写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中出现了混淆，学生将写作和阅读混为一谈，且表达不够清晰。建议明确区分写作和阅读，回答时直接回应“写作”的问题，避免语义混乱。

範例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me keep track of my daily experiences. For example, I keep a journal where I note down important events and thoughts, which I can review later to reflect on my growth.

建議: 回答中混淆了“写”和“读”，且语句不连贯，填充词较多。建议回答时聚焦写作内容，减少语气词，使用连贯的句子表达原因。

範例: I like to write about my feelings and personal experiences because it helps me relax and understand my emotions better. Writing allows me to express myself and feel happier.

建議: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，逻辑不够连贯。建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: Yes, sometimes my thoughts change over time, so the things I write might also change. For example, I may have different opinions about an event after I learn more about it.

建議: 回答中有语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

範例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me express my emotions better. Writing by hand feels more personal and allows me to connect with my thoughts.

建議: 回答中语法错误严重，句子结构混乱，且未直接回答问题。建议练习简单句表达时间频率，避免重复和错误。

範例: I used to keep a diary every day when I was a student because I had more free time. But now, as a full-time mother, I rarely have time to write.

建議: 回答较为清晰，但有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议注意动词形式和句子流畅性。

範例: I like taking photos to record my life because when I look at them later, I can remember everything that happened that day clearly.

× Yes, I read a lot because I can record things that happen every day and after a few months or a few years later, I can see what happens right now.

✓ Yes, I write a lot because I can record things that happen every day and after a few months or a few years, I can see what happened then.

这里学生回答的是是否写作很多，应该用现在时态的动词write而不是read。后半句中“after a few months or a few years later”表达重复，且“see what happens right now”时态不一致，应改为“see what happened then”，保持时态一致。

× I like to read something that, umm, affects me.

✓ I like to write something that, umm, affects me.

题目问的是喜欢写什么，学生回答中用错了动词read，应改为write，符合上下文语境。

× I like to write, uh, things down and it will relax my emotions that will make me happier.

✓ I like to write things down because it relaxes my emotions and makes me happier.

原句中“it will relax my emotions that will make me happier”结构不清晰，且时态不当。改为“because it relaxes my emotions and makes me happier”更符合表达习惯。

× Sometimes I think the things I write that would be changed because many things I think will depends on my actions or thought.

✓ Sometimes I think the things I write will change because many things I think depend on my actions or thoughts.

“would be changed”用法不当，应使用一般将来时“will change”。“depends”主语是复数“many things”，应改为“depend”。

× So I believe that I want to change the things would be changed.

✓ So I believe that the things I want to change will be changed.

“would be changed”时态和语态不当，应改为“will be changed”，且句子结构调整使表达更清晰。

× Yes, I do prefer handwriting because handwriting makes me expressing things more emotionally and I can get more sensitive feedback from my handwriting.

✓ Yes, I do prefer handwriting because handwriting helps me express things more emotionally and I can get more sensitive feedback from my handwriting.

“makes me expressing”语法错误，应改为“helps me express”，动词不定式用法正确。

× When I was a student, I kept rest every day because I have enough time to write something that happens me happened around my life and now I'm a full time mother, so I almost didn't don't have enough time to read something so.

✓ When I was a student, I kept a diary every day because I had enough time to write about things that happened in my life. Now I'm a full-time mother, so I almost don't have enough time to write.

“kept rest”错误，应为“kept a diary”。“have”应为过去时“had”。“happens me happened”结构错误，应改为“things that happened”。“didn't don't”重复且错误，应改为“don't”。句子结构混乱，需拆分调整。

× I like to taking photos to record my life because when I see the photos that they took before and I can remember all things that happened that day.

✓ I like taking photos to record my life because when I see the photos I took before, I can remember everything that happened that day.

“like to taking”错误，应为“like taking”。“the photos that they took before”中“they”多余，应改为“the photos I took before”。“all things”用法不当，改为“everything”。