写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dan hindari pengulangan yang tidak perlu.

範例: I don't write a lot now, but I used to write frequently about five years ago when I was going through a difficult time. I wrote about my daily activities and feelings during that period.

建議: Perjelas dan susun kalimat dengan lebih teratur. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan tambahkan alasan yang spesifik.

範例: Currently, I enjoy writing book reviews because it helps me remember important points. Sometimes, I also write about my future goals and dreams, and occasionally I write poetry to express my emotions.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas. Jelaskan alasan perubahan tulisan dengan contoh yang spesifik.

範例: Yes, I believe my writing will change because my thoughts and feelings evolve over time as I grow older. For example, I used to write about my emotions, but now I focus more on my future plans.

建議: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan hindari pengulangan. Jelaskan alasan preferensi dengan kalimat yang jelas dan koheren.

範例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me relieve stress and feel more connected to my writing. However, I sometimes use typing because it is faster and more convenient.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami. Jelaskan frekuensi dengan jelas dan berikan alasan spesifik.

範例: I don't keep a diary regularly. I usually write in it only when I feel very stressed or happy, or when I want to plan my future. This happens about twice a year.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan teratur. Jelaskan metode lain dengan contoh spesifik dan alasan.

範例: Besides writing in diaries, I often use my phone's camera to record my daily activities. This way, I can share my stories with friends and remember important moments even if I forget the details.

× I'm not right, Lord, I used to write a lot, but it happened when I am in my lowest point.

✓ I'm not right, Lord, I used to write a lot, but it happened when I was at my lowest point.

The verb 'am' is present tense, but the sentence refers to a past event, so it should be 'was' to match the past tense context.

× That means in five years ago, I write about my activities at that time, about my sadness and my.

✓ That means five years ago, I wrote about my activities at that time, about my sadness and my feelings.

The phrase 'in five years ago' is incorrect; it should be 'five years ago'. Also, 'write' should be in past tense 'wrote' to match the time reference. The sentence was incomplete, so 'feelings' is added for clarity.

× For now, I like to write about a review for the books that I just read.

✓ For now, I like to write reviews of the books that I have just read.

The phrase 'a review for the books' is incorrect; it should be 'reviews of the books'. Also, 'just read' is better expressed as 'have just read' to indicate recent past with present relevance.

× And sometimes I like about my future.

✓ And sometimes I like to write about my future.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'to write' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I want to be what in my future, and I write.

✓ I want to be something in my future, and I write about it.

The phrase 'I want to be what in my future' is unclear and incomplete. Rephrasing to 'I want to be something in my future' and adding 'write about it' clarifies the meaning.

× Sometimes I write about poetry.

✓ Sometimes I write poetry.

The phrase 'write about poetry' suggests writing about the topic of poetry, but likely the intended meaning is composing poetry, so 'write poetry' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I think that what I write, what I write will change because I don't think that my thoughts are always same and stable at the same at over the time.

✓ Yes, I think that what I write will change because I don't think that my thoughts are always the same and stable over time.

The phrase 'what I write, what I write will change' is repetitive; removing the repetition improves clarity. 'Same and stable at the same at over the time' is incorrect; it should be 'the same and stable over time'.

× So I grew up an adult thing and I just and I think that it would be change my mind too and my writings.

✓ So I grew up into an adult and I think that it would change my mind and my writings too.

The phrase 'grew up an adult thing' is incorrect; it should be 'grew up into an adult'. 'Would be change' is incorrect; it should be 'would change'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I prefer I prefer handwriting when I am writing, but sometimes I use typing because it's just quick and simpler than handwriting.

✓ I prefer handwriting when I am writing, but sometimes I use typing because it's quicker and simpler than handwriting.

The repetition 'I prefer I prefer' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'I prefer'. 'Just quick' should be 'quicker' to correctly compare typing and handwriting.

× But actually handwriting is make me more release my stress from my delectiveness or work.

✓ But actually handwriting helps me release my stress from my daily activities or work.

'Handwriting is make me more release' is incorrect; it should be 'handwriting helps me release'. 'Delectiveness' is not a correct word; likely intended 'daily activities' or similar.

× I don't really kept my Diaries.

✓ I don't really keep my diaries.

'Don't' requires the base form of the verb, so 'kept' should be 'keep'. Also, 'Diaries' should be lowercase unless part of a title.

× I just write my Diaries when I feel so stressed or when I feel so happy and planned my future or my dreams and maybe I just twice or twice in a year.

✓ I just write in my diary when I feel stressed or happy, and when I plan my future or my dreams, maybe just twice a year.

'Diaries' should be singular 'diary' when referring to the personal journal. 'Planned' should be 'plan' to match present tense. 'Just twice or twice in a year' is redundant; 'just twice a year' is correct.

× Beside on writing on Diaries I usually record my life with a phone that has camera.

✓ Besides writing in my diary, I usually record my life with a phone that has a camera.

'Beside on' is incorrect; it should be 'Besides'. 'Writing on Diaries' should be 'writing in my diary'. 'Phone that has camera' should be 'phone that has a camera'.

× I just record my activities and capture it with my phones and maybe I can tell my story with my friends so that when I forget about my stories.

✓ I just record my activities and capture them with my phone, and maybe I can tell my story to my friends so that I don't forget my stories.

'Capture it with my phones' is incorrect; 'activities' is plural, so 'capture them' is correct, and 'phones' should be singular 'phone'. 'Tell my story with my friends' should be 'tell my story to my friends'. The last clause is rephrased for clarity.