写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, nhưng bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ "a lot" và câu trả lời nên tập trung hơn vào việc viết thay vì đọc. Bạn cũng nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I write quite often as part of my studies. Besides academic writing, I enjoy composing short stories and keeping a journal because they help me relax and express my creativity.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý chính tả và ngữ pháp, ví dụ từ "breading" không đúng, có thể bạn muốn nói "writing" hoặc "keeping". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn để diễn đạt ý tưởng.

範例: I prefer keeping a journal because it allows me to express my thoughts clearly. Moreover, it helps me organize my daily activities and remember important events.

建議: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như "trend" trong ngữ cảnh này, và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn.

範例: In my opinion, the topics I write about will change as I grow older and gain more experiences. For instance, I might write about my future career, which is not my current focus.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "all right by hand". Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn.

範例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more efficient. However, I sometimes write by hand, especially when I want to remember information better or write personal letters.

× it makes me relax and unwind

✓ it makes me relaxed and unwind

The verb 'makes' should be followed by an adjective to describe the state caused, so 'relax' should be 'relaxed' to correctly express the feeling. 'Unwind' is a verb and should be parallel in form; better to say 'relaxed and unwound' or 'relax and unwind' as two verbs. Here, 'relax' as adjective is needed.

× I prefer breading of journal because I can express my thoughts

✓ I prefer writing a journal because I can express my thoughts

The word 'breading' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'writing'. Also, 'of journal' is incorrect; it should be 'a journal' to indicate the activity of writing a journal.

× Moreover, it is also a good choice to organize my daily routine and remember what I have done

✓ Moreover, it is also a good way to organize my daily routine and remember what I have done

The phrase 'a good choice to organize' is awkward; 'a good way to organize' is more natural. 'Choice' usually refers to selecting between options, while 'way' refers to method or manner.

× the things I write will trend as I grow up and gain more experiences

✓ the things I write will change as I grow up and gain more experience

The word 'trend' is incorrectly used; the correct verb is 'change'. Also, 'experiences' should be singular 'experience' when referring to accumulated knowledge or life experience.

× I might write about a career which I don't focus on now

✓ I might write about a career that I don't focus on now

Using 'which' in restrictive clauses is less common in spoken English; 'that' is preferred. Also, 'focus on' is correct preposition usage here.

× sometimes I choose all right by hand because it makes me remember information better and writing personal letters

✓ sometimes I choose all right by hand because it helps me remember information better and write personal letters

The phrase 'choose all right by hand' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; possibly 'write all right by hand' is intended. Also, 'makes me remember' should be 'helps me remember' for correct meaning. 'Writing' should be 'write' to parallel 'remember'.