写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp như 'helped' nên là 'helps' để phù hợp với thì hiện tại. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'express'.

範例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me organize my thoughts and express my feelings clearly. Writing is a great way to share my emotions and stories with others.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, 'feedback on my review' là thừa, chỉ cần 'reviews'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần mạch lạc hơn với liên từ phù hợp.

範例: I usually write reviews about trips I've taken or products I've used because I want to share my opinions and experiences with others.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi nhỏ như 'write different' nên là 'write differently'.

範例: Definitely yes. As I grow older, I will explore different aspects of life like relationships, career, and personal growth. Therefore, my feelings and perspectives will change, and I will write differently than I do now.

建議: Bạn có một số lỗi từ vựng như 'use a pain' nên là 'use a pen'. Câu cuối lặp từ 'enjoy' và cấu trúc chưa tự nhiên. Hãy sửa lỗi và làm câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn.

範例: To be honest, I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the physical feeling of using a pen. Although typing is more convenient, I find writing by hand more enjoyable.

× I write as a hobby of my life simply because it helped me organize my doubt and express my feelings.

✓ I write as a hobby in my life simply because it helps me organize my doubts and express my feelings.

The word 'doubt' should be plural 'doubts' because it refers to multiple uncertainties. Also, 'helped' should be 'helps' to match the present tense context. The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; 'in' is appropriate for expressing a hobby within one's life.

× I write as a hobby of my life simply because it helped me organize my doubt and express my feelings.

✓ I write as a hobby in my life simply because it helps me organize my doubts and express my feelings.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used; the correct preposition to express a hobby within one's life is 'in'. This clarifies the relationship between 'hobby' and 'life'.

× I think writing is a good way to express myself and also share my emotions or stories to everyone.

✓ I think writing is a good way to express myself and also share my emotions or stories with everyone.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect when indicating sharing with people; 'with' is the correct preposition to use here.

× I think writing is a good way to express myself and also share my emotions or stories to everyone.

✓ I think writing is a good way to express myself and also share my emotions or stories with everyone.

The preposition 'to' should be replaced with 'with' when indicating sharing something with others.

× So I usually write about my feedback on my review after one trip on travel or one product that I used.

✓ So I usually write my feedback or review after a trip or about a product that I used.

The phrase 'one trip on travel' is awkward; 'a trip' is sufficient. Also, 'my feedback on my review' is redundant; 'my feedback or review' is clearer. The preposition 'on' is unnecessary here.

× So I usually write about my feedback on my review after one trip on travel or one product that I used.

✓ So I usually write my feedback or review after a trip or about a product that I used.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'travel'; it should be omitted or replaced with 'a trip' to be natural.

× The reason is that I want to share my opinion about the things, the story and also I want to share that to everyone.

✓ The reason is that I want to share my opinion about things, stories, and also share them with everyone.

The phrase 'share that to everyone' is incorrect; it should be 'share them with everyone'. Also, 'the things, the story' should be plural and without 'the' for generalization.

× The reason is that I want to share my opinion about the things, the story and also I want to share that to everyone.

✓ The reason is that I want to share my opinion about things, stories, and also share them with everyone.

Use plural forms 'things' and 'stories' to refer generally. Also, 'that' should be 'them' to refer to plural objects.

× Definitely yes. As I am growing older, I will explore many different aspects of life such as relationships, career and personal growth.

✓ Definitely yes. As I grow older, I will explore many different aspects of life such as relationships, career, and personal growth.

The phrase 'As I am growing older' is grammatically correct but 'As I grow older' is more natural and commonly used in this context.

× So my feelings and perspectives about certain topics will change and so I will write different from now.

✓ So my feelings and perspectives about certain topics will change, and I will write differently from now on.

The adverb 'differently' should be used instead of the adjective 'different' to modify the verb 'write'. Also, 'from now' should be 'from now on' for correct expression.

× To be fair, I prefer handwriting, so the primary reason is that I love the physical feeling when I use a pain to write down something.

✓ To be fair, I prefer handwriting; the primary reason is that I love the physical feeling when I use a pen to write something down.

The word 'pain' is a typo and should be 'pen'. Also, 'write down something' is better as 'write something down' for natural word order.

× And additionally, although typing is more convenient, I still find writing more enjoyable to enjoy.

✓ Additionally, although typing is more convenient, I still find writing more enjoyable.

The phrase 'more enjoyable to enjoy' is redundant; 'more enjoyable' alone suffices. Also, 'And additionally' is redundant; 'Additionally' alone is enough.