写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear in parts. Try to avoid repeating words like 'future' and clarify your points. Also, keep your sentences concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps improve my writing skills, which will benefit my future career. For example, I enjoy writing essays and novels to practice regularly.

建議: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrasing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

範例: I enjoy writing fictional stories because they allow me to create my own characters and decide who is a hero or a villain, which makes writing more interesting.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I don't think the things I write will change in the future because they are based on my own imagination and personal style.

建議: There are some grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Use correct verb forms and clearer comparisons. Also, use linking words to explain your preference.

範例: I prefer typing on my Mac or laptop because it is faster and easier than handwriting, which takes more time to think and create ideas.

建議: Your answer is generally good but has some repetition and minor errors. Avoid repeating words like 'small small' and use linking words to explain the benefits clearly.

範例: I often keep a small diary in my pocket because it helps me note down daily tasks and long-term goals effectively.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and has repetition. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to explain your methods logically.

範例: I use several methods to record my life, such as mobile apps, which help me stay organized and updated with my daily activities.

× I already love to write novels essay for practice.

✓ I already love to write novels and essays for practice.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'novels essay' without pluralizing 'essay' or connecting the two nouns properly. It should be 'novels and essays' to correctly indicate multiple items and proper conjunction usage.

× As far as I see, I'd really love to like fictional stories because it's because it's helped me to generate my own stories where I can promote anyone as a villain or a hero.

✓ As far as I see, I'd really love fictional stories because they have helped me generate my own stories where I can portray anyone as a villain or a hero.

The phrase 'I'd really love to like' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'because it's because it's helped' is repetitive. The sentence is corrected by removing redundancy and improving clarity. 'Promote' is replaced with 'portray' to better fit the context.

× Hmm, in my opinion I don't think so it would be changed in the future.

✓ Hmm, in my opinion, I don't think it will change in the future.

The phrase 'would be changed' is incorrect for expressing future expectation. The correct future tense is 'will change'. Also, 'I don't think so it would be changed' is awkward and ungrammatical; it should be 'I don't think it will change'.

× Well, I love to ride on my Mac or on my laptop which are really easy for me to write anything as compared to handwriting which take time to think or create imaginations.

✓ Well, I love to write on my Mac or my laptop, which are really easy for me to use compared to handwriting, which takes time to think or create imaginations.

The verb 'ride' is incorrect here; it should be 'write'. The preposition 'on' is correct with devices. Also, 'which take time' should be 'which takes time' to agree with singular 'handwriting'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Well, I really love to keep a hand size diary in my pocket which is very beneficial for me.

✓ Well, I really love to keep a hand-sized diary in my pocket, which is very beneficial for me.

The phrase 'hand size diary' should be 'hand-sized diary' using the correct adjective form. Also, a comma is added before 'which' to separate the relative clause.

× It's helped me to note small small work or my task to achieve in a day or for a long term.

✓ It has helped me to note small tasks or my goals to achieve in a day or in the long term.

'Small small work' is incorrect; it should be 'small tasks' or 'small pieces of work'. 'My task' should be plural 'my tasks' or 'my goals'. 'For a long term' should be 'in the long term'.

× I used multiple methods to record my daily life.

✓ I use multiple methods to record my daily life.

The question is about current habits, so present tense 'use' is appropriate instead of past tense 'used'.

× I I love to use mobile apps which are really beneficial for me and which really help me to stay updated and and I love to.

✓ I love to use mobile apps which are really beneficial for me and help me stay updated.

The sentence has repetition ('I I', 'and and') and is incomplete ('I love to.'). The corrected sentence removes repetitions and completes the thought clearly.