, I'm uh, thinking of becoming a writer in my future days.

✓ Yes, I definitely think the things that I write nowadays will change because I'm thinking of becoming a writer in the future.

The phrase 'in my future days' is unnatural; 'in the future' is the correct expression. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'uh' should be omitted for clarity. Nepali: 'in my future days' को सट्टा 'in the future' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ। 'uh' जस्ता filler शब्दहरू हटाउनुपर्छ।

× I prefer handwriting over typewriting as it, uh, gives lots of memory, uh, rather than that of typewriting, which is, uh, written by machine.

✓ I prefer handwriting over typing as it helps me remember better than typing, which is done by a machine.

'Gives lots of memory' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'helps me remember better'. Also, 'typewriting' is outdated; 'typing' is preferred. Nepali: 'gives lots of memory' को सट्टा 'helps me remember better' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ। 'typewriting' को सट्टा 'typing' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ।

× I usually uh, do not keep Diaries in me, uh, because I use my phone to write note on it rather than using a diary.

✓ I usually do not keep diaries because I use my phone to write notes on it rather than using a diary.

'Keep Diaries in me' is incorrect; it should be 'keep diaries'. Also, 'write note' should be plural 'write notes'. Nepali: 'keep Diaries in me' गलत छ, 'keep diaries' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ। 'write note' को सट्टा 'write notes' प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ।

× I usually use my mobile phone to record my day-to-day activity as it gives me visuals to where I'm adding to watch and and also helps me keep track of myself, the wrong and the right that I'm doing in my life.

✓ I usually use my mobile phone to record my day-to-day activities as it gives me visuals to watch and also helps me keep track of myself, the wrong and the right things that I'm doing in my life.

'Activity' should be plural 'activities' to match 'day-to-day'. 'Visuals to where I'm adding to watch' is unclear; corrected to 'visuals to watch'. Added 'things' after 'wrong and the right' for clarity. Nepali: 'activity' लाई बहुवचन 'activities' बनाउनुपर्छ। 'visuals to where I'm adding to watch' अस्पष्ट छ, त्यसलाई 'visuals to watch' बनाउनुपर्छ। 'wrong and the right' पछि 'things' थप्नुपर्छ।