写作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "compose a short stories" nên là "compose short stories" hoặc "write short stories"). Bạn nên tránh lặp từ ("or or") và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn để hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, I write a lot because it is part of my studies. I often write short stories or keep a journal, which helps me relax and unwind.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ "keeping journal all" không đúng, nên là "keeping a journal". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để câu mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I prefer keeping a journal because it allows me to express my thoughts. Moreover, it helps me organize my daily routine and remember what I have done.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác (ví dụ: "my experience become difficult" nên là "my experiences will become more complex"; "the carrier" nên là "career"). Bạn nên dùng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để truyền đạt ý hiệu quả hơn.

範例: Yes, I think the things I write will change as I grow up and gain more experiences. For example, in the future, I might write more about my career, which I don't focus on now.

建議: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn nên dùng liên từ phù hợp hơn để nối ý (ví dụ: "Additionally" có thể thay bằng "However" để thể hiện sự đối lập). Ngoài ra, câu cuối nên chỉnh lại để ngữ pháp chính xác hơn.

範例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more efficient. However, I also write by hand when I want to remember information better or write personal letters.

× I really compose a short stories or or keep a journal because it makes me feel relaxed and unwind.

✓ I really compose short stories or keep a journal because it makes me feel relaxed and unwind.

The phrase 'a short stories' is incorrect because 'stories' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct form is 'short stories' without 'a'.

× Well, I have a preference for keeping journal all because I can express my thoughts.

✓ Well, I have a preference for keeping a journal because I can express my thoughts.

The word 'journal' is a countable noun and requires an article 'a' when singular. Also, 'all' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The correct phrase is 'keeping a journal'.

× Moreover, it is also organized my daily routine and remember what I do.

✓ Moreover, it also helps me organize my daily routine and remember what I do.

The original sentence lacks a proper verb structure. 'It is also organized my daily routine' is incorrect. The sentence needs a verb like 'helps me' followed by the base verbs 'organize' and 'remember' to make sense.

× Well, I think yes, of course, because I will grow up and my experience become difficult.

✓ Well, I think yes, of course, because I will grow up and my experiences will become difficult.

The noun 'experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the context. Also, the verb 'become' should be in future tense 'will become' to agree with 'will grow up'.

× For example, the carrier, it is also a topic that I did remember in the future, but now I don't focus on.

✓ For example, my career is also a topic that I will remember in the future, but now I don't focus on it.

The word 'carrier' is incorrect; the correct word is 'career'. Also, 'did remember in the future' is incorrect tense usage; it should be 'will remember in the future'. The sentence also needs the pronoun 'it' at the end for clarity.

× For example, the carrier, it is also a topic that I did remember in the future, but now I don't focus on.

✓ For example, my career is also a topic that I will remember in the future, but now I don't focus on it.

The pronoun 'it' is necessary at the end of the sentence to refer back to 'career'. Omitting it causes the sentence to be incomplete.

× Additionally, I choose writing by hand because it helps me remember information better and writing personal letters.

✓ Additionally, I choose writing by hand because it helps me remember information better and write personal letters.

The conjunction 'and' should connect two verbs in the same form. 'Helps me remember' is followed by 'write' not 'writing'. Using 'writing' here is incorrect.