写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat incomplete and lacks clarity at the end. Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid abrupt endings. Also, use more natural phrasing such as 'I used to keep journals to record my feelings, ideas, and daily events, but now I rarely write because I use my phone instead.'

範例: I used to keep journals to record my feelings, ideas, and daily events, but now I rarely write because I use my phone instead.

建議: Your answer repeats 'ideas' and is slightly unclear. Try to avoid redundancy and be more specific. For example, say 'I enjoy writing because it allows me to express my feelings freely and record important events as they happen.'

範例: I enjoy writing because it allows me to express my feelings freely and record important events as they happen.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your thoughts. Also, use past tense consistently and provide a clear example. For instance, 'When I was younger, I tended to use simpler words, but now I try to write more complex sentences.'

範例: When I was younger, I tended to use simpler words, but now I try to write more complex sentences.

建議: Good answer with clear reasons and contrast. To improve, try to use linking words like 'however' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating 'prefer' too often.

範例: It really depends; if I am in a meeting, I usually type on the computer because it is convenient for quickly jotting down ideas and minutes. However, when I want to express my feelings or thoughts freely, I choose handwriting because it feels more personal and warm.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Clarify your meaning and use correct tense. For example, 'I find it hard to keep a diary now because of my busy work schedule, but when I was younger, I used to write in my diary every day.'

範例: I find it hard to keep a diary now because of my busy work schedule, but when I was younger, I used to write in my diary every day.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and has some awkward phrasing. Try to finish your sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, 'I like to take photos of memorable moments and share them on Instagram, a social media platform where I can share my daily life and happy moments with others.'

範例: I like to take photos of memorable moments and share them on Instagram, a social media platform where I can share my daily life and happy moments with others.

× I used to write journals to record my feelings, ideas and the events happened that day.

✓ I used to write journals to record my feelings, ideas and the events that happened that day.

The phrase 'the events happened that day' is missing the relative pronoun 'that' to correctly link the clause. The correct form is 'the events that happened that day.' This is necessary to form a proper relative clause describing 'events.'

× However, when I have a phone, I seldom write on my own.

✓ However, now that I have a phone, I seldom write on my own.

The original sentence uses 'when I have a phone' which is awkward and unclear. The phrase 'now that I have a phone' correctly indicates the current situation causing the change in habit. This improves clarity and tense usage.

× I.

The sentence 'I.' is incomplete and lacks a verb or predicate, making it a sentence fragment. It should be completed or removed for clarity.

× Writing is a way to convey your ideas and express your ideas freely, so I prefer jotting down my feelings on that at that moment and to record the important things of the day.

✓ Writing is a way to convey your ideas and express them freely, so I prefer jotting down my feelings at that moment and recording the important things of the day.

The phrase 'jotting down my feelings on that' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at that moment.' Also, 'express your ideas freely' is repeated unnecessarily; 'express them freely' avoids repetition. Additionally, 'to record' should be parallel with 'jotting down,' so 'recording' is used for parallel structure.

× For example, when I was younger I tend to write simpler words, but now I would tend to write.

✓ For example, when I was younger I tended to write simpler words, but now I tend to write more complex ones.

The verb 'tend' should be in past tense 'tended' to match 'when I was younger.' Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'more complex ones' clarifies the comparison and completes the thought.

× If I am in a meeting, I prefer typing on the computer because it is very convenient to jot down the ideas and minutes quickly.

✓ If I am in a meeting, I prefer typing on the computer because it is very convenient to jot down ideas and minutes quickly.

The article 'the' before 'ideas' is unnecessary because 'ideas' is plural and general here. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× If I want to express my feelings or thoughts freely, I prefer handwriting because it is very warm.

✓ If I want to express my feelings or thoughts freely, I prefer handwriting because it feels very warm.

The adjective 'warm' describes a physical temperature, but here it refers to a feeling or atmosphere. Using 'feels very warm' correctly conveys the emotional warmth associated with handwriting.

× I can really maintain my habit of writing a diary because of my busy work.

✓ I cannot really maintain my habit of writing a diary because of my busy work.

The original sentence contradicts itself; 'can' suggests ability, but the context implies difficulty. Using 'cannot' correctly expresses the inability to maintain the habit due to busy work.

× However, when I was younger, I would like to refresh my Diaries every day.

✓ However, when I was younger, I would write in my diary every day.

The phrase 'would like to refresh my Diaries' is incorrect. 'Would write in my diary' correctly expresses a habitual past action. Also, 'Diaries' should be singular and lowercase as 'diary.'

× Personally, I would like to take a photo of the memorable moments to capture it down and to share a post on the Instagram which is a social media platform for sharing your daily life and happiness happy moment with others.

✓ Personally, I like to take photos of memorable moments to capture them and share posts on Instagram, which is a social media platform for sharing your daily life and happy moments with others.

The phrase 'capture it down' is incorrect; 'capture them' is correct for plural 'moments.' 'Share a post on the Instagram' should be 'share posts on Instagram' without 'the.' Also, 'happiness happy moment' is redundant; 'happy moments' is correct.